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Inner Liberty

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Inspiration’s spent cartridge, having out of the blue shot its insight bolt from out of sight, hangs, bridge ridge ego echo [s]kidding between indifferent indigence and indignant insignificance with polychromatical iridescent independent resonance.

Aspirations elsewhere appeared in suspended animation, arrested as if Time and Space had conspired to offset kinetic energy wiring siring to fire the Ages with some aeon neon neant light dissolving need for conceptual anchors. Inner liberty retained and sustained relevence, solving descriptions of descriptions of inside/outside interdependant fractal interface tracings pacing the space outline of straight line meta-mode mind-sets.

A state me[a]ntal line, desperate to [t]race light, as if its existence depended upon its s[p]eed, soars, curving, arching, starching star I Ching through the marching universe, attempting to reach, underscore, and underline itself. 

Standing upon no ceremony, light quark sparks affect all levels of cosmic consciousness until the circle reforms an image impression expression of universal harmony.

Emotions long to [l]ink the pages of the Present, intertwining Past and Future, and, in letters large as life, decipher themselves, decode the ingenuous genius or GENE-I-US emoticons so near, and yet so far.

Up and over, to where, hitting, the lead layers of primary consciousness, 'wait' changed state as weight dissolved, and led away from the temptation of falling back on the memory's backwash flashback switchbacking and side tracking up and down upon a semi colon black background, - back to and from basics. ...

A-muse-sing contradiction in terms, as the bridge between Whence/ Wither and  Cause/Effect suddenly spanned the echo relay race of Eternity's comings and goings, ebbings and flowings, knowing and unknowing as the cycle geared up and peered/appeared over hair-splitting layers of primary unconsciousness ...

The sleeper seeks to wake, - awakening unlooked for in this temporal continuum.  Fake break takes time out for its own acorn ache sake without making flaking rhyme. The chronological water shed the logical and fed from Chronos' legendary meal, taking from the Gods from which he himself once partook while spinning topsy-turvy among the blue and green rings around Saturn's void.

Kernel, unrooted from the inner recesses of the mind - that dark fertile area where creativity restlessly and relentlessly anticipates release, - bursts into nut gut activity.  Nevertheless, innovation although funnelled through holistic channels, is frequently considered cancerous by those who refute themselves, or fear to recognize inner liberty.Explosion of consciousness calls all - especially itself - into question. 

Warp and weft, bereft of references, dance a double helix under the sum of understanding, st[r]anding both apart from and a part of the hole that leads the whole into and out from itself.

Truth’s essential essence reflects prismatically and chromatically upon all aspects of awareness, the soul works on the Will to redefine the Way as harmony and chaos complete each other as cosmic and karmic interplay evolve revolving around each other – yin, yang, learning yearning earning spurning before returning to city zen.

From first letters to final ph[r]ase, alpha to omega, [l]inked upon the page, read words spread across white sheet.... No meager ephemeral echo or timeless trace stocked upon random memory,

There is neither full stop nor one stop shop.  The dots continue to race onwards, replace and reposition each other as morse code  inroads through reception into perception and out through introspection or possibly deception – self or other... wise - punctuating the whole until the hole becomes an end in itself opening onto infinite options...

Borderline inspiration spans yet spurns ego echo… nowhere, everywhere, are found both to wear and to tear the same surround.  Wave lengths ripple as inspiration's spent cartridge hangs upon silent peaks ... eyes speak silence...




8 May 1989, 18 April 2005

Author notes

néant : French ... void, nothing


For early version see below

Inner Liberty Version 1997


The spent cartridge of inspiration hangs in mid air, arrested as if Time and Space did conspire to offset that energy which aspires to fire the ages, and shatter the need for conceptual anchors. Awaiting the meeting which would mutate mate to mating, pivot and pillow word challenge the anchors of Tie and Place, the immortality of the soul, seek to block the spirit’s mating/meeting with itself.

A straight line, desperate to [t]race with light itself, as if its life depended upon its speed, soars, curving, through the universe attempting to reach, underscore, and underline itself. Light affects all levels of cosmic consciousness until the circle reforms an image of universal harmony.

Emotions long to [l]ink the pages of the Present, intertwining Past and Future, and, in letters large as life, decipher themselves, decode the genius so near, and yet so far. The door of insight and enlightenment is ever ajar, - though it often seems too narrow to all who ephemerally flicker through their three score years and ten.

The sleeper seeks to wake, - awakening unlooked for in this temporal continuum. Kernel, unrooted from the inner recesses of the mind - that dark fertile area where creativity restlessly anticipates release, - bursts into activity. Innovation is considered cancerous by many who would their inner selves refute, or fear to know. The universal soul awaits the inspiration to send the sap soaring, outpouring at all levels. Tendrils tentatively touch, the tenderly tease the tortured synapses of the spirit. Explosion of consciousness calls all - especially itself - into question. Truth’s essential essence reflects prismatically on all aspects of awareness, the soul works on the Will to redefine the Way.

The sleeper wakes, works on the Will, finds, refines, and redefines the Way.

– Prose Poem written 8 May 1989 and 28 September 1997
Written September 26th, 1997

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  • FallinUpTheStairs
    January 5, 2007
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    This has lovely wording and so on, the point you made were well articulated and had a lovely sentiment. Sadly though, this wasn't really th form I was looking for in the contest.

    Thankyou for entering.

  • Loren
    April 8, 2005
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    Amazing.

    You were right, some vocabulary that was a bit challenging for me, I'll get the dictionary out later and do some research, I have too much of a head ache right now, it's amazing I even managed to make any sense of it. However, I loved it. I've never read something like this before and it always does help to read new things every day. I have read a small amount of your work and all of it has been just breath taking.
    You show great talent and passion for poetry and different styles of it. I liked the way it ended, because I just think it was a good end. The whole poem was very thought-provoking if not a little confusing for my inferior mind.
    Well done, keep writing.
    I will go far enough to use up my last few points that I have just earned to applaud this, it really deserves it.

  • account disabled
    April 5, 2005
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    the place where spiral's end has placed never meets it's beginning for it would form a circle therefore it avoids perfection...such us a clock which will loose it hands at 11:59:59 59)
    perfection is death
    turmoil is life
    12:00 is just an illussion
  • fasterthanU
    April 1, 2005
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    very interesting piece, to say the least. definitely thought provoking- well, at least for me. it doesn't take much to send my mind into a downward spiral... good job on this!!

    ~tyler
  • Warhol
    April 1, 2005
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    Mysterious

    I love poems like this. Difficult to understand but I know it probably either means a great deal to the author which I like for its mysterious quality, or it could just be a bunch of random crap the author wrote, but in this case I know it probably has some great meaning to it. Reminds me alot of Jim Morrisons stuff in a loose way, sort of the way he spoke atleast haha. I try to write stuff similar to this occasionally.
  • Subliminal Message
    April 1, 2005
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    Makes me think.
  • DDsithstriker
    April 1, 2005
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    Nicely written, but it seems that the paragraphs are written in some runnon sentences. Though the content was good, I really didn't catch the message portrayed. Could you write back and explain the meaning.

    ~Justin~
  • madchik58
    April 1, 2005
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    I found thid piece a bit odd, its very good just different.. I love ir though!! You have a lot of talent

    Great write and keep it up!!

    Drea

  • after-dark
    April 1, 2005
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    Hmm,A bit diffrent but that may be why I liked this one,It had a very cool feel here to it..Great work.
  • Bella Muerte
    April 1, 2005
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    Very nice. I like how it was different. The only problem was that I got kind of lost while reading it, what is the meaning? The message?
    Very nice write though.

    //Rock On\\

  • Momma17
    April 1, 2005
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    wow, kool stuff

  • Lyrical Soul silver member
    April 1, 2005
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    I am unable to read this in it's entirety at the moment. I will bookmark and come back to it (after I've had more coffee ) What I've read so far is wonderful but this is not a write to just read through quickly. I'll be back.

    ~Lyrical

  • Lovely Luci
    April 1, 2005
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    Bravo

    This was definately a different piece. I loved the feeling of freedom that I got from it, but that could just be because I'm sick. Well done and bravo
  • The New Archers
    April 1, 2005
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    Seize the day, my brother!

  • Bethie
    April 1, 2005
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    ok. I am commenting because I always try to comment on every poem I read. But I'll be honest. I have no clue what the message is. I found I couldn't really focus on it, but that's just me. I'm sure it is really powerful.
  • lilb420
    April 1, 2005
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    this is very well congrats this is a very good poem i dont know how u have ben given such a good talent and perfect potential to write with great write write on

  • April 1, 2005
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    Very amazing, Im not much for prose, but I liked the point you offered up here. Good job.

  • ten
    April 1, 2005
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    wow. amazing stuff.

  • Am8ur
    April 1, 2005
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    i will be perfectly honest, i have read this piece 3 times, now i get it, i quite enjoyed it. You are a great writer. VERY WELL DONE!!!!! keep up the great work. Til

  • neurosine gold member
    April 1, 2005
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    Inner liberty leads to external lberty. But either way, you still gotta conform. CONFORM!

  • EstherG
    April 1, 2005
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    Normally, I'm not a fan of poetry (or prose) that gets bogged down in a cloggy line structure, or is too aware of its own self-importance...you've actually worked this out beautifully, in that it could stand alone as either poery or prose, and at the same time is not at all boggy or pretentious. I've bookmarked it to read through again, as I think it deserves more thought than a first reading can give, but this is lovely - well thought out, well presented and intelligent.

  • LdyBrknWing gold member
    March 30, 2005
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    This is, once again, brilliant, my friend! (I'm going to have to find a good Thesaurus, huh???) While the entirety of the piece was amazing, I have to say that, for some reason, that third stanza is the one I most closely identified with! But this was, in whole, another remarkable write! You, my friend, are truly a genius!
    Paula

  • MargaretG silver member
    March 30, 2005
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    Yes, this is what I call prose poetry. You have used rhyme, meter, alliteration, assonance and consonance, not to mention simile and metaphor in this tour de force of philosophic thought. Just one example is "Warp and weft, bereft of references". Your huge vocabulary and active wit serve your contemplations.
    I see what you are doing with letters in parentheses, but I feel that the words may be clearer connected with "and".
    The breadth of vocabulary takes this out of reach of many readers.

  • ShatteredSilverStar
    March 30, 2005
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    awesome writing, it's about time i find some super deep poetry on this site, way to go, great job with that, keep up the good work and do not stop writing, also please feel free to give my page a visit and leave a comment on whatever catches your eye!

    la reina

  • Bungabear
    March 30, 2005
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    Great

    Wow. You've been doing some serious thinking. I like that. Good poem. I like the style and the the word and metaphorical usage gives it a kind pulsing/swirling image. Great work!

    ~Josh

  • puzzledone121
    March 30, 2005
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    interesting..is that what you call poetic essay? ...The spent cartridge of inspiration hangs in mid air, arrested as if Time and Space did conspire to offset that energy which aspires to fire the ages, to shatter the need for conceptual anchors.
    inner liberty..liberates one's thoughts anchored on the norm...free to be original in concept...enjoyed the double meanings of words with letters in parenthesis...too many ideas lumped into this and i dunno if im just too sleepy to miss the inter-relationships of the paragraphs... i mean some....lol

  • AgeofAquarius
    March 30, 2005
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    X cellent

    Truth’s essential essence reflects prismatically and chromatically upon all aspects of awareness, the soul works on the Will to redefine the Way as harmony and chaos complete each other as cosmic and karmic interplay evolve revolving around each other ...

    Very deep evolution of a version of reality MM.... It is a writing to be bookmarked for furher consideration rather than just passed thru...

  • french poet
    March 30, 2005
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    It took me a bit of time to really appreciate the concept of this work... and I might have to come back later on to fully appreciate it! Thanks for sharing anyway!

  • ClaireFun
    March 30, 2005
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    i too will have to come back and read it later as my mind closed down half way through. I've decided to blame it on the stress of my day making it difficult to think too deeply about things like this, and not just a reaction to your work! I rarely have an adult conversation during the day, let alone one containing long words...

  • Eeyores Buddy
    March 30, 2005
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    wow this is really good! This is unique, diffrent and has the wow factor! Great write and well done. keep writing!

    katy

  • LadyUnique silver member
    March 30, 2005
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    i've bookmarked this piece to read again later as it's the kind of work which requires a few concentrated reads to get the full gist of it.
    excellent use of vocabulary and the () which cause the mind to think in two directions

  • truembrace
    March 29, 2005
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    Ok... mmmm.. I'm going to come back to this and read it earlier in the day when I'm not quite as spent in my brain matter. I have to say in what I did read through the first time, it's quite the impressive loop of words and concepts.

    I'm sure your vocabulary in this and finding the full 'gest' of your meaning is worth investing the time - but midnight's my shut off time for thoroughly comprehensible critiques on such brain candy as this.

    best regards,
    kimberly

  • Abscessed
    March 27, 2005
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    wow i love your style...it is so unique and fresh. I love coming across these breaths of fresh air on AP
    well done

  • March 27, 2005
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    Very interesting indeed, alotof complicated words!.. i'l have to look some up in a dictionary!..
    Great write, I hope you coninue to write such great pieces.I haven't read anything like this before but its certain that reading new things is always a good thing.!
    nice keep it up
    -marsinlove-
  • rosebud
    March 27, 2005
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    interesting... very interesting...
  • madchik58
    March 27, 2005
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    This is an amazing piece of writing!! I love it! Its a new interesting read for me, i havnt found anything similar to this in a while.
    Great write and continue to do so!!

    Drea
  • Little Midnight
    March 27, 2005
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    As always, I love your poetry and all the double meanings when you have extra letters in brackets. My absolutely favorite part:

    "Warp and weft, bereft of references, dance a double helix under the sum of understanding, st(r)anding both apart from and a part of the hole that leads the whole into and out from itself."

    Must be the repitition of the "ref" sound and how the sounds lead into each other.

  • KatSanchez
    March 27, 2005
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    As I am a little slow this evening... I had to read this twice. I love the concept of this piece. This is very well written either way that it is read. Great job on this.
  • RandomInertia
    March 27, 2005
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    An interesting spin on the soul of the machine. It has been done numerous times, as we humans love to personify things, but you manages to put a spin on it all your own.

  • Sensual Sapphire
    March 27, 2005
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    Creativity is a wonderful and wonderous thing. This is both of those. The only thing "wrong" with this is that it is a series of run~on sentences. It works if you are going for the train of thought take with this. I know I hate punctuation but it really does change the meaning of things. Thought provoking

  • suseann
    March 26, 2005
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    ????????--Sorry to say,I am at a total loss.Not articulate enough to understand the message.Am sure it speakes to a more educated soul then my self.But can respect your emince effort.~~~~~Suseann
  • Shadowraven
    March 26, 2005
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    Thanks for clearing that up.
  • Shadowraven
    March 26, 2005
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    I really enjoyed the poem and thank you for the great read. I cannot even begin to compliment you on your flawless use of internal rhyme and synchopation in the rythm of it. The almost discreet usage of accents within words and the way you shifted them around constantly. Another really awesome feature you made great use of that I must comment on was the surreptitious use of words beginning with the same consonants. (I really do wish I could recall the correct term for that particular effect.) I applaud this piece of art in all earnestness. Thanks again for the awesome read. I do have only one question though. I seen several letters set apart, the [p] being in brackets as opposed to parentheses like the others. My questions is this: What is the meaning of these letters?
  • relaxedskater
    March 26, 2005
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    amazing

    I loved it!!!! it was an amazing poem i thouight!!! i will deffinetly print this one out and put it on my wall!! i am deff gonna read all your poetry!!! it was wonderful imagery and descripive The universal soul awaits the inspiration to send the sap soaring, outpouring at all levels. Tendrils tentatively touch, tenderly tease the tortured synapses of the spirit. Explosion of consciousness calls all - especially itself - into question."

    that was an awsome part

  • slender spider
    March 26, 2005
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    Wonderful if not (slightly) overwhelming imagery.
    I need to read you slowly!

    My favorite part right here:

    "The universal soul awaits the inspiration to send the sap soaring, outpouring at all levels. Tendrils tentatively touch, tenderly tease the tortured synapses of the spirit. Explosion of consciousness calls all - especially itself - into question."

    I am particularily fond of tree imagery, in addition to themes of transformation. You've managed to evoke both here.

    Nicely done. I'm off to investigate further.

  • Night Hope gold member
    March 26, 2005
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    '...The universal soul awaits the inspiration to send the sap soaring, outpouring at all levels. Tendrils tentatively touch, tenderly tease the tortured synapses of the spirit. Explosion of consciousness calls all - especially itself - into question. Truth’s essential essence reflects prismatically and chromatically upon all aspects of awareness...'

    At least she got some sleep!!! LOL...Oy vey...this is an amazing piece...I adore any writing about writing...the craft of it, the Inspiration behind it, the writers that breathe it...another exquisite penning...Oh, you are the Poet, aren't you!?! How delightful...ok, I'm hooked now...on to the next segment...but first, I gotta get some more coffee!!! Have a cup??? Wanda
    Edited on Mar 26, 6:42 because ''.

  • Duana gold member
    March 26, 2005
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    This is deep, and too much for my brain right now...it's 2 am here!
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