Peering through a window as an emoticon
that controls thoughts and behaviors
with a psyche that is conscious
and yet is barely in touch
with external reality…
comprising a collection of instincts
designed to satisfy
the inner desires
of the most primitive needs…
Fraudulent and distressful,
frazzled, strained-
a silent fan and enthusiast
of unbridled hallucinations
let loose here for amusement-
a creative fancy of communications
appearing out of the corner of the haze
and parachuting slowly down on the imagination
with smiley feet running around
the freeform sculptures of the mind
while allowing an untamed freedom
to do with it as you see fit…
Feeling like a passing abstraction
blowing through a timeslice of society
in and among the fraternities
that associate with others in congenial ways,
the emoticon, just one yellow taxi of outreach
in ever-changing backgrounds, topics,
occupations, and interests.
Imbibed by young yearning minds-
Sometimes tasted like a frozen mixture
similar to a sugary sherbert with shaved ice,
sometimes like a hotly heated spicy entrée
consumed in a hopeless situation,
and at other times a frenzied frolic of fancy
on the inflammations of the senses
and playing like a illusionary violin
the bands of tissue
that connect the tongue
to the monitor screen…
At times a complicated but simple gift
that may be acquired
without due effort or cost,
with just a few strokes of inquisitive fingers...
Governed by agreements, norms, customs, and standards,
let loose into the fading consciousness
to metamorphize into a shiny,
brassy wind instrument
trumpeting loudly the tune of fear
and then,
seizing the emotions by the hand,
leaping through the shattering glass panes
into the next dimension
with cute freaky freckles
in pales of lusty love,
and with a basket of flowering weeds
approaching the next object of love
with a fragrance of wild abandon...
Then, exhausted,
falling into a deep smiling sleep
never to fully awaken,
existing in the twilight
of my world
behind the dripping glass
of your digital desires.
Author notes
..........................This is 'An Abstraction of an Emoticon'
which I wrote for this contest but then forgot to enter it
in my writing frenzy...
So this is the official contest entry...
This is a secret self-analysis of me as a writer...!
which is now not a secret...
all changes will be done to this one.
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Written March 20th, 2005
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Once again you blew my mind away..you always have used a good vocabulary that always makes your work seem that much more professional..I felt like I was rushing past the words hoping to see theres more to come in the write..when I got to the end I was satisfied with the read..another amazing write!
-Lis
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Wow .. this is long, isn't it? I won't post the entire stanza I enjoyed, but let me say that I never thought to connect all kinds of poetry to taste .. maybe poetry about food, sex, things that stir the senses in that way .. but I get the impression you're talking about ALL of your poetry .. wow.
You definately don't have self esteem issues, though, do you? Nothing wrong with that .. it's my theory that one of the reasons we don't have many true artists left in the world is because we're all trained that we're all equal, and this leads most of us to feel pretentious and arrogant when writing meaningful poetry .. I'm glad to see not everyone has been affected this way!
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Very well written, my friend. You have given me an extremely vivid picture of who you are. Really I know personally a few people on this site, but the rest, I don't really care what they look like. I'd rather get to know "who" you are, what kind of person you are, what lays in your mind, and how you perceive all that is wihtin. Sometimes I like to make up my own image of what everyone looks like, rather then really see reality. Exquisit piece, Good luck.
♥ Eve -
It was very descriptive. What's with the picture in the back ground though? It distracted me from getting into your poem more. All-in-all, the poem was fine. Keep on writing though, you have talent.
~V~ -
Very oringinal idea here. I am an adjective whore haha, so this poem reallllly did it for me. Your adjectives were beautiful and added so much to this already amazing piece of work.
sometimes like a hotly heated spicy entrée
consumed in a hopeless situation,
and at other times a frenzied frolic of fancy
on the inflammations of your brain
playing like a illusionary violin
those bands of tissue
that connect your tongue
to the monitor screen…
Wow...this was my favorite part of the whole piece. It was here that you really captivated me and made me really intrigued and amazed with this. I love it.
Wonderful piece of work you've got here. Keep it up, and I'm definitely looking forward to more from you.
Well done! -
Deep write which I liked a lot deep write, keep writing because this was fascinating
All the best,
Pozo
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i really like this...not only was the imagery spot on...it was deep and amazing!! you had so much vocab...i envy you...
i don't know what else to say...GREAT JOB!!!
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Very VERY descriptive, dude, this was awesome! It was such a extraordinary piece that really has captured my heart, with such description filled with such imagination and emotion. BRAVO! I shall applaud you!
-Veira Ash -
Very well done.
Well this one is chock full of imagery and descriptive passages that you keep reading and reading and it has a ring of a masterpiece here. Excellent work and one that I will come back to read again and applaud. -
This was very well siad and emotional. BRAVO!!!!!!!
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