There was a lighthouse built on the shores in 1881
Open just three years it's purpose now was done
The shining light was to shine no more
For a new one was built a few short miles away
Pinnacle Overlook would now show the way
From out across the open sea
a ship came sailing to to the swells
The Captain asked to board his daughther
for a fortnight, as she did fare the sea so well
Lovely Skye Deveraux bid her father farewell
setting up chaperone residence at the local hotel
She fell in great favor with other guest all around
found friends quickly,and wanted to explore the town
So they planned an afternoon outing to the abandoned lighthouse
as the teens were a curious sort
Skye seemed reluctant and somewhat withdrawn
she dropped her delicate lace hanky before they left for home
Upset she told her companion,Justin Welch,
"I must go back to find the hanky by myself"
As the group headed home, they stopped when they heard a scream
An immediate search for Skye, proved nowhere to be seen
A pool of blood, a lace hanky, that's all
found mysteriously in the lighthouse hall
No trace of her was ever uncovered
It's said the place is haunted with screams of Skye and no other
The ship that carried her father never did return
Of his daughter's fate, never did he learn
If you ever happen to see the haunted lighthouse by the shore
The ghost of Skye Deveraux may haunt you forever more
Author notes
Written October 17th, 2002
In a list
A contest entry
- Poems with a story! by I Am No Poet.
450 points, ended March 10, 2004, 65 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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love it!
You did a great job on this poem Sis. What a story. Your imagery is so good as you tell the reader of the area and the people.
Ethereal Melody
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Aw this poem reminds me of Boston, where I lived for so long. The mystery of the sea is tantalizing on its own, but a mystery ON the sea is even more tantalizing!!
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FRIGGIN AWESOME!!
HOLY CRAP...this is absolutly positively amazing and a perfect story version of a poem i love it...good luck!! -
Blew my socks off!
Wow! What a story! And I love stories that involve the sea! Well done -
Good story/poem! Enjoyed reading it again! Good Luck in the contest, Sis!
<3 Maureen
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Excellent: just a few spelling/repitition errors. Great story. ~~BonnieQ
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exciting and flowed well love ghost stories
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I forgot to put a verdict... oopsies. :o)
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Oooh, creepy. I love it. I'm saving this as a favorite. That was just an awesome write. :o)
~*~Gi~*~ -
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Okay I seriously felt chills run down my spine! I'm not joking! This is a great poem. Very well written. Sad but scary. Great job :) And thanx for commenting on my poem. ~Rainna~ -
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such a tragic tale! gave me chill bumpas! -
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AWESOME...very haunting without being overdone. -
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:-D WOW!! i thought this was fantastic.. Its one of my faves:-) its so spooky and told so well... its beautifully written.. -
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Again, Susan. a great spook. Glad there are no lighthouses around here. It is safe to carry me hanky. But this was a delightfully spooky tale. Thank you..L -
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Mylawd. This was great. Told a good story. Methinks I'll check out more of your stuff. Very nice.
-Me -
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This is very well done, eerie and intriguing. I enjoyed the story and the style very much.
~Colleen -
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Poor Miss Deveraux! Her life undone...she broke rule #1...NEVER leave the group!!! ;-) Really enjoyed your rhyming scheme and your spooky theme! Like others said before, I want more!!! :-) -
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A life for a hanky? No no no Susan Hon: what happened to the hero? Moral of the story? Do not take a lace hankey with you on visiting a light house ... LOL -
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Whack back to the reality of great works. Thank you Susan -tj- -
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I love this Susan. Well penned and the way you present it just gives an eerie feel..I'm spooked easily though.....Desiree -
excellent
very well written
holds it own the whole way through
nice job!
~*~adriana~*~ -
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Nice story Susan, didn't scare me though! :D haha -Brandon -
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once again amazing!! the images of the lace hanky and the lighthouse are very good. spooky and yet down to earth. great write. blessings!! -
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A wonderful ghostly poem, just perfect for the season. IM about your progress, Susan, ok..All my love and energy, Blessings, Daoine. -
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Susan, I love scary stories at this time of year, so I am very appreciative on yours here. I am going to try to write one of my own before halloween gets here, please look for it. Excellent job you did here, perhaps there are more you can share with us? Thank you, Brazos -
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really great. I love lighthouses. LOL I have photos of them all over my house. this is really great!!!!!!!!! thank you. -
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Spooky....you are going to give me nightmares my friend ;o)...
I really liked this Susan :o) -
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I love stories of hauntings, the supernatural..old light houses are an excellent setting for a bit of fright!!! a scary tale told well...enjoyed this a lot!!! -
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I like haunting ones....very well penned I enjoyed very much......Janet -
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Ohh hun great story!!! You are so good at this type of writing, I can't do stories, I have tried...Great for this time of year...;)
Lots of hugs,, ~ Ce -
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Incredibly HAUNTING write!
This sent electric terror down my spine, and through my heart...
JUST the way I *LIKE IT*!
This has just been added to my *favorites*!!!!
OOO....delicious. Can't get enough of this one.
Somehow I hear the crashing of waves, and a scream echoing over them....
(steeping in the moment)
Thank you for showing me this Haunted Lighthouse...I'll keep the lights on for you, if you're brave enough to stay with me while I explore...I promise. -
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I ain't skeered! I liked the story, well written.
RR -
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Spooky! Love a good tale of a haunting! :) -
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ooohh spooky... you are on a roll with these scary ones.. glad you don't live next door lol..you'd scare me to daeth with ghost stories..lol... nice work Sis...~~~GILL~~~xx -
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Oohh.....a spooky write.......I love this Susan.
Spine chilling tales...very appropriate for this time of year...
Well done.
Ann -
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Sis I did comment on the other one you posted twice but I love to read again for I llove a good scare -
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Perfect for the season. Love a good scare! Well written -
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Bone chilling write Susan ! Captivating and enthralling !
(There is a good image of a lighthouse in the backgrounds, I think it is in 'Themes')
Wonderful story.
Take every care,
Sammy
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