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To Bee or not to Bee

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Aerodynamics ...is just not it's style..
ungainly flight pattern at best..
striped like a zebra...but
orange and black.. with a stinger
attached.. (when depressed)

These strange little creatures...
go backwards and forth...
Mother nature's small helper
I'm sure...they can fly in reverse
when they need to disperse...
watch out!...it's come in through the
door.........

It gathers it's pollen...all sticky
and sweet..on it's legs...then it
carries it home...this aerodynamic
catastrophy.. gathers nectar to feed
to the drones.......

This strange little creature...all plumped
up and proud...rides the wind like a
barrage balloon...he rarely will sting you...
as he knows that's his doom..so he leaves
you in peace..... and perfume........








Author notes

I saw the first Bumble Bee today....
Written March 19th, 2005

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A contest entry

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  • cutiepie gold member
    May 24, 2005
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    Yes, I agree..Hamlet was good Glad you enjoyed this, many thanks for your comments


  • Juliette Rose
    May 24, 2005
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    That was a really good description of a bumble bee. The title is catchy, and I just read Hamlet, which by the way is very good.


  • cutiepie gold member
    March 20, 2005
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    Yes.... the picture was all I could find...no workers to be found, but you were spot on It should show a worker, not a "Bumble" Glad you liked the poem

  • cutiepie gold member
    March 20, 2005
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    Many thanks

  • cutiepie gold member
    March 20, 2005
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    Many thanks for your kind comments, it is appreciated


  • Deke
    March 20, 2005
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    Very good poem that you have here Lynne. I never expected to see one about Bumble bees. I didn't know that Bumble bees made honey; I knew that honey bees do, but they aren't the same thing--just cousins. Anyway, the poem is good.
    Damon D. Brewer

  • ecrivain01
    March 19, 2005
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    I like it too. The pic is great too. Good match.


  • Midnight Lace
    March 19, 2005
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    This strange little creature...all plumped
    up and proud...rides the wind like a
    barrage balloon...he rarely will sting you...
    as he knows that's his doom..so he leaves
    you in peace..... and perfume........

    I really like that. It was an awesome ending to a remarkable poem. I don't care for bees that much. I think they are cute. Just don't care for them to be flying around me. I am always afraid that they'll sting me and I have never been stung before knock on wood and I don'tcare too. You penned this well. Good luck in the contest.
    Smoochie

  • cutiepie gold member
    March 19, 2005
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    Many thanks


  • Saknika
    March 19, 2005
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    Wow, this is a very informative and interesting poem. I never acctually thought I'd ever see a poem about a bumble bee, and yet here we have just that. Great job! Good luck and thanks for entering.

  • cutiepie gold member
    March 19, 2005
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    Aw....thats not good ...Glad you liked the poem and stay clear of bees

  • weirdo in the park
    March 19, 2005
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    thats great, i loved it, i hate bees though i am highly allergic, one sting adn im gone.
    any way great write.


  • cutiepie gold member
    March 19, 2005
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    welsh?....lathwen...has a ring to it...like the welsh lilt Glad you liked this even though the flow faltered


  • LadyElle
    March 19, 2005
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    Adorabel

    Very cute, very descriptive, well written. I'm not a fan of bees, but this was simply adorable i love the way you described it, thouhg i thought it could have a little better flow, it still was realy good and I like it! Great write and keep it up!
    ~Lathwen

  • cutiepie gold member
    March 19, 2005
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    Many thanks Timothy ...glad you enjoyed this

  • cutiepie gold member
    March 19, 2005
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    Thank you for the lovely comments I really do appreciate your kindness


  • poeticweaver gold member
    March 19, 2005
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    Great!

    How creative you always write, like the pic and imagery you pen my poetic friend, keep up the sweet works....!

    -Timothy


  • Kindredblood
    March 19, 2005
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    Excellent

    Awesome write, so ful lof color and light, adding depth with your lovley and wonderous way od describing everything in such deep and vivid detail.
    Beautiful poem/story, easy to read and follow, and really enjoyible to have the privilage of reading such a masterfully written tale.

  • cutiepie gold member
    March 19, 2005
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    Many thanks I am pleased you enjoyed it


  • Kukana gold member
    March 19, 2005
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    I thought that this was very cute, and written very well... I like the picture too!
    S~

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