There’s a spider in my shower
He’s crawling ‘round my tub.
He’s rather cute and small
But, now, here is the rub.
I must be very careful
He cannot touch my skin.
It happened when I was younger;
Oh, what a mess that I was in.
My face got shiny-peely
And, I could not use my eyes.
So, for that very reason,
I’m plotting his demise.
It’s not fair, I realize
For he’s done nothing wrong.
But, we’re both in the shower
And one does not belong.
Yes, I think it’s fitting,
As fitting as can be,
That he go out with honour
And a burial at sea.
I’ll cry and sing laments
A haunting soft refrain.
And bow my head in sorrow
As he circles down the drain.
©2005
3-17-05
Author notes
I am allergic to spiders. Not the bite, but the act of crawling on me. And yet, I cannot bring myself to kill them if I can help it. Sometimes, it is unavoidable.
Do not know what contest this placing was for:
Gold
Entered in the contest: Show Me The Humor! by Lady Eclipse http://allpoetry.com/contest/1539461
Won the bronze.
This was an entry for the contest: Bugs mud and bordom by Nimrod 2 0 http://allpoetry.com/contest/by/Nimrod%202%200
Did not win or place.
This was an entry for the contest: Turn my frown around by Aldo the great
http://allpoetry.com/contest/1829396
Won the bronze
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This qualifys as an eek, hahaha thanks for your entry and good luck...EEK lol
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Wow…I liked your poem so much. This one happened to me so I could relate to it…the fourth stanza is such a good write…I believe that the spiders and me could co-exist but not in the shower of course…this is such a very enjoyable poem…
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This made me laugh a little. I know how you feel. Everyday when I get my cat's water bowl from outside to change the water, a lot of ants crawl all over it. Now, I know it's not really their fault, as you said, but I make sure that every one of them circles down the drain. (I'm not crazy, I promise...Ha ha) LOL I just read one of your responses to a comment and it made me laugh. "I'm not terrified of them, I just don't want to swell up like a balloon. It's a vanity thing." That's hilarious! Anyway, congrats on the trophy.
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Glad I could be of service. Ants do not bother me, although I do spray them every chance I get. Spiders are just interesting creatures.
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this was a light hearted pomem and I really enjoyed it , this poem woud put a smile on any ones face and thanks for entering
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Thank you for the comment.
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Glad you liked this. It is about a bug, of sorts. No mud, but I had already washed it off in the shower. Hahaha. I was kind of depressed because I killed the spider, usually I just boot them out the door. Shower is another matter.
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HAHAHAHAHA!!! YAAAH FOR YOU!!! *Pfft* I CAN'T STOP LAFFING!!!!
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Congrats on your trophy...to me this was the best! Bravo!
Perfect dead on rhyming without sounding contrived, very funny and creative! Loved it!
PS...i had to add on - i just got up and my brain is still full of cobwebs .
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hahaha!! nice poem. I am also afraid of spiders!
Best wishes and good luck in the contest.
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lol I have to tell you i dont feel sorry for the spider, because i'm terrified of them, its true when I see one in the shower I scream at the top of my lungs and make my mom kill it. anyways great job and good luck ~Lady Eclipse
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Kinda? Must not have been as funny as I thought. LOL Thank you for reading and commenting.
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cute poem... kinda made me laugh, i don't like spiders either
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Thank you. I am not really afraid of them, I just do not want to swell up like a balloon. It is a vanity thing. LOL
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This is a very neat poem! I can really relate to this, since I often have spiders in my shower. The difference, however, is I'm not allergic and I'm deathly afraid of them so I get my mom or dad to get them. I'm just petrified when I see one. Good for you for handling it so well.
Again, very cute poem. Thanks for sharing it! And good luck to you in the contest.
Take care, and God bless!
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I am glad you like it. They are facinating creatures, from afar.
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great write it made me laugh a lot! thanx fopr entering my contest
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Thank you, as always. The comments are appreciated.
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Brilliant, me too but with me it's I cannot stand them on my skin, but will rescue them with a piece of paper, saying"Please please just do not walk on me" funny, this is wonderful, you have my applause, hugs Di
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lol...i like this. you put actually feelings in and made it funny. thats what makes it better i think! good write!
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Thank you. I really like spiders. They are facinaitng creatures. I just cannot let them crawl on my skin. It is not a pretty picture. But my house is full of them because I cannot stand to kill them. I usually just shoo them out of my way, but in the tub is where I have to draw the line. Not enough room for the both of us. LOL Thank you for reading and commenting.
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Beautiful write ,so deep and full of endaring feelings, so many actually fear spiders, though you are the first I have heard of being allergic to them, ouch that must suck, me Im allergic to bees and their butts, amazing one sting from them and its over.
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nice poem you should be proud of it, could you ave a look at some of my poems
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