What a state I'm in...
If only I had made the grade
If only I had been who I'm supposed to be
But instead I let it all fall away
What a state I'm in...
If only I had remained the same
If only I had taken the blame unshaken
But instead I became more and more afraid
What a state I'm in...
You don't know what this life is like
Living every day, praying to be born again
Because it never turned out the way I wanted it to
My self-pitying is the state I'm in
Unable to sing my suffering like I used to
No more undefeated courage
No more guiding light
What a state I'm in...
My self-pitying...
If only I had heeded the warnings
If only I had exceeded expectations
Then I'd be who I'm supposed to be
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Written on 19th March 2005 at 02:04 GMT
Not feeling great... Just a failure.
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i like the repetition of "what a state i'm in..."
it helped with the flow a lot.
my favorite lines were
"My self-pitying is the state I'm in
Unable to sing my suffering like I used to"
those were great.
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wow.. im speachless.... omgsh i have noo clue wit 2 say i loved it.. umm WOW
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You will get it back. I know you will. You just need to take a breath, pick up your guitar, and play. Try playing for Michael. Maybe he will be able to help. If he loves you, he will understand how much it would mean to you. Please try? Don't waste your talent....
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Very nicely written. In a way you took the words out of my heart because that is how I feel. It isn't a nice feeling to be a failure, for I know how it feels. I hope you feel better soon, if you aren't already.
By the way, you have a very nice poem collection.
~Anastasia -
one of your receint best
thats an amazing poem, but whats happened to promp it? I hope your okay and that your okay.
bit more of a critique here.. I like how it flowed and the references to your other work. It's nicely wrapped together and the repeating of 'What a state im in..' works really well without hindering the flow or meaning of the poem. nicely written -
You are soooo not a failure. My Duckie could never be a failure. You are a wonderful person ... I love you sweetie. I wish you would have sen me a message over msn lol. I would've talked then...
~Angel -
I was feeling like a failure a few weeks back when I got a series of really bad marks in school. Amazing how school marks can affect your mood so much. But anyway, I'm sorry you are feeling this way
Haven't stopped by for awhile, so I thought I would leave a little note.
Its a good poem, even if the feelings it was inspired by are not.
-Heather
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