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The Return

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When will my very pleasant friend visit?

She is gentle and sweet.
She is young and vibrant.
She is soft and puffy
like bunches of cotton candy.

When my friend visits She will be strong.
She will chase away the hard ground.
She will cause the grass to sprout.
She will water my cold winter heart
with joy and sprinkles of sunshine.





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Do you know who is personified?


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Written March 18th, 2005

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  • Judith Chandler
    January 14, 2008

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    I like the repetition of words and descriptive phrases though you have made a couple of mistakes that detract a little from this write.

    Thank you for entering my contest.


    • thelordreigns gold member
      January 14, 2008
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      I would really appreciate it if you could point out the mistakes. I am personifying Spring in this write. That is why I capitalize the s in "she." I edited out the two "hers" in the final line.

      I sure wish Spring were here!

      Thank you
      -joanne

      • Judith Chandler
        January 14, 2008
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        The word "will" appears twice in the first line. I think the first one should be deleted. The line would flow better than if you deleted the second "will". But either deletion would be okay, up to you.


  • Blood Slurpie
    June 4, 2005
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    this is way cool, i really enjoyed reading it! :-) keep it up! very nice write! ~julia~


  • Almighty Aphrodite gold member
    April 13, 2005
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    In the winter, we can certainly forget the inviting warmth of spring. I am glad it's back, although where I live we're not totally out of the woods yet when it comes to cold air, rain and bad weather. You have made the spring seem cheerful and lively, which is probably the same thoughts that most of us have when winter finally passes away (at least for nine months out of the year, huh? lol) Your ending lines speak a great deal. Very well done. Thank you for your entry, and I wish you the best of luck.

    Many blessings,

    Raven Aurora


  • thelordreigns gold member
    March 27, 2005
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    Yes, "she" is Spring but you're right, I wrote it so it could different things to different people. Thank you for reading and responding!

  • ShiningStar
    March 26, 2005
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    marvelous

    Is it spring? What a wonderful poem! It could be talking of so many things! It even made me think of my grandchild as his visits are so rare since they live far away and he brightens my day just like a brand new spring day. What a beautiful way to spark the imagination!


  • josh-13
    March 23, 2005
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    Awww, How sweet, Normaly I'd call you a tree hugger But This is one too good of a poem to crack hippy jokes. I like your style, This looks at nature in a whole new way. I realy enjoyed it. Seriously, It's an awesome write.

  • thelordreigns gold member
    March 21, 2005
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    And do you know who she is? It's not nature.


  • forgotten dream
    March 21, 2005
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    this piece left me smiling at the end. i loved your descriptions here, and the personification of nature. it makes me long for spring (since it's grey and pouring rain here) and to see her sprinkles of sunshine. a charming write. keep up the good work! thank you so much for entering and best of luck in the contest <3

  • cognitivecharm
    March 19, 2005
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    hmm.. impressive

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