Starlit whispers of faith untold,
Tears of joy no longer cold,
Bitter memories now all gone,
Light anew fresh from the dawn,
Breathy clouds have filled my head,
My vision's swimming turning red,
I see the light of God's pure love,
My savior greets me with from above,
Pain now seems all to unreal,
Earthly things I no longer feel,
Fear in my heart now starts to pound,
As I see my Family on the ground,
They're all crying dressed in black,
Wishing I could come right back,
I look back at my Savior's face,
And see I'm in the righter place,
So I say now farewell friends,
Death is here a hand he lends,
Death takes me up into the light,
I'm now with God and all his might...
Author notes
It's missing something special, but what?
"We all love Moulin Rouge!"
Written March 18th, 2005
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A contest entry
- Angels [&&] The Afterlife by Death of the Author.
1200 points, ended May 19, 2007, 40 entries
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I like this a lot, I haven't had many Afterlife entries so this much appreciated. Thank you for entering, the rhyme is good and the flow is better x take care and good luck x
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i love how you described leaving to go to heaven. like the after death scenario. i loved this poem. and i thank you for submitting it. good luck!
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"Bitter memories now all gone,Light anew fresh from the dawn,
Breathy clouds have filled my head" I especially loved these lines. It is the righter place. My daughter is only four and everytime we pass a cemetary she says "there are only bodies there mommy, the people went to meet Jesus" Beautiful poem! -
Oh wow!! This was amazingly beautiful my friend!! I just can't wait until I get to make it up to Heaven!! And just live forever in God's wonderous Care!! What a Glorious Day that will be!! I loved your flow and rhyme scheme and just everything!! Keep on writing my friend!! It's amazing!! God Bless You!!
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Aww this is beautiful. You have a natural gift with ehyming poetry. It doesn't look false on the page it flows and reads so naturally. Like a wave of words there is so much movement in your poetry. The way you write is so natural and I love your gift for using imagery it brings your poems off the page and alive. Certainly your words were living in me. I loved this as you can tell I really did enjoy it. There was sadness in it, but also happiness because you were rejoined with Jesus. That was beautiful.
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Excellent
Wow, this is a really powerful piece. I've often reflected on post-death experiences, and I'm usually not able to put them into words. However, this is one of the best I've seen. The separation of stanzas and the rhyme scheme are both excellent. Well done. -
I think this is one of your best and can see that you took your time, this is the potential i'm talking about in you, great write, and I found this so sad and touching at the same time, thinking about dying and seeing your family at your funeral all dressed up crying and all that just is so sad, This is a great perspective of what it may be like, great job, and I appreciate you sharing it with all of AP!
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Hi there,
This was an interesting read. You have done an excellent job here. I hope you keep up the great work.
Best regards to you and yours
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My friend s1l3ntscr34ms said you needed help with points cos of some kind of contest or something...so this was an excellent poem, and I applauded it! Hope it helps
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This was really good I am glad I got to read this. Thanks, so much for sharing this piece with us
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Great job
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Beautiful piece of poetry and art all rolled into one. The structure of it made it that much more of a delight to read. The message was very touching. You are a very impressive writer.
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I really like this poem it gives hope that there is something better in the after, great structure and flow. Keep the dream alive, no matter how many times you think it will die....
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Wonderful rhyme and this held a small meaningful story to help one with death. A family or friend left behind to cope with the pain of someone close to them dying show read this poem of hope. Great Job!
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duurrrrr.... that kinda just put me into an awe state of mind. This was awesome! If I was doing the contest u would have gotten gold. geez, I love this. I am adding u to my favorites, k? God bless, ~347~
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omgsh...WOW! This is so incredibly amazing! Could be one of my most favored pieces I've ever read. This is sure to win in the contest. Good luck! =)
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this is really good lacie, really good....
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