What's the world coming to you ask
Well let me take you on a trip
Across the waves of time
Aboard my tiny mind ship
Taking you to the past
Where all you will see
That men are fighting for survival
Just the same as you and me
Then let me take you
On another trip
Where men are still fighting
Blood from the sword/gun still drips
And yet again come with me
To the future in front of us
Where fighting will still occur
And people will always fuss
So as you see, in my eyes
The world has always be the same
Where war is always the answer
And brings about more shame
Author notes
well i read the rules but when i typed the statement in this box it didn't show up! Just thought i'd point that out and i chose the 5th choice also.
Written March 18th, 2005
A contest entry
- Postmarked: the end of the world by gone bye-bye.
400 points, ended March 23, 2005, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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JOhn
Thanks for reading my work dear.
XOXO
~laura -
Yes BleedSilver. Thanks for reading.
XOXO
~laura -
So true Eddy. Thanks for reading my work.
XOXO
~laura -
JOsh,
Thank you so much! You're just so nice to me
XOXO
~laura -
War and fighting is never the solution to anything. But sometimes you have to stand up for yourself as well. It just depends on what you are standing for. I think you did a nice job with this hun. The flow needs a little work, but the message rings clear and true.
~ John
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Yeah, np. It is true. Maybe someday it will change.
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He who does not learn from mistakes of the past is destined to
repeat them in the future...
Hugs...Eddy -
This is awesome, and so true. The past repeats it's self. I like this one, I give you mad props. The flow was awesome, The vibe awesome, You realy hit the mark on this one. I give you mad props. I realy like it, You did a damn good job on this.
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Bleed Silver
Sadly this is true. Thanks for reading
XOXO
~Laura -
Thanks for telling me of my mistake my dear doug. i shall change it soon as i get a moment!
XOXO
~laura -
I liked the ideas and some of the rhyme expressed here. Very good point o all of those pushing for peace. There is a very small chance we will ever obtain world peace.
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Very well done, Laura. I think there's a typo in the 3rd to the last line. Shouldn't it be "there world has always been the same" rather than "be the same?"
This poem contains much truth, sadly enough. When will we learn. This is one of my favorites of your work!
doug
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Thank you so much for reading!
XOXO
~laura -
Excellent
This poem speaks of the truth. Very well expressed and the truly shared with strong words that can make one really ponder their thoughts...Spoken openly. Yes, given a full view of the world of what is going on around us, to the understanding of the human mind, can anyone justify it?
A very wonderful poem that should be read by everyone! Well written!
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Thank you for saying that i have a poetic gift but remember i get inspiration only from the best!
Neways thanks again.
XOXO
~laura -
Nice and powerful writting
your poem is very well written. The imagery can clearly be seen and felt. How blood drips from a sword / gun is a very powerful statment adn envokes such stronge images. Men fighting, then again what else is new, men always fight. You have a special way with your poetic words. Great work -
nice write
Thank you for reading my work. I really appreicate the comment you left for me and feel free to read more if you like to. Neways I am a peace-maker and that's why i enlisted in the U.S. Army to go make peace, and fix the chaos that others have made.
XOXO
~laura -
Wow, you really nailed it. This topic is one close to my heart. I believe all war is wrong. Nothing that takes our children can ever be right. Well written.
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Thanks you big pimp! LOL glad you like my work as well as my body! LOL
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nice write
The poem is really, really good. I hope u do great in the contest, I got a feeling that the poem could go all the way. Keep up the good work, buddy. -
aw, poor thing! well, best of hopes then
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nice write
Thank you fallen leaves. I hope i do well as well in the contest cuz i've never won anything in my whole entire life!
XOXO
~laura -
Great write, lildevilinblack. You get across your meanings, I like how yopu exprerss things too. Thank you for the time travel, and good luck in the contest.
FallenLeaves
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