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The Great Lies of Life

Meaningless, lies on shattered hearts...
Of reddened scapels, torn hands...
And a mind that has shattered into a million parts.
O' Depression, My friend of hourglass' sands.
Infinite...I lay on your grey seduced dead flowers.

Author notes

whoever said life is sweet...apparently did not live long.
Written March 17th, 2005

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  • starsandmoonshine
    May 19, 2006
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    very different i like it;0

  • AltruisticSociopath
    July 17, 2005
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    Sweet! Yay for depression! Wait... Anyway, this is well-written. Good work.


  • sinningvirgin
    June 7, 2005
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    It's very intersting, and I can relate to it. I like that fact that it was short, that was nice. You write in a different way than I'm used to but I liked it. Good job!
    -cindyxxx

  • Shikai
    March 25, 2005
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    brill

    very well writtin well done i really enjoyed reading it i cant wait to read even more of your brilliant poems and hiakus and sorry i spelt that wrong i am not good at spellin any way well done keep on writing and keep on in


  • care bear love
    March 22, 2005
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    Good

    I liked this poem. It tells the truth of what depression is. Hell I don't know who said that life was great but I do know that a lot of people think life is full of roses but if you ask me they need to wake up and smell the roses. Great write. Keep up the good work!!


  • Corpse-Groom
    March 20, 2005
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    ...It was placed in the haiku deliberately. I know its not as short as its supposed to be tho...and its not long enough to be a real poem persay...I put it in the haiku section...mainly cuz its a very very compressed form of what i feel...i.e. Thats the shortest i could have summed it up in words...
    Of course I could have simply said i feel distressed and suicidal...but that would not be a good haiku would it.

    THANks for the complements people...I appreciate them deeply...

  • Graveyard Flowers
    March 19, 2005
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    apparently not. because life is not sweet. anyway killer write keep it up.

  • lisajay
    March 17, 2005
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    my favorite line is the first one! great job with this haiku. great imagery! very talented, i'll have to read more of your work! keep it up!!!

  • definitely ticklish
    March 17, 2005
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    Your poem exudes wonderful imagery and overwhelming sadness. I enjoyed this very much.


  • myron silver member
    March 17, 2005
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    crickey, what a strange use of old images in this emotional outpouring. why did you put it in the haiku catergory? is it because you didnt know where else to put it/ i love haiku. im a little obsessed with them....
    all the best,
    myron

  • changingtides
    March 17, 2005
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    thats cool. great job on it.

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