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Moonlight Dancing (Double Lanterne)

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by ~Gregg Rowe~

moon-
light dance:
you and I --
beneath stars eyes;
join

hands
connect,
unite -- kiss;
sealing God's soul
mates.

Author notes

Lanturne
The Lanturne is a five-line verse shaped like a Japanese lantern with a syllabic pattern of
one,
two,
three,
four,
one.

These were originally two seperate lanterns, but then when I juxtaposed them they just fit so perfectly together.
Written March 17th, 2005

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  • Frogzter gold member
    March 20, 2005
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    bravo!

    Oh this is just wonderful! This double lanturne is exquisite in everyway! You definetely deserved the gold for this one. I especially loved the picture as it made the words flow with such a visual meaning in each word!


  • Sandygram
    March 19, 2005
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    CONGRATULATIONS Wonderful poem!!

  • Wolf-dog
    March 18, 2005
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    I love this, lordoftherings. I believe I have spoken with you before about your poetry..and how much I enjoy reading it.

    ~CA


  • HeavenScent4U
    March 18, 2005
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    Gregg, I have never written this type of poetry before. Yours though is simply beautiful. Love the lines, "sealing God's soul mates" Beautiful! And the background and image you chose are exquisit. Pen on my friend. Be Well and Be Blessed.


  • SerenityNChains gold member
    March 17, 2005
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    Juxtapose.....such a great word. LOL. This was a fantastic lanturne. I have not done them as of yet, but will someday attempt. Still getting up the nerve to do a sonnett for you my friend. This is simply fabulous.

    Blessed be

    ~~Serenity~~
    Billie Jean


  • CarterTachikawa
    March 17, 2005
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    Ah, another really good write. A very good double lanturne too. And nope, there is no rule against doing a double lanturne. If it fits, post it. You're missing one thing though and it was written in the rules Otherwise, this is another sure frontrunner in this contest. Well done. Thanks for entering and good luck!

    ~CT
    Edited on Mar 17, 12:55 because 'Need to add something'.


  • x9Nocturnal9x
    March 17, 2005
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    This is the first double lanturne in the contest..I really like how it came out I was going to write a double or even triple lanturne but I didn't want to risk going against the rules..if there is one against doing this lol..overall I love the entire write! Best of luck in the contest and good job
    -Lis

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