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Trapped

Feeling trapped within these walls

as I stumble with each fall

I try to hold my head up high

so no-one ever sees me cry

 But in my mind I scream with fear

painting pictures very clear

 Please tell me this will go away

for it can't always be this way

I often wonder if it's me

it seems that no-one else can see

 pain which dwells deep in my soul

holding tight, not letting go

Yet, these scars which I wear

tell a story I now bare

 Scars I know can never heal

 reminding me this is real

Tomorrow is another day

and as I stumble on my way

these voices screaming in my head

are silent whispers now instead

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  • DamnUnique
    May 6, 2005
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    great poem! really good flow and excellent rhyming too.this is the first time i've checked out your poems and i'm REALLY bowled over by your poetry 'prowess'
    guess i'll just elect you as my role model at the beginning of this new poetry writing hobby of mine


  • teardrop gold member
    April 3, 2005
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    Hey Razor!

    Thank you my friend!

    TD

  • teardrop gold member
    April 3, 2005
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    Thanks for your great reply!

    TD

  • teardrop gold member
    April 3, 2005
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    Hey Demon,

    Thank you for your great reply.

    TD


  • Razors-Edge
    April 3, 2005
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    Bravo Bella

    I have been reading your poetry for a year or more now. I have watched the images and emotions you write about become stronger and more evocative. You have a ease when it comes to rhyme. The flow of your work is not forced. It is actaully very gentle, even with the consideration of content. There is always a piece of you left in your words. congratualtions on a very well written pom.

  • Alice In Wonderland
    March 29, 2005
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    I really enjoyed this. U r a great poet! 34 trophies (I counted) jeez, and all I want is 1 trophy! wow, well keep up the AWESOME work


  • DemonChild13
    March 27, 2005
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    Very well written

    Wow Teardrop. no wonder Why I love your poems, pst... by the way, your on my favorites!! i love your writings although im 15 1/2 ppl say mine are beyond that but oh well.. You have the same taste as me... I write everything dark!! but this poem is really good.. i might save it.. how long have you been writing? im just curious ive been writing since I was about 5-6 years old. well i gotta go.. lots of love

    ~Demon
    Edited on Apr 04, 7:27 because 'typos'.


  • teardrop gold member
    March 18, 2005
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    Hi Jacki!!
    Pst! Hey, sorry abou the yahoo pm....was mass pm for my chatting group..lol

    Hey friend, so glad to see you! Hope things are looking up for you as well. I know you were having a tough time. I found me an apartment and I move in May 1st..woo hoo

    Oh yea, sorry, almost forgot..thanks for your great reply!!

    Friends TD


  • Sherry gold member
    March 18, 2005
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    Awwh Rene,
    Your welcome...
    I didn't realise you missed me dear one ((hugs)))


  • teardrop gold member
    March 18, 2005
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    Hey Sherry,
    No need to worry...I am always alright..or at least I am a survivor..lol Nice to see you again, my friend. I have dearly missed you.

    TD

  • teardrop gold member
    March 18, 2005
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    Thank you for your reply.

    TD


  • teardrop gold member
    March 18, 2005
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    Hi Aimiee!!
    Long time, no type..LOL..good to see you again. Thank you for your great reply.

    TD


  • Sherry gold member
    March 18, 2005
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    Rene,
    Are you okay? I felt the desperation in your words. I am sorry you feel trapped its not a good feeling at all. ((hugs)) I hope you will be alright and know I am thinking of you.
    Hugs,Sherry

  • teardrop gold member
    March 18, 2005
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    Hello madchick,

    Thank you for your great review!

    > >TD

  • teardrop gold member
    March 18, 2005
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    Thank you for your great reply yo my poem.

    TD

  • teardrop gold member
    March 18, 2005
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    Thank you for your reply to my poem.

    TD


  • teardrop gold member
    March 18, 2005
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    LOL Leoric, Thanks for your reply but I am far from a teenager..tee hee...my sons are 18 and 26.....thanks for the giggle.


    TD

  • teardrop gold member
    March 18, 2005
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    Hey Twisted! Thanks for your reply!

    TD


  • Jacki D
    March 17, 2005
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    What a hauntingly lovely piece Renee. We have so much in common. The whole time I was reading this it was like reading about myself. I hope things are going better for you since the last time I chatted. Be strong!!! Jacki


  • Puppydog gold member
    March 17, 2005
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    A VERY BEAUTIFUL POEM

    A truly heartwrenching poem! Yet it is so beautiful.


  • Cyber Artist Moderators member
    March 17, 2005
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    Nicely done has flow, flare


  • WrapMeUpTight
    March 17, 2005
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    dark....with a great flow...amazing poem....great Job


  • Jaden silver member
    March 17, 2005
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    Lyrical, but angsty. Hard to pull off. Good job.


  • antique
    March 17, 2005
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    excellent write .. I too loved the last four lines .. and I know exactly where the poem is coming from .. the rhymes weren't forced either which makes this piece flow effortlessly .. i applaud thee

    ~Aimee

  • madchik58
    March 17, 2005
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    this is an amazing, beautiful and haunting piece of writing. Truly one the best i have read in recent times. I love the way it ends, i think its my favourite four lines in the poem. Great imagery and style. Great job and keep itup in future!!!!

  • Mistereddie33
    March 17, 2005
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    Tomorrow is another day
    and as I stumble on my way
    these voices screaming in my head
    are silent whispers now instead.

    An ending to be proud of, couldnt have done better even if i tried. This poem really got me thinking, thats great, havent done that in ages. Thanx for putting this up, as i am gald that i read it. A fantastic write, that flowed and weeped emotion. Thanx, bye.

  • Poetry-4-Life
    March 17, 2005
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    this is a very nice poetic poem...especially the rhymes and the rhythm of it...it is very very nice

    Poetry-4-Life

  • Leoric King
    March 17, 2005
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    appreciative!

    This is a great poem. i like it alot and well it explains most things in a normal teenage life.


  • xnataliex
    March 17, 2005
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    This is a really haunting poem, especially the last two lines. Really great poem!
    Twisted ~x~x~x~

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