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holes

the gun in my hand
and the hole in my heart
are closly related
but seperate parts

the hole in my heart
is not from the gun
the hole in my heart
is from you having fun

the gun in my hand
will cause a hole in my head
and the hole in my head
is because of the hole in my heart

as you walk away
with bloody hands
my heart keeps on beating
at your demand

the heart in your hand
fits the hole in my chest
and you tore it out
just like i guessed

and the holes on my wrist
are bleeding too much
i hope i can feel this
the last fatal touch

the cold of the steel
on the roof of my mouth
feels good inside
and i'll fall on your couch

now the hole in my head
matches the hole in my heart
wich match the holes in my wrist
which all lead back to the heart in your hand

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Written March 17th, 2005

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  • paper tiger
    March 17, 2005
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    *thumbs up*

    this is pretty cool! It's all intertwined and linked up. you've kept the same theme all the way through which is impressive and because i'm bored i'm gonna applause...and also because i think you deserve it *smiles* ~christa