The Forgotten Candelabra
Wherein the candelabra rests
Once bright, now marred by rust
The door shut tight, the room sealed up
Left to gather dust
The candles long have been put out
The dreams have faded too
Where once we danced are memories
Left of me and you
The ghosts of us, they haunt the room
Where time and space reside
And though I stand outside the door
My heart was left inside
Copyright Ruth Kephart
Author notes
Written March 16th, 2005
A contest entry
- Battle Royale (by invitation only) by Legend.
500 points, ended September 23, 2005, 7 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - TEN THOUSAND POINTS OF RHYME (Now 20,000+) Part 9a Feelings by cricketjeff.
1500 points, ended January 29, 2008, 40 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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Stunning imagery, sad and poetic, a real joy to read. Sadly I know the room rather well...
Terrific poem in a very strong contest. Sue and I are both gathering strength for the Finale and beyond. We hope you will be joining us.
Thanks a lot for this entry
Jeff and Sue
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I love the imagery you wrote.
Sadness your words do emote.
I hope that dreams can still be found
And joy will once again abound.
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This gave me a pang in my stomach at the end - it doesnt have to be long to make one feel it if the right words are chosen..flawlessly brilliant Ruth.
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what can I say that I have not said in others of yours...beautiful
Reenie
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Yes! I remember this one, and was a true pleasure to read again
Outstanding metaphor! all the best in the contest at hand Blessings, Sandi
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Wow, what a metaphorical masterpiece. Great write, simple language, decent flow and a rhythm that kept it all together.
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Gorgeous...simply gorgeous. What an awesome talent you have...it swells the heart.
Best in the contest.
Sam
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Excellence - Pure Excellence
Ok - I have to stop.
You have such a way of evoking emotion. I am left sobbing. Wonderful poetry. NO WONDER GOLD is so evident in your verse. ~Pam
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brilliant piece. Short and sweet. good luck in the contest
Blessed Be
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lol...again here you are with another terrific poem:
The ghosts of us, they haunt the room
Where time and space reside
A very emotionally stirring pair of lines I found these. Great writing. Best wishes and
s... ~genielassie~
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Congratulations on the GOLD, A very deserving pen indeed!
Sandi
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Congratulations on the gold! A much deserved win.
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Good Luck
Well done!
Short writes often score deep with my emotion and I can see this, I can feel it and I am there...hurt,dusty waiting..but knowing not for what..sad~
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As Mary6 said the melodic meter got me as well. Ah, this just seems to glide off the tongue so beautifully! There are definately way too many awesome poems in this contest... I'm torn on who deserves these votes of mine!! Yours is definately a contender.
Kelso -
Oh my! This is my kind of poem. Appealing melodic meter. There is sadness but done so with grace and that end line is magic. The metaphor is worked beautifully. You have my applause.
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What an excellent vivid images you brought with this poem, in a way I don't come across with a lot
You have shown a very unique way of writing here! I wish you the best of luck with everything you do and keep it up!
Leander -
Ruth this was so poignant, I felt every sad word this morning, wonderfully done! Best of luck in the contest at hand Blessings, Sandi
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I am speechless...terrifically beautiful and well-written. I am too emo right now, so a lot of poems are really getting to me. I love every line!
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Wow, very powerfull little piece! You captured alot in such little words! I loved the ending line. Best of luck in the contest!
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It's like the table is set and awaiting the warmth of the love that surrounds it. Wonderful use of metaphors in this piece. Good luck in the contest, take care Lissa
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Very nice. I have to say ,For me it didnt read smoothly at first. But it was good.Good luck
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excellent
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What a splendid poem! Although it was short but the words used were perfect to form a vivid picture... And i love the ambiguity of the poem because you can interpret it in ways more than one... I can imagine two lovers who have lost the flame in their relationship which makes the candlestick very symbolic... Excellent write! Keep the ink flowing! I might vote for this one for the contest goodluck!
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twelve line of beauty, sometime little is enough,all is said ,expressed and understood in these twelve lines
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You really do write beautiful poems. This is one of my favourites by you, especially the last line as it just seems to say so much, it can be interpreted (I think) in many different ways.
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Superb
This is a wonderful poem, in the timeless classical sense. I loved it immensely, dearest Heart. Thank you for leading me to your work today.
Myra
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This is a lovely poem. The end is brilliant and finishes the poem off perfectly. It seems very personal and is very well written. It really enticed me to read on and thats always a good thing aswell. Its also good that its short. It makes it simple but very effective.
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Enchanting.
Yes and I find old candelabras in antique shops and one sits atop my china cabinet. The imagery here makes me wonder what it is that the person did or thought about when lighting it. So this poem is very enchanting. -
Wonderfully crafted with a subtle captivating
Lovely, beautifully crafted they rhythm is subtle and captivating... my favorite lines "The ghosts of us, they haunt the room
Where time and space reside" Wishing you much success in all of your endeavors... Good luck in the contest
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Wow... forgive me, but that's all I can say to express your beautiful poem!
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This is sad and wistful very touching, conjuring up both emotions and images. It leaves me with a sigh and an if only.
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Beautiful and expressive; an excellent metaphor which is strangely evocative. I really enjoyed reading this.
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absolutely fantastic , i could see the scene very easily you painted so well with your words , you are a truly eloquent writer and i wish you much success !
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