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Rubaiyat of Invention and Innovation

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Profound Revelation by Tom Giesler
Those only interested in the second part explanation on differences in female/male thoughtmodes may scroll down to the highlighted couplet below : 

yet now its time for rhyme to help poor male

to understand why women lead the way  ! 

 

Clockwise or Counterclockwise ?


Rubaiyat of Invention and Innovation

 

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At rubaiyat muse plays as thought explores

for your amusement Life’s ‘hows’, ‘whys’, ‘wherefores’,

thoughts thread together, beaded rosary

to bloom until stark tomb dark curtains draws ...

 

Once words have left returning page to find

imprinted home in spirit or in mind

retain gold dear, steer far from dross loss base –

touch base with open eyes which once peered blind.

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Life veils ‘beyond the pale’ through which few see –

too many haste to taste eternity,

ignore life is succession finite, -

sum of infinite opportunity. 

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Can “Truth” exist ? we’re asked, who’d taste masked core,

touch tendrils, clutch at straws, rehearse a score

whose strophes three score ten, twice more again,

write introduction light untold before. 

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Here Left and Right we join or juxtapose,

as letters twenty six may recompose

thought-waves without the need to favour court, -

nor ought fraught taut retort be brought verse, prose. 

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As Caxton’s soldiers fan out page to page,

wage war with work, or work with living wage,

words’ worth seeks judgement balanced, sets the stage

without judgemental values used as cage.

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Here content, style, a while, united are,

to s[t]imulate reflection, nothing bar,

to pleasure, treasure, or discard at will

by Jack and Jill, Left, Right, at odds, on par. 

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So in these stanzas that speed to succeed

each other helter-skelter, thinking feed,

Green represents most right-brain thinking while

Blue underlines Left’s understanding need. 

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Right brain most female thought-modes represents,

while Left brain runs male mind-sets bent on sense,

conclusions drawn between the two explain

these verses’ rhyme and reason may condense

ways men think women feel their flower world,

ways women feel men think  their power hurled,

the bridge of sighs between the two we try

to etch or sketch as headlong minds wind whirled

must surf our Universe, “the ‘why’ not knowing,

Nor whence, like water willy-nilly flowing:

And out of it, as wind along the waste,

it knows not whither, willy-nilly blowing.”  

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Read here, we’re led to shed some light on what

could be by robot programmed, tis the lot

of whosoever dares, ahead of time,

create ideas that stimulate a lot. 

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Whatever our allotted span, our race

worldwide too favoured narrow man as ace, -

soon woman’s savour shall claim pride of place,

replace man’s place of pride and flavour base. 

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So grasp the moving finger as it writes

wait not on Time, but tune to timing – flights

of fancy twin with opportunity

which may not seed again feed dream's delights.

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Here we explore core paradoxes which

divide left brain from right, and offer switch

inviting insight into ways all think

Jack Left, Jill Right, communication stitch. 

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In passing thank Fitzgerald whose Omar

Is as important as the Calendar

the latter gave the world in years gone by, -

without the which we couldn’t travel far.

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“The Moving Finger writes; and, having writ,

moves on: nor all thy piety nor wit

shall lure it back to cancel half a Line,

nor all thy tears wash out a word of it.”

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‘The Moving Finger writes, moves on once writ’,

says Left, ensuring that conclusions fit, 

Alas  ! -  train Right brain finds track rigid, tied

to thought-mode far too tight, Will wanting wit !  

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At stake is not just opportunity

to mock Pandora’s lock neccessity,

Knowledge must link to Intuition’s guide, -

Time mocks rocks, dykes which walled off sea from sea.  

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Invention, innovation, share few tracks,

the former leans on what the latter lacks, -

Left brain is organized, by logic backed

while Right brain loves to test conflicting tacks. 

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One seeks salvation’s compliments right now,

 one tweaks, creation complements, finds “how”,   

but [k]needs the trip itself where’er it leads, -

each track is farrowed by a different plough. 

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NIRVANA reads RAN VAIN when lacking span

to shrink the link dividing man from man,         

RA IN VAN enlightenment sums sun,

where I RAN VAN entitlement works plan. 

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Invent pursues where innovation points,

from its zen flesh and bones provides the joints

the world’s attention gains, an iceberg tip

to trace the crown our surface race anoints !  

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Invention : information channelled, spelled,
Where end result is traced from chase compelled
by circumstance – necessity as dam –
objective gained, no energy withheld.
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Innovation : flashpoint few foresee,

lightning strike, transforms reality,

stems less from dam than from home grown desire,

sires fires to damn conventionality.  

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Invent is news which hi[s]story appoints.

Innovation : views, not won on points,         

The two approaches differ widely for

Invent is Left brain which itself anoints.  

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Invent : Left’s spirit seldom satisfied  

with status quo, would sew new ribbon tied         

around edition fresh of old idea,

and profit, in all senses, from the ride. 

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Right, - Innovation - often steps aside 

from golden rule that common sense should bide, -  

warm ride more interest holds than cold gold which,

though rich in cents, insensed, distorts, can’t guide. 

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Left puzzles pieces, Right, holistic whole.

Left scratches parts, square peg grounds to round hole. 

Right parts from scratch, prefers mind vaulting pole

to catalyse spring causal, humour drôle. 

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Right rôle games plays, irks Left who’d goal to goal

spin faster, t[h]read to carpet red unroll,       

Left works with teams, Right teems with works

which whetthe appetites of who’d, for perks, control.   

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Right little patience shows with rigmarole,

defined in terms precise which some extoll,       

Right bets on hedges, Left oft hedges betµ

to safeguard steps from any jealous soul. 

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Red Tape is Left behind.  Right circumvents

black holes, sees red when Left plays righteous, vents

spleen, envy, steam while Right anticipates

new ways to dollars save at cents’ expense. 

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Left little patience shows for double Dutch,

plays safe, while Right relays, remains in hutch.

Left is frustrated when from tall black hat

Right rabbit pulls while both at straws still clutch. 

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For leads Right looks, left looks to lead, grow grand,

Finds focus where Right‘s dreams schemes must expand -

outstanding Right where Left would just stand out -

Left needs command, Right seeds to understand. 

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Right’s Ball “no question makes of Ayes and Noes

but here or there as strikes the fancy flows

and Left that toss'd it down into the field,

Left knows about it all - HE knows - HE knows !   

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Right’s bat at that suspicious often grows,  -

Alas, that Spring should vanish with the rose !          

Left’s certainties today may morrow wilt, when

“Youth's sweet-scented manuscript will close !”  

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“With Earth's first clay” Left wished last Man to knead,

there would of the last harvest sow the seed -

Right “the first morning of Creation wrote

what the last dawn of reckoning shall breed !   

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And this Right knows : whether the one True Light

kindle to Love, or wrath consuming quite,

that in one flash [s]he sees mind’s mirror caught

wins more than might in Left’s right left outright. 

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Right out of senseless Nothing can provoke

a conscious Something to offset all yoke,

though yolk and white combine where omelette

of chicken-egg debate is often spoke. 

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Less Left would speak but takes in hand the spoke,

width calculates, sounds  stress, - where sound may poke.

Left scores ‘illicit’ pleasure, under pain

of everlasting penalties, laws broke. 

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Left won't be left behind, when mind must work 

with application, checks, rechecks won’t shirk

should one experiment meet accident -

returns to find where errors, irking, lurk. 

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Right won’t be tied behind by sect or kirk,

imagination surfs Time’s tide to jerk

life’s secrets from “the foam of perilous seas

of faery lands forlorn” - twist humour quirk.    

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Defence and Prosecution illustrate

the different roles perceptions demonstrate

the ways invent and innovation play

their parts within both statement and the State. 

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Prosecution steers procedure past,

point proves, from point to point advances fast,

weighs more than plays, stays wary where surprise

could compromise its ruts, designed to last. 

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Left brain improves, adapts, contrives to cast

cards schooled to rule through precedent hard, fast,

right brain senses emotivity

which left brain tests with rigour unsurpassed, 

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Defence cares less for strong notes than key song,

dares more, wears less, won’t always string along,

lifts patterns more than sifts, dreams different guise,

wise, judges not disguise as always wrong.  

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Prosecution hones the Law’s harsh bite

pursues relentless all that ever might

present fair play as way lest laxity,

upsets convictions, or conviction’s might. 

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Defence runs fate’s dark gauntlet, just finds way

to play for time and execution’s stay -

while Prosecution, left, preys on just fight

Defence p[r]ays, fights to fight another day. 

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One, left brain thinking works through day and night,

the other, right brain, writes of wrongs to right,

would equity extend to free and see

might to its place, replaced with just insight. 

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Left brain procedures precedents uphold,

this right brain finds restrictive, leaves it cold,   

between the two grey matters black and white

draw frontiers firm in court naught caught short sold.

 

When something goes awry, elastoplast

Left tries - to sa[l]ve old bearings overcast,

turns back to drawing board which soon supplies

Left’s logic with an answer to forecast. 

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Right looks aghast at formal plans and strong

Of mice and men -  when sounds the final gong

they’re often wanting found, ship foundering lies

floundering at the bottom of the klong. 

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With instinct and experience Left packs

The deal he’d seal to minimise risk’s whacks, -   

while Right deals out the pack which Fate defies, -

and wins or loses gambling chips in stacks. 

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From never rest to Everest Left would climb

intent on proving life’s not p[h]antomime,

Right here’s more bent upon perspectives vast

which care a dime that climate rhymes with time. 

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Invectives and opinions firm Left keeps

directive bland or pinions, Right squirms, weeps,

from both the world at any given time

must draw to balance checks from quantum leaps. 

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Left files sharp claws which both before behind,
attack or self defence, protect the mind

from flux, from change, arranges, irons out

barbed wired impressions orderedly and lined.  

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Left, from quotations printed fine, consigned,

advances point to point, points proves, aligned

as peas in pod, squad trained beyond all doubt,

avoiding void, vain compromise maligned. 

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Right‘s rainbow led reflections are declined, -

ground ‘neath Left’s feet, unsound, seems undermined, -

lest consequence from cause risk spirals out,
Left snaps control, traps soul in double bind.  

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Left limits ‘strange’ to context predefined,

lauds conduct clear, to weakness scarce inclined -

Reaction not Response its all about, -

matter mutters  “mind, do not unwind” ! 

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Left seeks respect, tweaks Right who weak he’d find, -

inclined to speculations undefined.

Right looks 'beyond', towards monde SHE may scout

mind over matter mutters "don't be blind !"

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Right’s polyvalent talents are combined

with “will to know” not “know to will assigned

Right far and wide, will doubt, conventions flout,

replacing rigid Past with Future kind.

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Right colour, contour, context, weighs, inclined

perplexed not vexed by text hex too confined, ...

not “in” or “out”, but context “round about”

not “black” or “white”, - too tight, - rights unresigned.  

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Right ties rejects which, too long trained, strong twined,

leave insufficient rein when wined and dined,

reigns over networks new which serve, st[r]and out,

deserve attention due, yet undefined. 

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Left brain firm trains, explains, holds doubt a vice,

‘method’ blessed in Prussian terms precise,

Right seeks advice, to ‘When ?’ adds ‘Why ?’

to trynew ways to ‘scape predestination’s vice. 

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Left th[r]ough due process, orders gives, obeys,

Right resonates, tunes, amplifies, relays,

each finds reach others teach at best suspect,  -

one phrase defines, one signals waves in phase. 

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Left, little feeling, thinks on measures, weighs,

Right little thinking, feels for treasured ways, 

Each finds fond pleasure through bond interface

The other questions [Left], or, [Right] dismays.  

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Left comprehends, Right feels, ‘gainst wrong appeals.

Right makes amends where sometimes Left conceals

emotions with a surface self-restraint

Right often feels false travesty reveals.  

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Left masks emotions - tasks take precedence,

Right damns dam notions, drawing from sixth sense 

though complex facts intact, contract’s pursued,

Right tact prefers, contacting joys intense. 

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Left’s sense of purpose drives momentum great.

Right’s sense convergent helps to integrate,

grateful, what Left too often grates, to bring

perspective spans holistic, to create.  

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Left’s sense of planning point to point links straight.

Right’s contradictions often may frustrate, 

from straitened circumstances two paths spring  -

these, well combined, approach perfection’s state. 

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Right brain responds, to empathize its rôle.

Left brain reacts, to emphasize control. 

Each needs a dose of each to reach the stars  -

who little care for spins from pole to pole. 

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Left is the standard cork to bottle wine,

Right has unusual ‘nose’ for flavour fine :

together they complete life’s kitchen where

one cutler is, one chef, - and so we dine  ! 

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One channels to produce pure data streams,

One flannels to seduce, lure, sate her dreams,

thus inspiration gleams through different ways

we chose the dice Fate throws, streamlines extremes.

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Invention is the blossom on the tree,

whose scent is innovation - what role we

elect to play is weighed by hand which writes

the score for music that posterity  

will use or will abuse, for good or ill,

to chain or free, the Future’s dreams fulfill

to mar, or let men Mars and far stars reach,

empower'd by women who will not stand still. 

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Invention is intention catalyzed,

by role reversal, vistas reapprized, 

extension complicated later seen

as simple step towards a goal disguised. 

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Is “simple step ahead on path disguised”

more than old calculations rerevised ?

Once inaccessible, with second-sight goal gleams

through touchstone turned once much despised. 

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Extension is an option exercized

which counts or counters process organized, -

play with the flow, go tack against tides tight,

examples sample, straight lines exorcized.

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Some words were changed in the three stanzas which

proceeded this, the argument to stitch, -

however phrased ‘Invent’, ‘Create’, refuse

static overviews through toss and pitch. 

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And yet when innovation spreads its shoots

to sound the ground thought far too dry for roots,

the route is either opened or prepared

as Present, Future, Past, act in cahoots. 

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Yet Change’s stream self-stimulates its flow

from double sources, which together sow 

awareness heightened of an interplay

auto-configurated, primed to go 

by synchronicity yet not in tandem though

the two may be confused in afterglow 

when hindsight’s blessing seeks to document

‘invent’ and ‘innovation’ cameo.   

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Life can’t run on one track, -  both sot and sage,

must gear up, intuitions hear, engage,

black, white, replace with bright kaleidoscope,

and [w]ink “I think I think  !” upon Life’s page.

What matters, and to whom ? What gravities

apply when anti-matter equals tease

conundrums which a life-long paradox

entertains until all memories

 

are atomised upon a karmic breeze,

“blown willy-nilly” till, like honeyed bees,

they bumble on towards a homely hive.

They stumble on till patterns by degrees

 

from angles wide frame, focus, offer keys

for who between the lines can read, and these

the waft and weft of substance may discern

to draw the line dividing wood from trees.

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Both rhyme and reason often are withheld

till time and season ring the changes belled,

and timing is essential where the mind

must funnel forces for tomorrow spelled.

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Who would evolve must choose from many doors, -

each offers either fame, or blame, doom draws.

Time twists or tows each current man would seize,

each offers health or wealth, advance or pause, -

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The doors are those of inner confidence,

opened not by sitting on a fence,

though ‘Chance’ a helping hand can often lend

connecting inklings into solid sense. 

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But sense is insufficient - those who see

the light with passion work to find a key

to free not freeze mankind, - yet better world

needs no fixed frieze to please the gallery.  

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What fame is, what is doom, though, who foresees 

What choice reject, what opportunities

take for, or take as, granted, intervene

converting wonder into energies  

which harness intuitions to complete

a chain of thought whose end few e'er do meet,

combining much intangible to seek

responses which  Left’s world will help to beat. 

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Who would advance must, knock on those doors,

imagine links between effect and cause,

must persevere despite cold failure's fears,

warm ice of ignorance until it thaws. 

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For “Cause”, “Effect” combine as on their way

the cusps converge in subtle interplay,

although the watershed important seems

today -  tomorrow’s dreams may well betray. 

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Left brain or Right ?  The one extends the known,

re-engineers and hears hid pattern's tone,

the other changes gears and clears the way

intuitive the former’s instincts stone.   

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Left brain or Right ?  One concentrates, would own,

the other seems to contradictions prone,

yet both explore for flaw with minds honed keen -

synaptic leaps come cheap, fresh codes to clone. 

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Right wastes the precious hour “in vain pursuit

of this and that endeavor and dispute;  -

better be jocund with the fruitful grape

than sadden after none, or bitter, fruit.”

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Right too well knows with what a brave carouse

some made a second Marriage in their house”;

“divorced old barren Reason from their bed, 

and took the daughter of the vine to spouse.”

Yet those who whine, those who wine-dine, one day

will meet like fate, in state with worms to stay, 

or earnings urned, or sunk ‘full fathom five’

both trunk or drunk they wake too late to pray !   

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The Left brain can “with logic absolute

the two-and-seventy jarring sects confute”

Right, sovereign alchemist, may in a trice

Life's leaden metal into gold transmute. 

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“For Is and Is-not Left with rule and line

and UP-AND-DOWN by Logic does define,”

of all that one should care to fathom, Right

was never deep in abstracts to design. 

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In all “the seeds of wisdom both would sow”,

each with his, her “hand conjurs it to grow”:

though this be bitter harvest most must reap -  

“I came like Water, and like Wind I go.”  

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Left sizes “Glories of This world while Right

sighs for the Prophet's Paradise come right,

Left takes the cash, and lets the credit go !

Who’d heed the rumbling distant drum tonight   

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And Left who “husbanded the golden grain,”

and Right who “flung it to the winds like rain”,

alike to no such aureate earth are turn'd

as, buried once, Men want dug up again.” 

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She, chaste, who s[l]aving pension’s rationned crust,

He who chased to waste through greed and lust, 

alike must not forget to taste the spice

of life before its root dissolves in dust.

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Retirement benefits are left unclaimed

when Death, untimely, Fate’s sharp shafts has aimed,  -

how much of what remains by fiscal crush

is lost – what cost to generations maimed  ! 

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Though Chance unhappy is too often blamed

each makes his bed, together those once famed 

for vice or virtue now forgotten lie

beneath the grass where once they, heedless, gamed.

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 “And we, that now make merry in the room

they left, and summer dresses in new bloom,

ourselves must we beneath the couch of earth

descend - ourselves to make a couch -  for whom  ? 

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The worldly hope most set their hearts upont

urns ashes - or it prospers; and anon,

like snow upon the desert's dusty face,

lighting a little hour or two - is gone.  

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We are no other than a moving row

of magic shadow-shapes that come and go

round with the sun-illumined lantern held

in midnight by the Master of the Show. 

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But helpless pieces of the game He plays

upon this chequer-board of nights and days;

hither and thither moves, and checks, and slays,

and one by one back in the closet lays.”  

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Left brain warp, weft, weaves patchwork into goal

Right links the jump, or jumps the link to bowl

Conformity as patterns into play

may come a dime a dozen, colour soul. 

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For Right, night brings rich dreams which ring a bell.

For Left, a concept new to master well.

For Right or Left it matters not a jot

if happiness cannot be 'got' as well. 

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Both high I.Q. and gift of second sight

fail in the scales however smart or bright,

if peace of mind, serenity, none find

to burnish daily bind with inner light. 

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Yet inner light is what Life's all about -

who cares a curse for economic clout -

as wallets fail but heart which true to self

remains, for cash cares not, can conquer doubt. 

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Left brain or Right ?  The one reaps what is sown

remains tenacious, sometimes claims his own

what Right brain stimulates though times be lean,-

one schemes, replaces themes the other’s grown. 

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Left brain or Right ?  The one retains control,

the latter’s best exploring jeux de rôle,

one works his team’s ideas, the other teems

with flashes filling ignorance’s hole. 

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Left brain or Right ?  One works to build the whole

from parts prenumbered or explicit goal,

the other flouts conformity to find

a missing link - and, often, begging bowl. 

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Fiction, fact, both in their way attract, -

Left codifies, can plan, expand, extract,

Right spans apparent contradictions, may

through alchemy free essence pure, intact.  

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Left brain or Right ?  Each plays a different pitch

One seeks in process practice best, straight stitch ,

the other joys in spontaneity

responds to setbacks with a humour rich.  

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Left brain or Right ?  One seeks to ‘know it all’

the other patterns ‘search’ itself, whose call

can come from outside past experience -

whence Left draws force for details great and small. 

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Right feels : “the Idols I have loved so long

have done my credit in this world much wrong:

have drown'd my glory in a shallow cup,

And sold my reputation for a song.” 

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“Indeed, indeed, repentance oft before

I swore - but was I sober when I swore ?

And then, and then came Spring, and Rose-in-hand

my thread-bare penitence apieces tore .” 

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Right senses details will themselves in time

from chaos sort themselves, to form a rhyme

which music makes - cacophony may tame, -

Left from fresh heights will ever seek to climb.  

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Left inches onwards, then momentum gains,

Right finds but slight delight in careful pains,

on tangents travels till the paradox

should solve itself - though paradox remains  ! 

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Left seeks through flair and application to

compare, tear up, wear down, and try anew,  -

exploring intuitions Right defies

forgone conclusions, greets green pastures new. 

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For Left might might be right from strong position,

or wrong when Left is left in opposition, -  

preconceptions Right feels most unwise -

a state of mind Left thinks through inhibition 

is compromise he can’t well supervise

if circumstances change, luck turns, surprise

contradicts conditions neatly planned -

while Right, when challenged, loves to improvise. 

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But what is new ?  What might we rediscover

which none before could, vigilant,  uncover  ?

What old is there where worlds in parallel

Time’s carefree sands join hands to carefully cover  ? 

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There is a Door to which Right finds no Key;

There is a Veil through which Left might not see:  - 

each needs the other in Life’s partnership

to sail towards sweet serendipity. 

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While Left excels at logical attack.

Right scouts beyond Life’s boring beaten track,

both need autonomy for reasons they

“within the tavern door poor brains do wrack.  

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A Hair perhaps divides the False and True;

Yes; and a single Alif were the clue” -

where Left sorts, grades the angels on a pin

there Right sports, plays about their angles too  ! 

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A hair divides stark failure from success,

straightjacket from a jacket straight, address

Belgravian from grave where all lies rotten, -

forgotten f[l]ame interred in the process.  

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Some here there are who daily fly a kite,

who gaily persevere despite those tight

vested interests, opposition to

approaches new, disruptive, which just might 

upset their applecart, who find delight

in time-worn stale traditions, empty [w]rite,

reciting litanies to tease not ease

those who would share their gifts, not parasite ! 

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The challenges we all embrace today,  -

together Left and Right may futures sway  -

yet now its time for rhyme to help poor male

to understand why women lead the way  ! 

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Left brain or Right, man, maid, - what difference  !

He seeks control - oft at his mate’s expense -

While she for him is woman more than whim,

won’t rock the boat except in self-defense.

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Man thinks ‘I AM because I, man, do rule’

and woman rules through ‘sharing tools’ - one school

is based on networks while the other would

lose wood for trees, sees not that he’s Time’s fool  !.

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While he will speak for everything to know,

she’ll seek still more, lets life ring true, fill, grow.

One is Left brain, the other Right  - yet why 

is one left right behind, though more may s[h]ow..

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She minds her peace, he gives her piece of mind.

Unkind he stays, strays often, - should she mind  ?

She’s paradise, he’s dice parade between

the knots he ties [w]hitch she must then unwind.

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She works her shift, he shifts his work to her. 

He, shiftless, shifty, silky shifts will spur  !

He preys on her where she for him would pray, -

Her pay he’d tax where she’d life lax prefer  !

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She cares for kids, where he kids, cares to rest

before some sport - while she supports the rest,

works both from nine to five and five to nine.

He sports bright ties - light ties prefers the best  !

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She looks ahead while he, as head, looks on

good looks - which in her book is more than wrong,

regretting grass seems greener through the fence -

defence of dreams is sold short, for a song.

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He wields the axe, while she bears forty whacks,

He thinks he wears the trousers though he slacks,

He waxes wroth he ‘needs’, she kneeds the wax

fills cracks, unshackles, builds long lasting shacks.

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He spares to live, she ever lives to share.

He won’t forgive, she blossoms everywhere

needs harmony not tomb to bloom, bear fruit, -

He spi[t]es for wayfare, she, sprite, lights way fair  !

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He fields the work, while she must work the fields.

She feels the pinch, while he both pinches, feels.

She earns her keep while he her earnings keeps, -

She yields the count, while he, he counts the yields  !

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He’d lay the rules and rule the lays. Some say

unbalanced are the scales !  On Judgment Day -

when all are weighed he’s wanting found withal -

while she’s a paragon, he’s gone astray  !

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She swears to honour, cherish and obey,

while he of harem dreams, as Pasha, Bey, -

what’s worth his plot of earth if one fine day 

parthenogenisis may come to stay  ?

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If SHE could autoreproduce or clone,

If SHE the race continued all alone,

what trace would HE retain who, vain, sees end

as master, losing face, to lying prone  ?

.

If HE, who least believes, seems set in stone,  

If HE, who most receives, leaves self-righteous moan

then Mona Lisa sentence might suspend

and spare the rib that cuts her to the bone.

.

For Woman is the source, the stream, the flow,

SHE bends where HE may break when strong winds blow,

HE who would rule the cradle seldom takes

sufficient time to nurture Nature, know

that Left needs Right as friend as not as foe,

that Left needs Right to stagger stop and go,

that Left needs Right though Right’s rights stimulate

the fear that Right bereft of Left might show

the way to new adventures truly told

which cut the ground beneath clay feet so cold,

and open options that may stake a claim

to true convergency,  leave Left short-sold.

.

For though Left Man will seldom silent fold

his tents for his intents tie li[n]es of gold,

Right Lady seeks to light another flame

Whose spirit need not fail, nor yet grow old.

.

While HE  invents, turns cents to sovereign mold,

SHE innovates, and networks to enfold,

HE’s rolled into himself, seeks rich reward

where SHE, life’s steward, stays the world from mould.

.

Still to tomorrow SHE her face will turn,

though HE stays still, will, glancing back, return

to glories past while she fast understands

the need to Present seed not Future burn.

.

Man’s swift to burn those idols once adored,

hard head discards what generations stored

in search of stimulation to fulfill

a mind found wanting, or, through wanting, bored,

man’s mate will tune a very different chord,

will read the runes, anticipate and ford

the flood he takes as threat, - for good or ill

will turn the tide and ride for peace restored.

.

Though some there are who through true flair clue, float,

and there are some who multicoloured coat

may don few sculpt new arches from the sky,

for rainbow hue may rock, shock logic’s boat.

.

More than before see innovation’s speed

increase to meet anticipated need

which interacts in turn as catalyst

to undermine traditions bead by bead.

.

Where men, grey, race, would not lose face, concede,

there maids may trace, would choose with grace, as reed

to slender bend, true to the end, unkissed

by compromise - a bitter prize indeed  !  

.

When tipping point is finally attained,

with Life’s entangled web in part explained

those new horizons which seemed clear,

when neared,then reappear as paradox maintained.

.

Invent, - which votes development sustained

where Innovation, rich, notes bent unreined -

must then in tandem act, trust persevered,

momentum for the common good maintained.

.

Both strong and weak too long have entertained

a system all admit is overstrained,

if insight fails, if facts miscalculate,

it will be far too late as Fate, unchained,

accelerates beyond our wherewithal

to check, to bargain gaining time, to stall, -

if innovation cannot motivate

invention to wide view beyond recall

little may stay of all today held dear.

In social earthquake much may disappear,

the writing on the wall puts second-rate

complacency aside, gaps wide can’t cheer.

.

For those who vote, those voted in to steer -

the latter to the former lend an ear

when elections near polls forge give-[s]take, -

stay in the dark to doom impending, near

.

For soon am I  tsunami, shall appearfore

warning pale of failings !  Loud and clear

environment around the globe may shake

despite spite’s politicians insincere

who little heed Earth’s thunder till the chips

are down, ground wakes beneath their feet and rips

apart ambitions which won’t come to grips

with Nature’s patience, climate fulcum tips.

.

Today Man’s blind rapacity rewards

those who beat ploughshares into cheating swords, -

perhaps Tomorrow's perspicacity

will crust not bust entrust with wise awards.

.

Man moons explores, redraws the map of space,

finds flaws in much before his hand did trace,

perhaps time-out, return to drawing board,

might ready scene for a more steady pace

where symbiosis, Right and Left help face

a future free from fear of fall from grace,

where Woman is by Man nor spurned, ignored

as if HE could HER talents e’er replace  !

.

Come, fill the Cup, and” let Inventions swing

towards the visions Innovations sing,

the Bird of Time has but a little way

to flutter - and the Bird is on the Wing  !”

. 

To Left, for scope, some, conscientious, turn,

to Right, for hope, adventurers return -

we trust these verses unrehearsed may please,

may set minds’ sails on seas free-will will learn.

.

Some dream their acts, some act their dreams, and here

The reader sees both weakness, strengths, appear

to complement each other – we may work

to integrate all aspects, coded clear.

. 

Enhanced, entranced, entrapped ?  The coming years

may mete set scene for keen and neat ideas

so each uncovers reach to harmony

to catalyze momentum free from fears.

.

To "innovention" - phrase coined - we inscribe

our praise, our prose to those of female tribe 

whose Right brain thinking, lateral nuance,

enrich cold logic to which men subscribe.

.

One could continue till the cows come home

comparing innovation’s coloured foam

to hard-track records which inventions please

enough !  no more !  depart  ! elsewhere to roam !

.

Lets leave the wise to wrangle, and with me

the quarrel of the Universe let be:  

and, in some corner of the hubbub couch’t,

make game of that which makes as much of thee.”

. 

“Perplext no more with Human or Divine,

to-morrow's tangle to the winds resign,”

why care if Left or Right take precedence

can common sense true harmony decline  !

. 

“Myself when young did eagerly frequent

Doctor and Saint and heard great argument

About INVENT and INNOVATION though

Most “came out by same door as in they went.”

.

“Why, all the Saints and Sages who discuss'd”
of Female, Male so learnedly, “are thrust

like foolish prophets forth; their words to scorn
are scatter'd left and right, mouths stopt with dust  !“

.

“Oh, come from old Khayyam, and leave the wise
to talk; one thing is certain, that Life flies;
one thing is certain, and the rest is Lies;
the flower that once has blown for ever dies.”
 

.

So go from old Khayyam, and leave the Lot
 
of Innovation and Invent forgot ! 

A flask of wine, a book of verse – and thou

with bread beneath the bough would please thee not ?

.

Ah friend, could you and I with Him conspire

To grasp this sorry scheme of things entire,

Would not we shatter it to bits –

and then Re-mold it nearer to the heart’s desire !”

.

So if you hold to Left, or Right enfold,

don’t to temptation bow, blown hot and cold,

to self stay true, yet toleration show, -

ends, means confused steamrolls soul unconsoled.

.

Though Left and Right in opposition seem,

Like Yin and Yang they’re complements, a team

to win the Way which choice may add to voice,

although wicks burn, the turn can pick up steam

.

To churn ideas discerning chalk from cheese

Avoiding quarrels, splitting hairs or peas, -

No pins, no angels, heads, tails flipped askance –

Play chance degrees, not chance prey by decrees.

.

As we create conditions for [ex]change

of paradigm, what once seemed out of range, -

or out of court was thought - by signals strong

is caught to show ways we may rearrange

monochromatic patterns weird and strange

into a code that chaos can exchange,

or comprehension where no “right” or “wrong”

may man from man or woman more estrange.

.

Thus through the watershed of Chance or plan

all may advance and man prove true to man,

to ban judgmentmental values from the game

and tame dark forces !  From the frying pan

not into fire to jump, or conflicts fan,

but open source new options which then can

prepare with care progression where the flame

of change is channelled, comfort in the van.

.

Each incarnation, like an iceberg tip,

is evanescent phase of onward trip, -

evaporation cycle spin obeys

as witness to time’s superficial skip

from post to post through ghost or phantom grip,

from concrete feet which greet their fated ship

more with mistrust, non-plussed, haze blacks and greys,

than rainbow flow or superficial skip

across the time-zone karmic interlude

between fast, food, aims met or goals mis-cued,

calm, feud, - high, low imagined - as each act

shifts scene from fact through further fact pursued.

.

Pursuit involves intention to invention

embracing even active intervention

from preconception,stated point of view

whose motto seems too obvious to mention

when “principles” misgivings, apprehension,

may mask or compensate, hold in suspension,

whose motto is “I am, as I pursue”

self-justifying, trying, eases tension.

.

Right brain through empathy and intuition

evolves paths interactive, seeks fruition

encouraging response and not reaction,

avoiding Left brained parrot style tuition.

.

Left brain must train fine grained administration,

while Right will highlight sleight, anticipation,

too much of either – trains can’t run on time,

or entertain a just emancipation

A dose of each – with neither on probation –

enables evolution, approbation

through moderation seeks a just solution,

avoids extremes of prison, revolution.

.

.

“Alike for those who for TO-DAY prepare,

and those that after a TO-MORROW stare,       

a muezzin from the tower of darkness cries :

‘Fools ! your reward is neither here nor there  ! 

.

Ah, make the most of what you yet may spend,

before you too into the dust descend;

dust into dust, and under dust, to lie,

sans wine, sans song, sans s[w]inger and - sans end   ! 

.

We trust these quatrains, held up to the light,

have proved instructive, with less bark than bite,

not foundling foundered, fact found sound in sense,

insight packed tight, intense, not sot, rot trite.

 

May this excursion offer up some keys

beyond its verse-abilites and seize

 the opportunity to open doors awhile

to find fresh focus open to degrees.

 

May this diversion stimulate and please,

yet reap and garner grain not chaff nor tease,

more substance keep than superficial style

while laughing at our own absurd…ditties.

 


 

Author notes

pic Profound Revelation Thomas Giesler

Notes for Contest : First Post on AP. The initial version included around 3500 words as opposed to the current version updated in May 2007 and slightly modified in September 2008. It may not be in the general interest to include the previous version given space. Enjoy !


Link to Edward Fitzgerald's Rubaiyat of Omar Khayyam
www.arabiannights.org/rubaiyat/index2.html

Clockwise or Counterclockwise pic
http://www.procreo.jp/labo.html
KAYAHARA Nobuyuki

The first effective "generation" of this composition 'saw the light' so to speak when I was invited to give a conference on the future of the Internet following from contributions as Rapporteur for the UNESCO NGO Forum for the World Summit on the Information Society. It was a challenging experience to be one of four male speakers among almost 40 female speakers at the 2003 Global Womens Inventors & Innovators Network Conference www.gwiin.com

Frustration stemmed from the effective absence of any debate on the subject of the differences between Innovation and Invention during the entire conference itself. Therefore this study goes to "great lengths" to examine thought modes affecting the decision making process as perceived by right and left brain individuals. Most women are mainly right brain orientated, and most men mainly left brain.


Apart from the introduction and the conclusion the poem is divided into two interdependent parts, the first focalizing on Left/Right brain thought modes, and the second concentrating more on the ways in which these differences impact Male/Female interactions and the consequences thereof.


For those who have taken time and trouble to read thus far and are interested in numbers or statistics
Rubaiyat of Invention and Innovation c. 6175 words
c. 9% 570 words quotations from Fitzgerald’s Rubaiyat
c. 26% 1605 words Right brain and/or assimilated female characteristics
c. 27% 1655 words Left brain and/or assimilated male characteristics



Further questions are welcome jonathanrobin@yahoo.com Jonathan Robin
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  • sharper
    September 26

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    Quality and quantity

    This is definitely the longest poem I've ever read, but a well rewarding exprience that took time to digest. The second half is well worth its weight in gold sparling with intelligent, clever, poetic, and well informed wit.

    As said below It is always refreshing to read pieces that are neither cliché nor pedestrian and this stands out like a polished nail among the sore thumbs pointing figurative fingers at their own inability to compose works which stand out from the crowd.

    Where men, grey, race, would not lose face, concede,
    there maids may trace, would choose with grace, as reed
    to slender bend, true to the end, unkissed
    by compromise - a bitter prize indeed !

    When tipping point is finally attained,
    with Life’s entangled web in part explained
    those new horizons which seemed clear,
    when neared, then reappear as paradox maintained

    in this case it is for the reader to acknowledge having reach a hat tipping point !

  • poster
    September 25

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    Impressed

    As Duana and Night Hope said below "If ever a piece begged for an in~depth, scholarly review, then this is it...I must say, this is one of the finest pennings I've ever had the distinct Honour of reading..." - though to quote ecrivain this epic could become a seedbed for several dozen poems delving into the mind's in and then some ... individual verse quotations seem out of place - brilliant use of the rubaiyat


  • sinfull
    September 24

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    Beautiful.


    • Jonathan ROBIN
      September 24

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      Fitzgerald and "Science"

      Interesting that the stanzas highlighted are in turquoise thus explicitly those of Edward Fitzgerald's translation of the Rubaiyat of Omar Khayyam - no credit to me

      A layman's observations or rather perceptions in respect of differences between left and right brain are not always strictu sensu 'science' - many thanks for the encouragement and I hope the second half proves amusing


  • emma...
    August 30

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    WOW. This is epic xD Extremely well written, but I have to admit I skimmed a few parts :[ Sorry. Wonderful job; I can tell you put a LOT of time and effort into writing this.
    Thank you for entering, and good luck in the contest


  • kerrypn
    August 18

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    Epic! I very much enjoyed such a detailed exploration of both the female and male psyche-and at more than one point it had me quite perplexed-sometimes it seemed to be leaning in favour of one only to be completely reversed in the next verse. I found it quite amusing that your comments were so scathing on both sides, showing opposing ideas and thought processes, yet towards the end you quite rightly say they come together in harmony. The idea of highlighting the female and male aspects was a good one, it broke up the piece and simplified the distinction, I found it very easy to link the ideas together when they were so clearly marked. Very well written, deserved the trophy


  • afroqban
    July 14

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    this is just amazing. took me 3 times to read through it all (short attention span) but i always came back. it always called to me. wonderful job!


  • Lamia
    April 13

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    I applaud for no other reason than all the effort you put into this. This is terribly impressive haha. I will admit it took me a couple gos to get through all the material and I still don't understand all of it, but it's very interesting anyway. I also can't believe you got it all to rhyme and have such beautiful flow. Thank you for entering and good luck in the contest

  • I am sorry but I really cannot read that right now!! I may try again later but 1044 rhyming lines could be hell of a job for the reader. Just for the record, I happen to quite a fan of Omar Khayyam and it's nice to see that his works inspire the english poets too.

    I will try to return tonight.


  • Dark Otter
    January 20

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    That you took on the topic

    shows great courage. That you succeeded at it shows great poetic skill in both left and a right brain way. I promise a more in-depth comment at the time of judging and when I have done a thorough read.


  • Ms Raneika
    January 20

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    Thanks for entering your entry in my contest. this is quite the different piece of art. I like how you use the diferencse between the sexes. interesting.

    Love, Raneika


  • Night Hope gold member
    January 14

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    YESSS!!! This is the one. Thank you, dear Scribe. The list would not be complete without it. G'night, my Friend. Sweet dreams.


  • broken-colours
    November 19, 2008

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    "Invention : information channelled, spelled,
    Where end result is traced from chase compelled
    by circumstance – necessity as dam –
    objective gained, no energy withheld.
    .
    Innovation : flashpoint few foresee,
    lightning strike, transforms reality,
    stems less from dam than from home grown desire,
    sires fires to damn conventionality."

    Very intriguing comparions of male and female thought processes. However, it didn't quite sound like a rant to me. Anyway, thanks for entering.


  • badnovocaine
    November 15, 2008

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    I read all of this, was a lot to read but beautiful at every single word, and yes I think you covered everything also

    Good job here
    Good luck in the contest, but I am sure with your talent you dont need any luck.


  • Blueskywonder
    November 13, 2008
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    WOW... I THINK YOU COVERED EVERYTHING!

  • vampedvixen
    October 15, 2008

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    The formatting of this poem works especially well, with all the capitalization, coloring and the huge pictures on the top. It's just too flashy to ignore. Good stuff. Hope to hear more from you in the future


  • bloved
    October 12, 2008

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    "Invention is the blossom on the tree,
    whose scent is innovation - what role we
    elect to play is weighed by hand which writes
    the score for music that posterity
    will use or will abuse, for good or ill,
    to chain or free, the Future’s dreams fulfill
    to mar, or let men Mars and far stars reach,
    empower'd by women who will not stand still."


    "She minds her peace, he gives her piece of mind.
    Unkind he stays, strays often, - should she mind ?
    She’s paradise, he’s dice parade between
    the knots he ties [w]hitch she must then unwind.

    .

    She works her shift, he shifts his work to her.
    He, shiftless, shifty, silky shifts will spur !
    He preys on her where she for him would pray, -
    Her pay he’d tax where she’d life lax prefer !

    .

    She cares for kids, where he kids, cares to rest
    before some sport - while she supports the rest,
    works both from nine to five and five to nine.
    He sports bright ties - light ties prefers the best !

    .

    She looks ahead while he, as head, looks on
    good looks - which in her book is more than wrong,
    regretting grass seems greener through the fence -
    defence of dreams is sold short, for a song."





    This is possibly the longest poem I've ever read, but I asm so glad I read this. It took me a few days to digest this piece, but overall this was one of my favorite pieces. It's intelligent,clever,poetic, and well informed.

    It is always refreshing to read pieces that are not cliche and a little on the qirky side. I am a little tired reading poems about love, the lost of love, suicide, self harm, and bascially teenage bullshit.

    Thank you for the originality.



  • Harlequin Dance
    September 22, 2008

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    No kidding...this is the longest poem I've ever read. I'm impressed, if just by the time and effort spent writing this.


  • crivanea silver member
    August 5, 2008

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    longest poem i ever read....man..my eyes are seeing things...everything is so blurrry..lol..i'm very impress..AP is lucky to have a talented poet like you. wow...i'm still dizzy w/ this epic...although i do feel like some lines could be done without..i appreciate the originality...wonderful poem...good luck


  • lowercase prelude gold member
    July 21, 2008

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    this was truly epic. i never thought i'd read something this long, but i am glad i did. this was great

  • Night Hope gold member
    June 2, 2008
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    John Doe can just bite me. You know this has long been my favorite epic of yours, dear Scribe. It was, indeed, the very catalyst that brought us together in friendship. Your level of genius, dedication to the arts, efforts in producing & presenting such magnificent feats of literature have long left me in awe. Go ahead & "show off" your intellect as much as you choose to do. There are many of us who are constantly astounded by your talents & skills. Thank you for entering, my Friend. Good luck in the contest, Sweetie. Wanda


  • Emerald Rose
    May 15, 2008

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    this is really long. nice job in following the rules good luck in the contest and nice style.

    ali


  • 2lullabyhaven
    April 21, 2008

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    Thank you for your fine and elegant entry - smile - thogh rather long, it being so special more than compensates the length..lol

  • sanjay kanna
    April 12, 2008

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    Excellent!

    Really you've given such a long and wonderful piece. I was unable to read or understand in a single sitting. To be frank, I am still more to understand the poem. You may have divided this into parts. Thank you so much for your entry.


  • 2lullabyhaven
    April 7, 2008
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    Please, forgive me any oversight, what is the form you wrote this in...thanks


  • ears2hearyou gold member
    March 10, 2008

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    clever, clever, clever..

    That was clever! I feel like i've had a Cranial
    intervention! What a smart thing to do at that
    conference with this write, erasing the voices of
    doubt and mistrust to help everyone understand the
    vast abilities of our own network's wiring.
    Right or Left, Left or Right, the internet does not
    care, it just feeds upon our imaginations and prompts.

    easily transferable to the relationships of
    gender. On another level...I have to admit that
    even watching those daytime tv shows where the sexes
    are not so easily defined...and relationships are
    mixed genders, that they too..have the same trouble
    and blues, as those who are opposite genders to each
    other. I laughed...see, it isn't just us "females"
    that are hard to understand!

    Below is my Favorite Verses:
    I could write poems for many years just based
    on that write! good job poet, my gawd...
    will make sure and read your writes if I ever
    feel left brained! lol good job!
    amazing! I have noticed that poetry devices do
    allow us to switch gears and that is fun to do
    even when your clueless as to how you accomplished it.


    Right brain responds, to empathize its rôle.
    Left brain reacts, to emphasize control.
    Each needs a dose of each to reach the stars -
    who little care for spins from pole to pole.
    If SHE could auto reproduce or clone,

    If SHE the race continued all alone,
    what trace would HE retain who, vain, sees end
    as master, losing face, to lying prone ?
    If HE, who least believes, seems set in stone,

    If HE, who most receives, leaves self-righteous moan
    then Mona Lisa sentence might suspend
    and spare the rib that cuts her to the bone.
    Man moons explores, redraws the map of space,

    finds flaws in much before his hand did trace,
    perhaps time-out, return to drawing board,
    might ready scene for a more steady pace
    where symbiosis, Right and Left help face
    a future free from fear of fall from grace,
    where Woman is by Man nor spurned, ignored
    as if HE could HER talents e’er replace !
    Some dream their acts, some act their dreams, and here

    The reader sees both weakness, strengths, appear
    to complement each other – we may work
    to integrate all aspects, coded clear.


  • Luminescence
    March 3, 2008

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    I really tried to read this I did.... but alas, I have to attention span of a peanut butter adn jelly sandwich.... and I can't really give you a score.. when I didn't really read it.

    Sorry,
    ~lumin


  • Room without doors gold member
    January 6, 2008

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    Outstanding

    I rated this poem very highly - amongst the best of your work. I loved how you highlighted left and right brain function which made the poem even more fasinating. This is a real meeting of philosophy and psychology and presented for me an intellectual poem that analyses, defines and investigates all with a sophisticated desire to examine the concepts of the poem in a fresh and original way. Add to this the strength of the rhyme scheme and the remarkable flow and it is difficult to find fault. I liked how you brought so many different concepts together with such an effortless understanding and made the whole debate easily accesible to the reader. Overall a fantatic poem full of insight and depth.


  • Avatar of Innocence
    December 29, 2007
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    Worthwile Read. What did you mean exactly that htere were no debates "on the subject of the differences between Innovation and Invention during the entire conference"? I'd like to know more about the opposing sides in order to form my own conclusions.

    Or were the people present at the debate reluctant to express their views? It's hard to believe that people there could be that tentative.

  • Avatar of Innocence
    December 29, 2007
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    I sicerely apologize for the late critique. Unbecoming of my characte

    The first stanza got me worked up. Looking at your work as a whole, there are really concrete rhyming, though both masculine and feminie. There are not really any psedo-rhymes, so I tried everything to figure it out. Here's my suggestion, first stanza, last line: "soars". Ambiguous, yes-- and possibly inapplicable, but for the sake of rhyming euphony, I think it works.

    The eighteenth stanza after the condensed three stanzas, line has merged words: whetthe. I know you meant whet the.

    DIGRESSION:

    It could possibly be easier to analyze the poem if it were somehow broken up into chapters. Rather than take away from the holistic view of the poem, it would bring it together and give the reader better references. I think the rubaiyat form doesn't discourage from using numbers or chapters, but I could be wrong.

    I appreciate the uniqueness (or possible indecisive neurosis hahahah) of the word changes in brackets. I really love ambiguity in poetry. The presentation of this poem as jewel with the light refracting from and within its facets to show each reader a different color is astounding.

    Though this poem wasn't what I was looking for, I found something extraordinary in it aside from its length. I know the initial message seems to be the superiority of women's thought processes (being more right-brained), but I was inspired to believe that neither is really better than the other, but both are necessary to be whole. The unspoken equilibriun is fantascially reflected in this poem.

    "Who would evolve must choose from many doors, -

    each offers either fame, or blame, doom draws."

    How about "choose from many a cause [or laws]".


    Who would advance must, knock on those doors,
    How about[open lion's jaws]

    last line: ditties? why not just absurdities? or was that a pause in the thought?


  • Night Hope gold member
    December 15, 2007
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    I rest my case, dear Scribe. You ARE most worthy of any & all praise. Wanda


  • Simply Simple
    December 12, 2007

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    Wow... long. My head hurts now. I actually had to look up a few words. (No I'm not stupid; just thirteen.) Anyway. It was very interesting and a learned something from it. Great job and best of luck.


  • Heavenly Angel gold member
    December 10, 2007

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    Read through again and I think this is very well done
    It is very long but it is so worth the read
    Thank you for sharing and for being in this contest!
    The best of luck to you


  • Avatar of Innocence
    November 19, 2007
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    I also read directions, like I read your notes before I started reading this poem.

  • Avatar of Innocence
    November 19, 2007

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    Eek. Another long poem to digest. Well, I did ask for it. I will take about 2 days to fully analyze this poem. First I will read this entire poem silently to search for conflicts in grammar, tone, message or other diction areas. Next I will read the whole poem aloud to myself to assess the meter (if there is one, I'll figure it out when I read aloud) the internal/external rhyme scheme and the flow of the words in relation to the flow of the message. I will then give you my first impressions of the work as a whole. Then I will critique this poem stanza by stanza. If there are parts of this poem that I don't understand, then I will research it or ask for your papers regarding this topic.

    Don't worry, I guarantee you a full critique. I keep my promises.


  • Myjoy gold member
    November 9, 2007

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    Oh my dear God! That was crazy. Good luck with that one, hope more take the time to read. It's worth it. Thanks for sharing.


  • CherryOnTop
    October 28, 2007
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    A lot of time and effort was put into this piece. Good job!!Good luck in my contest.


  • Crook Oneil
    October 15, 2007

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    very well done! i have read very few works written in this style, and you seem to have mastered each rubaiyat well.


  • Aralyn Leighanna
    October 2, 2007
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    This is GORGEUOUS, truly beautiful... but I am sad to say I can not place your piece, due to somthing that is missing in your author's notes.. a very, very sad shame.
    Thank you for entering and for sharing this stunning work.

    Live and Let Live,
    Aralyn


  • Lily of the Valley
    September 3, 2007

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    The topic of this poem is one that I have always found fascinating and I think there are many people who might find some answers here as to how and why the male and female brain functions in different ways when posed with the same situations. I think there is a clear distinction, not only in how each gender responds to situations but also in how we initially view them. The easiest way for me to think of this is that men see things as black and white where as women will see the shades of grey in between. While neither view could be said to be wrong or right (at odds, on par) they both start from the same point but traverse separate routes (Invention, innovation, share few tracks) to reach a conclusion, which may ultimately be similar if not the same.

    There are many issues covered in this poem that are generally perceived as the stereotypical image of male and female thought processes, actions, reactions and responses, many of which may be viewed as serious while others are humorous, but all appear to me to be realistic. One line that really struck a cord with me is “Left little patience shows for double Dutch” because most women are so good at it in varying areas, yet men do not appear to understand the reasoning for it nor the humour it contains and find it extremely frustrating. (Right out of senseless Nothing can provoke / a conscious Something to offset all yoke) This different approach could be viewed simply as men thinking and behaving in a logical manner where as women will explore every conceivable and illogical avenue to reach their intended goal. Considering that the majority of women achieve their goal one way or another, where as men will often change their intended goal if they can not reach it by a logical route leads me to wonder if women are smarter than men, but I don’t think this is a debate that will ever be concluded with satisfaction and this poem is not looking at a battle of the sexes in that way.

    I find it interesting that as humans we divide ‘thinking’ into male and female but there are definitely traits that the majority of men follow and similarly the majority of women tent to follow a different set, though there are always exceptions to the rule and this is where the opposite side of the brain must have more control. As a female, I believe I have a more dominant left brain set of characteristics and I am sure many other women do too.

    I think this poem shows us that we each have a left and right brain which governs our thought processes and actions which helps build our unique personalities. One without the other is out of balance and I think people who experience this have difficulty understanding how others can be completely the opposite too them. I’m sure we all know of relationships with constant friction because one person is neat and tidy in their approach to life while the other is not, or possibly one person likes to plan while the other prefers to do things on the spur of the moment. I found the stanza “Both high I.Q. and gift of second sight / fail in the scales however smart or bright, / if peace of mind, serenity, none find / to burnish daily bind with inner light” made me think that hopefully, even though we might have one side more dominant than the other, it is not so far out of balance that we can not see or accept the views of others now and then, other wise living and working with them (or ourselves) has more than the normal amount of potential difficulties. The conclusion I draw from all this is that men and women, male and female thought, work in harmony to balance and complement each other.

    Personally I think the majority of the way our left or right brain is developed is due to genetics and has little to do with the influences we receive from our surroundings although it is possible they play some small part. All though it is possible to ‘train’ brains to think other ways it amounts to asking someone to change their personality, not unheard of but extremely rare, especially over a length of time.

    The conclusion I draw from all this is that men and women, male and female thought, work in harmony to balance and complement each other and that's how it should be.

    On the other hand, where would the world be without us women to keep men on the ‘right’ track? lol


  • Taxing Minds
    July 27, 2007

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    Wow, that is most of what I can say. A very long write and when reading over 100 entries not exactly one that I was looking forward to, but you proved me wrong and showed me that even long entries can be great entries. Thank you for entering


  • Swan song gold member
    July 10, 2007

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    Holy poo poo, I may need to be careful of that I ask.
    How many months did you work on this thing.
    I have survived the first read, and I see the eternal poems i will be back to read again thank you

  • Nicole Hanna
    June 18, 2007

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    I didn't read the notes beforehand, because I hate following the directions of strangers. lol. And, I'll be honest, I'm not a fan of notes at all. I don't begrudge you for having them, of course, I just prefer to see what I'd like to see in the piece without the following "hand" that guides, if you will. With this piece, for me, you could have potentially carried the entire human race with your words, though I doubt we can ever be explained scientifically, emotionally or otherwise. Though it's presented here that the green sections represent the right brain which women seem to demonstrate most, I'm quite happy to admit those were the sections I was least interested in. lol I found myself immediately skipping to the blue sections then forcing myself to go back and read the green. I'm not exactly sure what that says about me in conjunction with the woman/right brain theory. But I like to psycho-analyze myself to the point that this is something I'll ruminate over for the rest of the day.

  • Heavenly Angel gold member
    June 13, 2007
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    Extremely long piece but worth the read
    I think this is very well done and I wish you the very best in this contest


  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    February 23, 2007

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    That man is a very clever thinker, and is into complex reasoning. Although I am a quick reader this took me a half hour to read. By 200 lines I was tired... though not because I lost interest, moreover my eyes tired. I believe that you should put these in kind of little sequences, like in chapters if you will. It also slows the page down a bit so I would suggest you do that. Great write though and very well put you are well educated and this shows within your writing. Thank you very much for sharing.


  • crimson rose 247
    January 27, 2007

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    My Head Hurts

    I had a debate between left and right in there, and I went mad, and your use of english word and play with it is astounding at times i read the letter that were in paranthesis, other times i just scammed.
    what did Fitzgerald ever do to you? along with Omar Khayyam? lol! I had a blast reading this, though this is not exactly interlocking rubayi, because of the rhyme scheme, AABA, BBCB, CCDC... all the way ZZAZ, making a full circle. But i didnt expect anyone to try and reach that, in fact i think you went above that! I simply adored this, this revolves around life in general.. gave me quite an intellectual read to go through. wow wow wow.. so many memorable lines! you gave shakespear a run in the debate between Brutus and Anthony, you would have won obviously!
    thank you for your submissial!


  • CarolDesjarlais silver member
    January 26, 2007

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    At your request...my immediate thoughts

    Printed on my heart, truths have blossomed into new being.
    We get so caught up in eternity we do forget the here and now and how we affect it.
    We are our own truths. What each of us writes is truth.
    To agree or disagree still evokes thought.
    A woman’s heart adds heat to a man’s word; a man adds lineal logic to a woman’s worry. Two, thinking together can solve the test of today. A woman would think “sunk” and pray for guidance, while a man is making a map to get out. Both are right for without both, neither would have the heart to strike out. “Knowledge must link to Intuition’s guide. “ We cannot imagine, I think, what we could know if we knew it together.

    Invention is the light that has been allowed, innovation is how light is deferred and disseminated. Therefore, we see what is spotlighted and what has been perhaps hidden in shadows.
    “Left works with teams, Right teems with works “ but work nonetheless and together we get not straight lines done, but depth beneath by happenstance?
    I am one who learns best by doing, not being told how to do something. Perhaps that is my gender because most men I know will read the damned instructions. *smile*
    So often, I will try to do something another’s way and when it irks, I simply do it my own, and rightly so. I never forget how once done. But to memorize means to do something for the immediate demand and then discard it as useless.
    What man sees as set in stone is merely a guide and one to be individually defined to meet the sudden circumstance of fallings down. And I know insight often comes from the tumble and I bear it no disregard but regard it highly for its insight.
    I see men afraid of most uncontrolled adventures and must monitor the risk, but women will jump in with no forethought other than that they might be too precious to be drowned.
    Once, when I needed to be heard the most, I began…”I feel…” to which the males responded, “You should not feel, that is your problem.” He was afraid to feel for it outdid his sensibility, so to speak, and it was too vulnerable a place to be.
    It is a kind of mentality that says, “Do not reinvent the wheel” versus “a wheel, I wonder what I could do with it.”
    As you have written this, you have delved into it, deeper and deeper, and have dipped into feminine thought, right brain bent. It is almost so logical I got lost, but then I started taking it line by line, word by word and it began to make more and more sense to me. I was relating to it from a woman’s organized thought process.
    “Left brain firm trains, explains, holds doubt a vice,
    ‘method’ blessed in Prussian terms precise,
    Right seeks advice, to ‘When ?’ adds ‘Why ?’
    to [[[[[[[[[[[[[[trynew]]]]]]]]]]] ways to ‘scape predestination’s vice. “
    It seems to be a man-thing to say “I have no luck” and sink into a slight depression when something goes wrong. But, give a woman a setback and more often than not, she will scoop up that failure and make something new of it, something new of herself and call it “fate”.
    “Right brain responds, to empathize its rôle….Left brain reacts, to emphasize control. … Each needs a dose of each to reach the stars -…thus inspiration gleams through different ways “ You are a gentleman and a scholar, sir, let no man or woman guess against it.
    The key to it is most likely thus: “‘Invent’, ‘Create’” and both are the same but perhaps in intent. “a helping hand can often lend connecting inklings into solid sense. “…”imagine links between effect and cause,” if we but balance right and left. ““the seeds of wisdom both would sow”, each with his, her “hand conjurs it to grow”: “
    While it seems to be that men believe love can be bought, a woman would rather a hug than a handful of roses.
    “One seeks to ‘know it all’ the other patterns ‘search’ itself“….I hear so many men coming to this belief and thought. I hear them inemy everyday wanderings and sitting at coffee tables with a bunch of men, it is apparent, even the oldtimers are understanding, now, perhaps too late, that time has either “softened” them or it was indeed the search that made it worthy.
    “Left inches onwards, then momentum gains, Right finds but slight delight in careful pains, on tangents travels till the paradox should solve itself - though paradox remains !” It is true that we will run to the sound of gunfire rather than run to make a plan how to win what surely ahs to be a fight.
    In a nutshell, the sweet meat: “There is a Door to which Right finds no Key; There is a Veil through which Left might not see: - each needs the other in Life’s partnership to sail towards sweet serendipity. “
    “Though Left and Right in opposition seem, Like Yin and Yang they’re complements, a team to win the Way which choice may add to voice, although wicks burn, the turn can pick up steam..” Yes! Yes! Somehow we have to come to terms that difference is merely enhancement. “embracing even active intervention from preconception, stated point of view..”

    This is something I must print off and study more than this time allows. Your insight and expression are comparable to none.

  • Yvette Champ gold member
    January 21, 2007

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    Oh my,to be frank I have to bookmark to read this through several times to assimilate all the points herin.Whilst we have little control of our natural prclivity to be right/left brain user we are able to recognize which we are and indeed we may fire new synapses upon learning and by keeping an open mind we free ourselves as opposed to limit ourselves.Love and light,Yvette


  • Iohagh
    January 19, 2007

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    I think I'll go rest now after all that...

    Darling

    Maybe today or tomorrow
    my master teacher's poem
    I'll find and borrow
    on philosophy in tome.

    He covers many points
    and does it well
    some your writing appoints
    as I can tell.

    Smoosh

    Janet


    I'll also advise him to put his poetry here since they are interested in this type philosophical stuff.


  • DK akaLunaticSerene gold member
    January 12, 2007

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    Woman does not emerge from a man's rib's, not ever,
    it's he who emerges from her womb
    like a fish rising from depths of water
    and like streams that branch away from a river
    It's he who circles the sun of her eyes
    and imagines he is fixed in place
    ~ from 'I have no Power'
    by: Nizar Qabbani 1923-1998


    little boy playing fireman
    a need to be needed
    to do the rescuing.

    inferiority lies in the need
    to see superiority reflected
    in superior eyes.

    conversely superiority lies
    in the wisdom that allows
    the inferior to feel
    what they need to feel
    understanding perception
    is relative

    example this with
    when being lost
    refusing to ask
    directions.
    Being ignorant
    is prefered
    to being percieved
    as such.

    heroism requires tragedy
    to be staged

    the professor's eye
    so wise, filled with answers
    she can hide.

    all knowing, enlightened one
    artist, sculptor, expert in her media
    mistress of the guile-lessly asked question

    take my hand, allow me to
    proceed you down my garden path
    please be attentive as I may need your assistance

    observe: built in obsolescence of text books in harems

    Full text script writ in iridology
    Greek to him,
    so he carries a blackberry
    to translate Greek to Man

    though machine screens, the heartless things
    never return a soulful gaze

    yet each morning upon
    waking, he gifts me with
    flowering eyes

    blackberries allow limitless
    games in one hand's palm
    but sometimes also never understand
    the significance of irises

    alas I, small
    and insignifcant as I am
    still cannot fit in his pocket


  • Norman Crabtree
    January 9, 2007

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    thank you for entering my contest!

    i would have to agree with a comment below. although this is an obviously really intelligent poem and one that emcompasses complex ideas. despite this though at over 6000 words it was frankly unreadable in a contest of this size. i did try to read it but didnt get a clear path through, and was often confused by ideas coming at me left right and centre.


  • duana
    April 4, 2005
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    With each stanza, I sink deeper and deeper into a black hole...

    You really should write a novel(or series) based in your own theory and paradigm you have developed to make it easier and enjoyable to understand. That is how most people get famous too, and one great novel and theory for people to puzzle over can set all your future generations for life finanacially
    Okay that was humorous, but series.

    Can I just cut and paste everything my poetic soul sister Nighthope said? lol.

    Seriously, I feel inadequate to respond. Geeze, the research I did for my graduate studies was easier to read and understand than this This is not easy stuff to grasp, and I am not sure exactly why. Part of it is the needed time and patience to sit down and read it carefully off screen, but the other part is knowledge is built on the giants of others(hm who said that- some great mathematician but I forget....). Yeah, so...

    but it's really not that bad- it does get easier as it goes along eventually(instead of harder as you expect), and we get rescued from the black hole. I have studied the differences between the right and left brain...a long time ago though. The question is what to do with all this description and understanding. Why is applying always the hard part

    Well, my answer is an avoidance to your poem. I am sure you would not expect even Albert Einstein to read this one time, and write an adequate response...so I am off the hook.

    I will think about it though personally too.

    Need I say I am impressed? I will print this and read again and get back to you.


  • rindomai
    March 24, 2005
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    wow! unfortunately FAR too long to read in the amount of time i have (i gotta run to class lol), but AMAZING. that would make one helluva paper... seriously. geez...

  • sweethunni
    March 24, 2005
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    really good

    wow this is the longest poem i have ever read

  • ecrivain01
    March 23, 2005
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    good job

    The two worthy ladies above have very ably and succinctly told the tale. I felt like I was drowning in words, although it wasn't necessarily a bad experience, it was a stupifying one. I suspect you could make at least 30 or 40 poems out of this, and it really does encompass a lot of territory. I suppose if I weren't worn out and ready for bed, I might have made a better job of comprehending this. I do know that I found this particularly intriguing because of the information I read earlier today on the internet about the human genome being 1.5 percent different from that of a chimpanzee, and that of a female being 1 per cent different from a male, thus saying that the difference between male and female humans is about 2/3rds of the difference between man and chimpanzee. From that, and the information about the differences between male and female brains that were quoted in the article, this poem became almost a dissertation on the subject matter I was reading earlier, at least in my mind. Anyway, this is a mind-numbing read, but it certainly does have some particularly salient and powerful points to make, and the vocabulary in it lends itself well to the story you're telling. All in all, a good poem, but I wish it were chopped up into its component parts. It would be much easier to grasp. I have, however, gleaned from this, the idea that we tend to agree on many things, including the environment and human rights. Good job.

  • Night Hope gold member
    March 23, 2005
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    Incredible!!!

    'Invention is an option exercized
    reversing roles, or process organized, ~
    what complicated seemed in time gleams bright
    as simple step ahead on path disguised.'


    If ever a piece begged for an in~depth, scholarly review, then this is it...I must say, this is one of the finest pennings I've ever had the distinct Honour of reading...not just here at AP, but in a general Life~long sense...I worked in a college library for over 12 years; I am an eternally voracious reader, & I adore Omar Khayyam's works...Yet, I am dismayed to admit to you that I feel quite incapable of any sort of lucid commentary & would only do this penning a terrible injustice by attempting to do so...(not to mention sleep~deprivation, accompanied by a two~day old migraine...blech)...Jonathan, are you published anywhere? You certainly should be, Scribe...This is a completely Life~encompassing composition & demands the utmost in concentration & acknowledgement...I am most impressed...& slightly flabbergasted by the entirety of it...to say, 'Well done!!!' seems a bit understated & lacking in magnanimity...I would suggest, if you have not done so already, that you submit this piece to a quarterly of poetic scholarly attributes...It is much too fine a write to grace these Hallowed Halls...Your title is most apropos...I am a bit stunned to have discovered this shining star lying about on a dust~covered back~shelf in this 'library' of cyberspace...It deserves its own space, at the forefront of the annals of literary exposition...May I just say, I am Honoured to have had the privilege of reading this? This is an obviously well thought~out creation, Sir...Bravo!!! I shall print out a copy, at first opportunity, in order to be able to read & re~read it again & again, as I know I will find different facets glimmering & gleaming upon each new digestion of this work...well done, Jonathan!!! Wanda


  • HeavenScent4U
    March 22, 2005
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    Jonathan, this again I must say is one of the longest pieces I have ever tried to read and to be honest, this time dear friend, I had to skip parts as, as soon as I grasped one thought, you got into another in a slightly different way and I lost track of what the thought I just grasped was. I believe that if this was broken up into installments, it would be much easier to grasp and comprehend. I can kind of see in parts why you wanted me to read this but, just too much here to comrehend, not like your last piece I commented on.

    Maybe someone else could make sense of this whole thing however; myself, just too much info here hun. I was about to ask if by some chance you were schiztophrenic and having an argument with your two selves? lol

    Anyways, I will attemp to read the other write you asked me but I think it will have to wait until tomorrow as my brain is now officially fried from reading this. lol
    Be Well and Be Blessed.
    Is there any way to simplify what you are trying to say here? lol

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