When you kiss your best friend, everything changes
How you think and act, how you come to depend
No one could have fore told what the futre would hold
In a dark theater, I was cold
I distinctly remember you breaking up with your girlfriend
And saying "I hate her"
It was never meant to be, you were always
Like a brother to me...
You put your hand upon leg, I was so very cold
Our eyes met, I'll never forget, they seemed to beg
For someone comforting to touch or to hold
For one fleeting moment, we were as one
And the damage had been done
I love someone else so very much
It didn't mean anything for your lips
To touch mine, and it had just become more clear
We had both crossed a line
You withdrew from me, back to watching the Star Wars movie
Leaving me again cold, and feeling ten times as lonely
We dreaded the ending credits, neither would speak
Hardly talking, for almost a week
2 days at the most, but it seemed like forever
That night you called your girlfriend
I wrote my true love
In time we forgot all the things I have written above
Yet we both learned, what happens when
You kiss your best friend.
Author notes
Just a little story about two lonely friends, and what can happen. True situation. It changes things, but sometimes it fixes others.
Written October 15th, 2002
A contest entry
- *...>Inlove With My Best Friend by Lislaine.
450 points, ended September 2, 2008, 30 entries
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Ah, the angst of crossing that friend/romance line. It can really never be forgotten, even when you don't think about it anymore, it colors the relationship in subtle ways that weren't there before. Thanks for entering and good luck in the contest!
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Aww nice!!! beautiful!! i like it!! goodluck!
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Wow! This is well written, and although I can't personally relate to this, I've seen similar situations among friends. Fortunately, my friends were able to work things out, and not come out messy. I know it doesn't always work that way, but it's nice to think that all of these situations eventually will...
Overall I really enjoyed this write, I think your writing has so much talent already, and potential for so much more! I hope you pursue it to new levels in the future!
My only suggestion for you, something I find alot of poems are lacking, so I'm not just picking on you, would be to add some punctuation. Grammar is a really vital part of poetry because it allows the reader to understand each thought and each phrase as you intended to write it. Where as a poem lacking any punctuation could have the potential to lead the reader astray, therefore causing him to draw a completely different conclusion than you intended to give.
Just a suggestion though!
Best wishes fellow poet,
Shirley
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excellent
hmmm...sounds familiar to me, yet i kissed my ex's best friend, and it was just like a moment thing and for about 2 days we couldn't talk either (the guy i kissed) and my ex supposedly isn't mad but i think he is. oh well, it happens, and life goes on. great write.
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