I never thought I'd hear you say that we needed to take a break,
I thought that we understood that we both made mistakes,
I beleived that niether of us meant to hurt each other!!
Why!?!...( if she was nothing), why can't you trust yourself?
I beleived you when you said it was all fake...that it was revenge,
why are you pending more suspicions?
If you needed a break, why couldn't you just say it on the phone?!?
Why'd you end it while I was offline?
Why'd you do it on the worst day of my life?!?
If you say you didn't actually cheat....
then i guess you're saying it's not actually your fault,
............it's me, right?............
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Written March 15th, 2005
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Beautiful work, I can totally relate. Maybe you want to check for some typo's. Other then that.. AWESOME!
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no problem
heh oh yay!
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I'm glad you learned your mistake...I hope that he does too. *sigh* but no worries..
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Thank you...
ok if it was nothing major than I guess I could forgive you
thanks for commenting!!
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this is a really good poem.....it shows the problems relationships face and it shows that you have a lot of emotion and a lot of questions that need answering...when things like this happen all anyone wants to do is ask why and how, and revenge is also always a bad thing, it might seem good at first, but it probably ends up hurting everyone even more, i hope that you can get through this and it gets better - well done on a great poem xxx-xxx
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Aw.. I know how this feels and it is always confusing. Cheaters never prosper, just remember that. I used to cheat and learned the error of my ways. Perhaps someday this person you speak of will learn the error too and fix it like I have. I'm now happily with someone but who's to say it will last long? Just keep your head held high and never look at the ground. It only makes you unaware of what goes on around you. I enjoyed reading this and I think the flow was pretty good. It was a little sketchy on the first verse but all smoothed out well.
-Much love
-Kayla
Edited on Mar 15, 2:32 p.m. because 'I can't spell. haha'. -
gah i know this sort of feeling WAAAAAY too well... seriously. 'cept i broke up with him a year and a half after he cheated on me. i couldn't take it anymore. sounds like he cheated on you. in which case - even if you really want to stay with him - it's better this way. believe me, i know it sucks. breaking up with him was the hardest thing i've ever done. but i'm SO much happier for doing it. give it some time... things get better. and one day, you'll look back on it and realize he cheated and wasn't worth the hurt anyway.
take care.
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