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Distant Dreams

Distant dreams of yon' before
I have lost your favor
Distant dreams I do ignore
Now they have no flavor
Distant dreams of pungent smell
I want to remember
Distant dreams share memories
Why keep the bad and lose the good?

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Written March 14th, 2005

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  • lisapoet
    August 17, 2008

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    I liked the metaphors. "No flavor", "pungent smell" both gave great imagery. Should it be, "distant dreams, shared memories"? Or am I confused? I really like the flavor tie-in. Good job