Folks think that nothing happens out here
Where the wheat and corn ripple under wind
But I've seen the circles come then disappear
Under no influence born witness by men
And father's not himself anymore
All he does is drink in the swing
While mom is out working at the shoe factory.
The cows have died off
The horses ran away
The chickens will not lay eggs
And nights take longer than days
My dog went missing too
Since the carnival came to town.
I've met a young man with
Stories and fresh fruit
With a new Swiss Army knife
And now that the war is over
He wants me for a wife.
But father won't let me be on my own
And the bottle keeps him up all night
All circles end, and come in pairs
Who's to say monsters ain't right.
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I commented on sleepless sleepers
Written March 14th, 2005
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First of all thank you for entering. i enjoyed this poem. The crop circles truly amaze me, and forever will, until the day that the truth about them is finally revealed. i loved the imagary used in this poem, and also the image you posted worked well with the poem. thanks agian, and good luck
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I like this piece because it requires a bit of effort on the readers part. Often we assume that a good poem is one that tells us the author's secrets when in truth they are none of our beeswax . This is quite a thought provoking write as it does not pick up the pencil for us and connect the dots. We have to draw some of our own conclusions, which may or may not be way off base. Each part of the poem means something to me and since I am the primary alien in my own universe, that is enough for me
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intereating piece. it is very well written and it had a good flow to it. thank you for entering! ~tyrtle
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To quote you, my friend, "fucking awesome". I'm all about the obscure references, no matter what anyone says. Even if I don't get 'em, you paint a great picture and I thank you for that. I also thank you for commenting on Serpents, and I'm glad you liked it. Nobody who knows me likes to read it, so I appreciate the kudos. I'll be reading more of your stuff! -
Don't hate me, I've paid my dues.
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As much as I hate to swell that head of yours even more than it already is... You do have a wide variety of talent, and it shows. This.. just a mere tiny miniscule example (since i have more favorites than this) but you definately seem to have the talent to "capture the essence" of things and become them yourself... lil' freak'ay... my name is christina and i'm scared to death of aliens.. plus coming from YOU of all people - this brings a lot of strange feelings for me.. i still hate you... congrats tho on the silver
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Such a deprived life I have lived, never seeing a crop circle.
This is interesting. In fact it takes the word to many different levels.
Thanks for entering.
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Very nice work indeed
David -
It's a contest poem edna, perhaps you should read the contest?
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Sorry, we must be on a different planet but I just don't understand his at all, at all. Too many obscure references for me...shoe factories? crop circles? in a swing? war's over? Phew!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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underwater basketweaving at its best.
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we have crop circles all over England.. they fascinate me, the colours, designs and perfections.. but then again.. I am easily pleased
but your poem, touched me, how life is a cirlce and crops being us.. well done my dear one
and Oi!!! why don't ya put your yahoo on..!!!! grrrrrrr
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Well written, although I don't understand the competition .. I really enjoyed your poem, it painted a vivid picture in my mind of the old farmhouse and Pa, swinging in the swing, swigging on his whiskey ... actually the imagery throughout the whole piece was impeccable .. and its been penned beautifully and flowed effortlessly too .. well done on an excellent write
~Aimee
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I liked it, it seemed to posses a kind of loose rhyme, but not to the point where it seems forced, although I doubt, from reading your previous poems, that you have any trouble creating rhymes that are not forced no matter how numerous or tight.
The imagery was nice, it did gave me a vision of an old farm with long strands of yellow grass.
and the last line did very well at wrapping things up
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An interesting interpretation of Christina. I can only imagine what Wyeth would have thought in reading this. It has a certain amount of humor to the imagery. I can't say it doesn't remind me of the stereotype ppl use for country music.
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It looks like a crop circle. Is it?
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