So.
How are you?
Do you smile on the things that make you happy or
rain tears on a world,
so overcast
by you;
breaking
falling
the weight of millions of profound things.
I miss you already.
It's been one day and I've counted every second that I
hope to never see you again.
Remember;
I was smiling like a fucking idiot when I said goodbye....
Potions, emotions, rolling oceans
drown yourself and sink with me.
Today was longer than any other day that I've had today and
I must say, if I had my way
I would choose to stay
with you
the sky is blue
the sea is gray.
Tonight, I will write a letter.
I think it may start like this
and end
too soon.
Author notes
Originally this author's note said that I didn't think this piece was good.
Myrataal made me change it, though. Now I don't know what to say about it.
Written March 14th, 2005
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This - “I miss you already./ It's been one day and I've counted every second that I/ hope to never see you again.” stabs me in the fucking face. Relate, relate, relate! Mm, fuck – you – everything – them – him – her, shit, fuck, hell -bitch! Zak! is love. ♥
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f****ing sweet
This poem is beautiful, just like you
*muah -
What I write is beautiful, just not this one.
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Well Zac, I think it's very good, you have to believe what you write is beautiful, and you write for yourself, you will always get some who like your work and some who don't, so write for YOU OK
Jenny
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Lately I've come to hate poetry that people write for and about themselves. All these angsty teens and their desperate cries for attention has damn near ruined introspection for me entirely.
I suppose my prejudiced to this type of poetry has extended even to my own work. If you request it changed, milady, then consider it changed. -
Zo ZZZZZZplendid
Oh you utterly poetic being. Now WHY in this world would you think this isn't good? Because it is for YOU? Now -- it is for me, too, and I am your reader, and an adMYRAr ... so pleeeezze: consider my age 
: : : I loved this poem ... And I love letters that begin and end too soon.
Whaddayasay Fella? Change that Author's comment ... 
Myra -
Zak...
The heart speaks words some may choose to ignore and cast away as being less than they,themselves, are capable of understanding..but when these words are written, those that see with eyes that know the depths of a world beyond what's visible...the meaning becomes clearer & the 'good' gets better
So many lines that are worthy of applause are contained in this personal choice of words...and where words fail..depth prevails..
Good is a matter of opinion..i find good in this write..many lines of it in fact
If you expect failure..it will come to pass...
~Pamela -
:") Thank you.
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There is nothing wrong with doing that. I'm glad that you posted it nonetheless. Sometimes you shouldn't try to make things sound good, poetry is the wonderful thing it is because it provides a form of release. Anyway, I love it, especially this;
Potions, emotions, rolling oceans
drown yourself and sink with me.
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