Him Her
'Hi!' he introduced himself,
'I'm Eric, 16/m, I'm new
I have no idea what
if anything, there is to do.'
'I'm Amy,' she typed back,
'female (like, d-uh)
since yur new,
lemme give u a welcome *mwaaa* '
'Mwaaa? Whats that?'
'It's a kiss in chat.'
'Ahhh..he said
I never knew that.'
'Location?' he asked,
getting into the game.
'A suburb of the city', she said
and told him its name.
A quick search through Google
Or maybe it was Ask Jeeves
And her community info popped on his screen
for him to use as he would please.
'Do u go to Tompson High?'
He asked as he read the screen.
'No, I'm on the east side', she replied
as oblivious as can be.
In a few clicks more,
Information on the school.
He read the address, not far away.
'Really, oh hey..I go there too!'
'That's so kool,' she typed him back,
'what grade r u in?'
'Oh, I just started', he reminded her
'Next Monday, I'll begin.'
'A few teachers to look out for
Mrs. King and Mr. Klien,
She's a bitch, he's an ass
they're homeroom for grade nine.'
'I'll remember that', he typed her back
'which 1 do u have this year'
'I have Mrs. King', she told him.
'If u get her, you'll have lots to fear.'
'Hey, what r u doing tonight?'
He asked her casually,
'A few friends I met are going out
I don't suppose you'd want to go with me?'
'Where are u going?'
'Oh, just around town.
I don't know where anything is,
So we're just gonna bum around.'
'My uncle can pick u up
He lives near u.
He can drop u off at the mall
Maybe we can go to the zoo.'
'I think I can meet u
But I'll have to ask my mom.'
'Don't ask her', he typed out,
'she might not let u come.'
He smiled as she replied
'Ok...sure, yeah, we can meet.'
'Kewl! My uncle can pick u up
at the end of yur street.'
As simple as that,
He had her hooked.
He glanced at the mirror
and took a good look.
He ran his fingers through grey hair.
Well, stud....gotta big date tonight,
Bet she's a sweet little thing.
Hope this one won't put up a fight.
Author notes
This is a ficticious account, based on a chat that happened in Lycos Chat the night before in 2002.(some typos are done on purpose...chat lingo!)
A few other posts that deal with internet safety
allpoetry.com/poem/695302
allpoetry.com/Poem/1223123
allpoetry.com/poem/1224519
Written October 13th, 2002
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this poem is just plain amazing and so true, and it stays completely on topic with the rhyming.
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damn ..yeah i bet that stuff happenes all the time ...i have a lot of friends on the internet but ive never met one before ... i feel bad for tha girl
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Very deep. It gives me chills. That's all I can say.
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this gave me the chills .
you're right stuff like that happens
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amazing
perfect description for how bad the internet is
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that was scary and sickly thrilling at the same time.
-pixedddd
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I think this poem is is very good. It brings out a very important message. the last stanza is definetly an eye opener:
He ran his fingers through grey hair.
Well, stud....gotta big date tonight,
Bet she's a sweet little thing.
Hope this one won't put up a fight.
and its scary. but young people today need to realize that not everyone they talk to on the internet are good people or who they say they are. Keep up the good work. Look forward to reading more of your work.
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woah. This really brings out how dangerous the internet can be !!
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Terrific
Nice to see a great poem about the real dangers on the internet. As a father of 3 girls I can appreicate this piece. Sadly it seems o many on here just concentrate on the sexual writes.
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Right On!!!
Wow,such a simple write,from an everyday situation...
You kept me reading on and on!!
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very good write
i loved this poem it kept me on the edge of my seat all the way through. not too many u can really trust out there when u r talking to people online. just goes to show how every1 should be careful even the lil ones cause anybody can be a target with this chat.
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wow now that was great...I loved it big time
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Shocking.
This is shocking stuff, but a terrific poem. This only reiterates the theory that more needs to be done to protect kids from predators. Great job!
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This is really great, I have never read a like "chat room" thing on this site yet. The chat was pretty good, it seemed like it could happen just like this and I totally know the situation. So many times I've just been talking with random people and they're asking me all these personal questions its creepy. The world is crazy and dangerous, people need to be careful. Sometimes you forget that people aren't always who they are.
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Wow, it's scary to realize what kind of people there are out there. This really shines alot of light on
those who do this kind of thing, and it also shows how easy a person can fall into their trap. Hopefully this will open alot of eyes to the world and cause people to be alot more cautious when they're in a chat room.
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Well written!
This is so true and close to home for me, I have 3 daughters,14,19,3, and my teenager is always signing up for sites where you get to display your pics and age and shit like that, I deleted every single account she had after I saw she was talking with older men.
This type of crap scares me, I would KILL somebody, without a second thought, but I would not want to have to ya know.
I hate the Internet!
Great message here my friend.
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little girl be afraid is back
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Actually, it's 'little girl, use your damn brains because there are a lot of assholes out there that love to troll and cause issues'
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WOW. Beautifully written. Yeah, I got what it was about and it is true for most girls,well and everybody,thats why we dont tell anybody where we live haha anyways,good poem,well written and good internet slang(as i call it)
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i had doubts about a poem like this but it turned out amazing! BRILLIANT job!
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I got what this was about after the second part. Not that I'm a perv or anything, well, I am but not this kind of perv.
You did this well. It won't stop it but still well done.
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Happens more often than we expect too I'm betting. Great beware and be forwarned.
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This is awesome...Well done making it so gradual. It began so innocently, and slowly gained momentum until you knew that she was trapped.
I didn't find it too long--any shorter, and it would be too abrupt. You said every word you needed to, didn't go over the top or on for so long that it became redundant, and the story--I found--unfolded very nicely.
So awesome job... And the last stanza was awesome.
~QoA
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Holy shit! I didn't think this would be very good but it was! It totally blew me away. I don't need to tell you why, (110+ applauses does that) But I will tell you I was very very impressed with this. Superb job. It is a unique way of getting a very serious problem around.
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I don't think it is too long, it would be if you did not know how to keep an audience hooked. This happens all too much. I love that you are bringing awareness to an issue that many young ones have no idea about. This is a great write!! Good job!!
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nice write. I'm not a big fan of internet chat anyway
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THATREALLY TRUE WAY T UP AWEARENESS
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Liked it, but a bit too long.
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Great poem. It's not over the top which makes it extra eerie.
Really good work
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KoolZ But to long couldnt be bofard reading da rest
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This is an eerie account of what can actually happen though this is fiction. Well written and serves as a warning. Great write.
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wow, how can people be so naive? nicely done.
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interesting little poem you have here. Its good. I liked it
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Grand poem man, this is just the kind of poetry I like. Great work, I'll be checking out some of your other work in a minute.
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wow that's creepy... kinda reminds me of what happened some years ago. but then again it was on the phone to some strange person in jail.. that was freaky....but yeah.... nice piece =]
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As scary as people say this is, it's also a little funny! Of course, it's always good to watch out and not give out any personal information over the internet.
This is a good one!
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It's something in us, always keeping watch for others.
I know I still do.. Someone has to care.
I still got chills.. AND resolved to remember to ban my kids from their school comps again this year.. EGADS..
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An excellent poem with a very important message.
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Amazing
Hello....This is my first time I got a chance of reading your poem. Though it is a simple piece of literature with no classical touch in wording, style and diction, yet this poem maintains imperative significance that sarcastically reveals and criticises the curses of communication resources of contemporary times. Exploiters are misusing the chat rooms by fooling the innocent boys and girls and trapping them under the thick curtains of internet services.....Really wonderful poem in the perspective of modern age!!!
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wow
this sent chills down my spine...this is exactly the reason why i dont go into chatrooms. this is a poem that everyone of all ages should she. great write!!!!!!!
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The message comes out loud and clear! Why is it that we seem to believe everything someone just types on the internet? Who knows? We just got to be REALLY careful, that's all.
Good job!
Luv ya oodles!
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definately necessary, a good poem about safety on the internet.
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WOW excellent write..and how scary it is to think that this is so very true...
Kids just give out way to much information..
A wonderful write...I hope all our younger poets read this....
Thanks for sharing
Peace
~A~
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Excellent writing and even better topic. It always amazes me how many people say "I'm smarter than that though, I'd know if someone were lying"... no, they won't. People like your male subject are that good at what they do, maybe they believe their own lies.
I hope everyone reads this, as it's not just young people that can be lured.
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...scary...
This is why I hate chat rooms. You never know who you are talking to.
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woah
this is soo good an scary
esp the end part
oooh it gave me goosebumps lol
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this is gripping and frightening. I hope many youngsters will read this it could save lives.
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A very real subject... that doesn't get enough attention. Some kids don't realize just what little information it takes to really find out a lot about people. Great write which addresses a lot of things. Hope a lot of kids read this.
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this is intersting daddy why did u send this to me
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excellent job, and a must read for everyone who chats with uknown people on the net.. thanks for sharing.. love and cheers, shuvi
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Holy Crap!
It's hard to imagine so many people fall into this trap so often. Creepy people... Don't they have something better to do (like get a job.)? Horrible stuff happens online. Sometimes it's not a safe place for innocent folks. It's true - practice safety with your identity. -
very nice for you to put this out there for kids to read. think all young onees should read this because it happens all the time. very lovely job for sharing. although, some parts that are in color need to be redone in black, because the blaack is to show when someone isnt talllking. just to let you know. other than that, awesome for you putting this out there.
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Very well done!
very well done, the simplicity and mask of being young
and naive combined with the premeditation of a prowling predator seeking to steal our childrens innocence and youth.
It was frightening listening to him,how easy it was for him to do.
Great poem, we should put this on PEPSI and Coccacola cans, haven't you heard? teen girls don't drink milk,
they think it's fattening.
Thankyou for such a well written and pointedly painful
poem.
ears2hearyou
Kathleen
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Great poem
People are so oblivious to the dangers of the net. I would never meet anybody from online unless we've known each other for a while, i've seen them on cam and talked to them on the phone, and we're around the same age, etc. and I never meet them alone. Great poem
I hope kids will read this and take a second look at the seriousness of it.
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Nice, very nice turn at the end.
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Wooooooooow......Im so glad my AP dad gave me the link to this poem.This is a very good poem.I like the way you put it together and the way you typed the girls text in red and boys in blue that way the reader wont get confused.But the sad part is things really do happen like this....well anyways thanks so much for the read...I totally enjoyed.
~Tia~
GOD BLESS
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WOW this was absolutely fantastic; it seriously was - especially the end which was a real climax to the poem. ive been in her position myself - as in giving out too much information about myself and i know now, that im a little older just how dangerous it is - while it seems great craic that someone is from the same area as you, at the same time it is so so so dangerous - this poem should be read by everyone on this site - heres an applaud - so fantastically done!
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I really like this. Being 17 myslef it really does mean a lot to me that people care enough to write things like this.
This flows perfectly and although I usually hate end rhyme, it works so perfectly here. Kudos on the amazing write!
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Barbara, you've hit ths right on. It's so natural and flows just like a real online conversation. I hope some of the people who are most vulnerable to this type of thing, young people and lonely older people, those who think a little rendevous with an online stranger is harmless, take time to read this superbly written warning.
And thanks for also posting links to other items that deal with this very serious issue
Dee
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Hmm, weird how trusting people can be online. This was great, really shows the horror out there. Thanks for writing this. God Bless!
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creeeeeeepy *frowns*
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Wow... this is incredible. You should use this to EDU-tain parents about the dangers on the internet. If you don't mind, I would like to print this out and read it at my church. Is that ok?
John
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As long as my name appears with it as credit, since it is copyrighted, then it would be okay
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Wow... this is incredible. You should use this to EDU-tain parents about the dangers on the internet. If you don't mind, I would like to print this out and read it at my church. Is that ok?
John
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Scary and stressful -_- But true.
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Well done with this post! It's a great reminder for us all to be careful of what we say and who we say it to when we are online. We all fall prey and can easily be talked into anything sometimes. It's quite a scary fact especially with children. Thanks a lot for sharing this here! Keep up the wonderful work!
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Whoa! And it is just as easy as that. Kids are way to trusting today. And, the things they should be sharing, with their parents, they are not.
Very good read.
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Gave me chills, I have a niece who gives out info way to freely. Hope this may be a warning to kids like her.
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AHH-mazing!
This is really good! And it really tells people how easy it is for someone to do this! Greay job and keep writing!
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woah, does creep me out, sad in a way , as the girl is seemingly naive, makes me think.. how can people live with themselves like that?!
pretty good ^^
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I hate to think that things like that happen, but I know they do. This is a nice way to get the point across. Well done, Barbara. Horrible thought that people actually sink as low as to do that. Nicely done.
Love always,
Kristen ♥
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Awesome wtite and it painted the scenario in my head. very freaky...yet sadly true.
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Very true. Very creepy when you read it but it's true. It's very sad how oblivious a person can be. We are all warned but no one really understands how dire the consequences can be...
Great write!
-Killer2Loner
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This is a outstanding message to young people, Your parents should always know where you are and we you are with or meeting. I hope this message will save a young girl for harm or there families from a heart ache. Exellent write there should be more on this topic posted and set to the young and parents. LISA
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Scary thing is that could happen. Easily. a fantastic write illistrating the dangers of cyber communities
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WOW WOW WOW WOW!
That is totally amazing, I loved all of it.
Great work well done.
It had me thinking all the way through and then the conclusion made the whole write come together.
It's awesome
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Brilliant!
This poem was absolutely brilliant! I award you five stars! I will definitely post a link to this on my separate account. Thank you so much for writing this. I admit that I underestimate my chances of being stalked by a predator, just like this girl in the chat did, but you just reinforced a very important lesson to me: that even though a site may appear safe to use, it is not as secure as it seems. I haven't given out a lot of information on my web page, but that doesn't guarantee anything, as scary as it may sound. I loved the last stanza of your poem. It drove the point home.
~Enira
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This is so scary... It's amazing that if you just let a few details about yourself slip, then someone else can find you. Thanks for writing this... It really sends a message!!!
Always,
Cassie
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Scary how these things happen so easily. I've denied my sister privileges to use any kind of computer messaging except email, and that too, I will expect a password for. Wonderful way of driving it home.
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fucking scary..
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woo that is intresting
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this poem was a wonderful (and artistic) way of dealing with a situation prevelent in today's time. well done.
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I have a lot to chat bout it ...its a good lesson to the teens
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to not be a completely trusting dolt on the internet with people you meet in the chat rooms or anywhere else. never know when a troll might pop up, questioning others and make it annoying. Fairly soon, people give out innocent information that can go wrong.
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And collective indifference is better?
Some people are too trusting to give out information. It's still going on, and most ignore the official 'warnings' thinking it won't happen to them.
The poem is just that, a poem. It shows how easy it is to be tricked into giving information.
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where there is a will, there is a way and predators have the will.
people think they are being very careful in not giving out personal info online. your poem shows how easy it is to get more info when only very little is given.
i wish many more could read this... young and old alike
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preditors don't risk exposure by using the internet
to expose them
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Scary i know for I have teenager and she posted a few things on her myspace..well long story short, I deleted her myspace..now a few years older, I have allowed her to have one with me knowing the password and its set to private and I check it daily...This should be posted somewhere for all kids to see....its so frighteningly true and happens more than we hear about...great job...Kudos to you!!!!!!!!!!
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private is more dangereous like chat
can't be tracts by a community
but as long as your keeping track
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Great Poem, GREAT Message! I wished everyone could read this. Great work!!!! Regards Heh
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Yes Mark, It is so easy for these internet preditors to get information on these young girls. I am sure there are a few on this site too. I will definitely send a link to all my AP daughters to read this. Thank you for sharing my friend. I hope all is going well with you. Always nice to hear from you. Bless you . Take care, Sandy
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a local preditor can easily get a name
and would already present
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Ah, I remember reading this before. It's a really great reminder that we always should be careful, especially on the internet... I already knew the ending of this poem, but again, it quite scared me...
This one's worth reading over and over again!
♥ Ann
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very good
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Happens ever day - many times over ----- Thank you for posting
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