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The Orphan Train

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The city streets are dirty, dank, and dark,
And long forgotten children gather there.
Bleak tenements cast shadows black and stark,
And empty stomachs growl, no food to share.

Those dull and empty eyes that see no hope
Are held again in blank and depthless stare.
Pale faces gaunt as orphans try to cope,
Their desperation breeds a cruel despair.

The uniforms appear, surrounding all,
And frenzied, frightened children darkward dash.
There follows quickly a one-sided brawl,
And heads are bloodied by a truncheon’s crash.

They’re thrown in wagons, then sent off to jail,
A dreary cell till they can board the train.
A rag-tag group upon the western trail,
The past to lose – and everything to gain.

>------<

At station’s stop they march them out to stand them in a row.
Freshly scrubbed, to be shown off, these innocents don’t know,
Poked and prodded, muscles felt before the gawking crowd.
Should they smile or scream and yell, or stand there tall and proud?

The chosen few are led away, they're trembling and afraid.
Will they find their peace and rest, a family ready made?
The lives they knew now far behind, unsure of what’s ahead.
Would they choose to be back there, or facing this instead?

With shuffling feet and down-turned eyes, they clamber back aboard.
Bitter tears wash down the face of those who’ve been ignored.
A puff of steam, the whistle toots, the screech of steel on steel,
The next stop getting closer now, with each turn of the wheel.

The Orphan Train’s a’comin’ to the next town on the line.
In the early morning sun, it’s almost half past nine.
The station’s filled with people though, as the kids file past,
This town like the next one but, each hopes that it’s the last.

Caleb stands defiantly, the farmer comes his way,
Hoping he can find a hand to take with him today.
“You smell,” the strapping lad exclaims, “don’t you come too near.
I reckon you ain’t had a bath for neigh unto a year.”

A filthy hand is thrust at him, they’re staring eye to eye.
The strapping lad takes one step back, then lets his right hand fly.
The farmer ducks, the punch connects, a high pitched cry of pain,
With throbbing hand the youngster turns and heads back to the train.

All the children gathered in, it’s once more outward bound.
A puff of steam, the whistle blows, a haunting, eerie sound.
The Orphan Train is gone once more, and in its passing there,
Did it find them family homes, or bondage and despair?

>------<

Now in conclusion, what is said, what can we learn from this?
Was this idea born of love, or were we just remiss?
What of the children taken here, the change for good or bad?
Was this really good for them or just a passing fad?

For us today, it seems so strange, so far from what we know.
Children torn away from home, had we really sunk that low?
But some will say it was the best, the thing that had to be.
And in some ways I’m sure it was, but they surely were not free.

Author notes

The orphan trains began running in the 1850's and continued until as late as 1929 carrying orphans or children not wanted by their parents from the cities of the northeast United States to communities of the midwest and the west where it was hoped they'd find loving "ready made" families.  Often they found only people looking for extra hands to help on the farm and many were badly mistreated.  Others reported happiness and success and at least two state governors were the product of the orphan trains.  At the station, the kids would be marched from the train to a stage where they'd be viewed by the crowd gathered there.  People would then choose the child they wanted - and the unchosen would head back to the train, hoping for better luck at the next stop.  The creation of Charles Loring Brace, the trains carried on the order of 200,000 children to new homes.  Their success in fulfilling their original intent is still in question and is a fascinating segment of American history.
Written March 12th, 2005

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  • Molassis
    May 20, 2006
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    whoa... goodness... I am so impressed with this... I was thinking while reading.. this sounds so real... and then I got to your notes... and found it WAS real... goodness... think of how bad those children felt... so unloved... so unworthy...

    It happens today though... I guess that's what got to me... I have a 16 yr old living with me... she calls me mom... her parents told her she couldn't come home... she had no place to go... so she's here with my daughter and I...

    The poem? Really hit close to home... awesome job on this... wow. God bless you... your heart is pure! ~Melissa


  • melphleg gold member
    October 19, 2005
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    This was an impressive piece. Story was well told. You had a wide view and then would narrow down to a personal view. The rhyme scheme was excellent. It's easy to see why you won.


  • agazeley gold member
    October 19, 2005
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    The look very much like the British Evacuee children sent all over the country to avoid the London Bombing ( of which I was one )
    An interesting poem about a topic I know very little about – Well worth a prize – quite a lot of research here I should think – Well Done. Albert.


  • CarolDesjarlais silver member
    October 18, 2005
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    Awesome job, kirbysman. They picked the one I thought would win.....


  • Chuck Johnson silver member
    October 18, 2005
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    Really, Really a superior write. I'm impressed with your skill and knowledge and the way you wove the tapestry of words into a story mixed with the verbage of the times and even the use of their slang. You've won the contest, our vote was 3-0. Thank you for entering this excellent poem and for raising the standard all EPIC poets will have to reach to win the next ALLPOETRY.COM EPIC CONTEST.


  • Kevin Moderators member
    October 18, 2005
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    Very well told. I felt you were just breaking the surface of what could be a true epic - the story of childen riding the train, finding homes, and pehraps coming to help end it in their adult life. Great rhyming, didn't feel forced at all. While I hate center-alignment, the even line lengths made it very easy to read.

    It seems better to me than just living in an orphanage... that's a lot of kids, i'd imagine a lot of their families had to be at least okay. A bad home is better than no home? Many people's family environments aren't perfect anyways

  • Chuck Johnson silver member
    October 17, 2005
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    Very interesting account. Well done poetry. Good luck in the contest.


  • DK akaLunaticSerene gold member
    October 15, 2005
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    Amazing!

    The sorrow and loneliness and theft of self worth and degeneracy of foul usury greed that speaks from this piece speaks deafeningly. This is masterful.


  • CarolDesjarlais silver member
    October 13, 2005
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    Oh, this really hits home with me...so many Native American children were taken and spent years trying to find out that they were native, let alone the years they spent trying to follow their roots back to Canadian Reserves. The mormons, as I said in my Epic, took native childrena nd promised to make them a better life...better than being with thier families, whos till lvied,a nd were tricked into thinking their children woudl be better off....even today this happens..and I shudder..and my soul aches for the hole in every one of those children's souls they hoped to make "white and delightsome".


  • Touchof1der silver member
    October 12, 2005
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    WoW! You did an awesome job here. I remember reading about this many years ago and not all of the stories were successes as you have said here. Some of the events that transpired in the lives of these children nearly broke my heart. Those that were chosen to basically work from sun up till sundown and were not care for as far as being educated or taught any other useful trades. Many were runaways as they got older and developed hardened hearts. It was sad indeed. But as you say, there were also those who did well. The selection process was nothing like it is now. Great job Paul! This was a very moving piece. Thank you for entering the contest and good luck!
    ♥ Touchof1der


  • LaKitKat
    May 17, 2005
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    Wow this brought home some strong feeling for me, having given up my child, although she was adopted I can't help but wonder did she ever feel as if she were alone and unloved, unwanted.
    You did a great job with this subject, I have not read to many poems on history that were of this caliber. Great job.
    Kathy


  • peluche
    May 3, 2005
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    Haven't I already told you how wonderfully written this was It's totally unfair entering this piece It doesn't give others a chance I want to tell you how much I really appreciate you taking the time to enter my contest. You are such a great writer and your support means so much.


  • Midnight Lace
    April 8, 2005
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    WoW This is so powerful. Brought tears to my eyes. I could never image leaving my children. It really makes one appreciate the things that they have. This shows that things can be stripped from you without warning. This is very good Dad. Good Luck in the contest
    ♥Christina

  • Odanale
    March 23, 2005
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    Wow this definately deserved the gold. The first part is in imabic pentameter, is it not? Very well done!! Your rhyming is perfect, the flow and rhythm are astoundingly great, and the story is such an intruiging part of history. Reminds me of poetryality's works; you two definately share something to be able to tell true stories through poetic forms. What a wonderful write!


  • tearrsofthemoon
    March 20, 2005
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    Wonderful

    I like this poem a lot. It is a great read. Thanks for sharing it.

  • tx2steppin1
    March 19, 2005
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    great

    the imagery is daunting..... a wonderful read

  • ecrivain01
    March 19, 2005
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    dynamite write

    Somehow this was marred for me by the one personification, Caleb, and that stanza stood out from all the others. This is an extremely good write, and the subject is poignant and powerful. I just don't think that the one stanza with the kid in it works as well with the rest of this. Otherwise, it's a dynamite write.


  • jenneddin silver member
    March 17, 2005
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    I lived in an orphanage for two years... separated from my brother and sister who were more easily adoptable. I've got to tell you, things aren't that much different today.... you'd be surprised. Sorry to be personal, but this hit a nerve of course... one that will never dull..

    You handled this beautifully and tenderly.


  • queen Moderators member
    March 16, 2005
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    You write about a sad subject very well, I am sure a lot of the children were mistreated and abused. Breaks my heart to know children went through things like this. Good luck in the contest This poem is excellent


  • heartnsoul
    March 16, 2005
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    Being able to put history to poetry is a true gift. One you share with Poetrality. I remember watching a documentry on this. You have captured all too well every nuance of the pain and deep sadness that existed for these children. My grandfather talked about this to me when I was small. It was his way of reminding my brother's and I of what we had. It is so sad that siblings were ripped apart and never saw their loved ones again. Unfortunately, the ratio of the success stories to the abuse that these children suffered were small. I do think that the intent was a good one, they just didn't have the means to protect the children and look into the homes they were going to. You have written this with deep emotion and power. You actually brought tears to my eyes and my brought chills to my skin. This goes beyond superb. It's phenominal!
    ~Michelle~


  • SharonLynn
    March 16, 2005
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    I really enjoyed this piece. I have been fascinated by the orphan trains for a while because I did an assignment for school about them when I was like 11 and from that point on I have been keeping tabs on what I can find about them. YOu did a great job in portraying how most of them felt. Great job. Wonderful emotion put behind this.


  • Tercil gold member
    March 16, 2005
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    brilliant!

    after listening to the stories my father has passed on. There are a few which marry up in your words. Despair of families splitting up, like his brothers had. Intrigued by the title to read it!! But amongst the sadness, there must have been union. I choos to see some gladness from it. But the main thing is, you made us think. Hard, should I say!!

  • Poetress2005
    March 16, 2005
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    At first I thought this was going to be related to the Holocaust. It was the first thing I thought of when I started to read it, thinking they were going to concentration camps or death camps. While I didn't know about the orphan trains, I'll definately look into them now. Not that I want to but have to know about it, otherwise it could happen again if the past isn't reviewed by people in the present. Anyways great write and keep writing.
    ~V~


  • Thomas Vaughan
    March 16, 2005
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    i must say I did not think I would get a history lesson, the poem was well writte, I had not idea there was anything ever like this in the USA, I knw that sounds naive but it is the truth. the poem was beautifully written, and flowed well, kept the pace and I was riveted... great job

    peace be with & blessed be;
    Thomas Vaughan

  • angeledtweety
    March 16, 2005
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    great

    this is a beautiful write.i just love it,i learned some from this one.and found it to be very interesting..great job and good luck in the contest

  • bewareofcarrots
    March 15, 2005
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    Hey You,

    I think the best thing about this poem is that it paints a picture clearly in my head, and allows my mind to explore and get lost in the story that unfolds on the page. Not only does it paint that picture, but it also displays a piece of history that not many people are aware of, judging by some of the comments up above.

    This piece hits me somewhere inside, I don't know if it's the fact that this kind of thing actually happened years ago, or whether it's just the sad story, but it definitely makes me stop and think about how life was lived back then - I say this as I'm caught up in the technology-frenzied world (here I am typing on a computer, talking to a friend in Germany on MSN, listening to music and watching tv at the same time). It's funny because this is the world I know, because I'm only 16 and I've grown up with all this technology stuff, but reading this made me stop and think about times where orphan trains existed .. it's a totally different world to me.

    You've completely blown me away with this one.. I've already bookmarked it. And, judging by previous applause given and comments left, other people enjoyed it too.. good luck in the contest - I think this one's a winner.

    Becca

  • BrotherOfShadows
    March 15, 2005
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    Very Good! I must say although the subject is sad the work is good and if any of those on the train or in the homes ever read this it would bring a tear to there eye's knowing some one cares and had a good enough heart and mind to put into words a struggel and victory. Also the education for my self was good this was something that I had herd little of. But you have made a masterpeace. Keep up the good work.

  • Mrs. Dumas silver member
    March 14, 2005
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    Wow, Dad...that was amazing. I was so stuck in the write, I couldn't hear the phone ringing or the little one screaming or the rents yelling. Amazing job! You showed me that someone is worse off than I am.

    And the history in this is fascinating. I hate to hear of stories like this, but you wrote it so beautiful it was indeed fascinating. Great job!

    I do have to say that this is one of your better works, but that isn't saying anything against your other work. It's all amazing, but this just stands out against the rest.

    I wish you the best luck in the contest.

    Love ya,
    Jess


  • March 14, 2005
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    Wow, that is fascinating... and so sad. I can somewhat see a paralell to life in the second part. This was a great poem, though. You painted a picture. It was great. The real picture added a nice touch as well. Thanks for sharing.


  • B Chandler
    March 14, 2005
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    take a bow

    nicely well written piece you have...almost like my "lighthouse haunt"(aonly mine isnt this good as yours)but yea i agree with you on every single point you made and it was ashame how things were done back then in those times but kinda ironic too in a small sense of a way


  • Oleander
    March 14, 2005
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    Sometimes I feel that way, like an orphan on a train. This is a beautiful write and is full of beauty and imagination.


  • Blkwidow77 silver member
    March 14, 2005
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    Well... I have to say that I didn't know anything of this. It was actually rather informative. I liked it. It had good meter to it.

    I don't quite understand though, why it is that you choose to focus on a child taking a swing at a farmer. Given the style of the rest of the poem, it seemed out of place. Either way, it was a decent peice.


  • RiseFromThyAshes
    March 14, 2005
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    Wow. This is an amazing and wonder write. I had, also, never heard of the orphan train so I have now learned something. (And today I thought since I was off of school I would learn nothing to do wiht any subjects at school.)Anyway, you portray what the children, emotion, and other people would be like very well. I could acually see this stuff happening in the past. Speaking of seeing, the imagery was also great. This was a wonderful poem so keep up the good work. Have a nice day/night.

    RiseFromThyAshes


  • Inconspicuous.
    March 14, 2005
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    wow...i feel so clueless and i'm really not a big history buff but this is somehitng that i just might look into thanks for hsharing


  • Shamisen
    March 14, 2005
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    Wow, I had never heard of this before, so it was a fascinating piece to read from the outset, particularly once I had read your own explanation. I am not afraid to say that I was gripped by your description, and the effortless way that you brought the past back to life. Fabulous.

  • Mickie27
    March 14, 2005
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    This is fantastic. You have taken such a difficult subject and made a masterpiece. The language that you used was very well thought out and written in a very moving way. Every word used built imagery and I could almost feel like I was there something I would not have liked. The fact that you have written this in such a real way is fantastic too.

  • Tumbleweed
    March 14, 2005
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    I've never heard of Orphan Trains before, thanks for teaching me something new This is such a sad piece, very touching. Your rhymes and word choices are great. Excellent write.


  • crysolia
    March 14, 2005
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    great

    this is a very touching write. thank you for sharing, I never knew about the orphan train untill you wrote about it. great job.
    crysolia


  • March 14, 2005
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    That was great. It was indeed a very sad situation, and you did an excellent job of illustrating this. You definitely opened my eyes to another one of the sad things in our history. I didn't know about this before now. Thanks and keep it up!


  • buttaboo04
    March 14, 2005
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    Wake Up America...GREAT!!

    This is nothing short of Amaizing. This is also new to me and i think that it has made me open my eyes to the real world. Things like that are happining now in America and I see that some good has come out of Orphan Trains but the real question that stands in my head is what happens to the forgotten childern?


  • saviya
    March 14, 2005
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    I hadn't heard about Orphan Trains, ever before. So now I learned a new aspect of American history through your wonderful poem. Must say it made a deep impression on me. Well-written and well-rhymed. I especially like that the poem is based on true history.


  • SexyAngel0418
    March 14, 2005
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    WOW.... This is an awesome poem... It is very well written and it is so wonderful because it is like a story!!! I love it... Good luck in the contest you entered!!!

    Hugs,
    Beth


  • M.A.King
    March 13, 2005
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    You had me deeply entranced from start to finish. An amazing story! I appreciate the historical info blending with the personal view. My goodness your meter is just wonderful, the break to additional syllables at mid point added to the change in scene. Excellent on all accounts.


  • swtdreamer
    March 13, 2005
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    excellent and well written.

    Wow! THis was very informative and interesting to read. I really got into this. History lesson too to boot!! Great write on a good topic, I had never heard of an orphan train before so this was truly a different topic for me.

  • RandomPoetGirl
    March 13, 2005
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    AMAZING!! Beautiful!!!but sad too. GREAT JOB!


  • Maureen silver member
    March 13, 2005
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    I didn't know about the orphan trains. I feel so sorry for the children who had to go through that (whether it had a good outcome or not). Your poem was well-written and though it made me feel sad, I'm glad that I read it.

    ♥ Maureen


  • iamaparadox
    March 13, 2005
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    Amazing write. I read it over and over. Beautiful imagery and beautiful language!
    Bravo.

  • Fridazechild56
    March 13, 2005
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    I couldn't stop reading this once I started. A very sad, emotional write. Your portrayal of what these poor children went through was very good. I think this enlightened alot of people. There are things like this that happened in history that we would like to forget about, but it's good to remember sometimes, and learn to change so things like this won't happen again. Great write. Very thought provoking.


  • masterblaster gold member
    March 13, 2005
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    A very good write, a sad subject material, hard to believe that it's not so long ago, the thought of being used like a work horse is frightning a very vivid write and very well written, a very good read, all the best


  • Runawaytrain
    March 13, 2005
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    I remember the movie that was made about the Orphan Train. It if course had a happy ending, after a lot of drama. Some might argue that it would be better to be a helping hand on a farm, if they were at least getting fed, than trying to scrape by in the cities with hundreds of other children.

    My great-grandmother was an orphan, and she would walk to school every day in South Bend Indiana from the orphanage. When she was eight years old, there was a woman who had been watching her walk by every day, and asked her if she would like to come live with her instead. And that was that... there was not the complicated paperwork that there is today before a child can be placed.

    Oh... I guess I am rambling. A very interesting write, Paul.


  • BoHo03
    March 13, 2005
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    Wow. Great poem. Its nice to write about something you know a little about. The pic was a great add as well. Good luck in the contest!! Great Write!


  • abc123uandme
    March 13, 2005
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    WOW

    wow, i loved how after i read this i knew more about history. This poem was long, but i hardly noticed because it was so good! I had never heard of the orphen train before, but now im curious to know more about it! Very good job on this poem, i can't wait to read more of your work! Keep it up!
    ~kate~


  • BibleBlack12
    March 13, 2005
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    I felt like I was reading a story, I loved it, this is amazing. the flow is brilliant and the imagry is second to none. I can't help but think of Auschwitz when I read this. This is definitely one to remember. I hope to read more like this, keep writing, this is fantastic.


  • Blue moon
    March 13, 2005
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    Hi there,
    I must agree this was totally amazing but yet so sad. It was wonderfully written, with so much thought and feeling put into it. I hope that you will keep up the great work.

    Best regards to you and yours

    Blue moon


  • SuZyCuE
    March 13, 2005
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    This has to be the most amazing yet saddest poem I have read in a very long time, I was drawn into the story from the first line and wass held all the way to the last. Excellent write Paul, this one will be bookmarked


  • Jobob
    March 13, 2005
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    My first thought was of Jewish kids being herded by Nazi soldiers. Not a pleasant image, which I guess was deliberate. It's the first I've heard of this stage in American history, and I can't think of much that compares in Europe, we're too small. Just the relocation of the Jews and the evacuation of the children to the countryside, both during WW2.

    So what do I think. I like the rhythm of the piece: it reinforces the images of the trains very well, that regular rhythm that just feels relentless. Changing the rhyme to aabb also helps to speed up the poem, and works really well. I like the switch to the longer lines mid-way through, although my personal feeling is that it might be better to reserve the steady rhythm for the train journey only, to reinforce its impact and also to generate a feeling of confusion before the kids are placed on the train.

    There are a couple of flaws in the rhythm: verse 5 line 1 is missing a syllable where the comma is, as is verse 6 line 1. More noticable is the name "Elliot", which I've always pronounced with the stress on the 'Ell', and which therefore doen't follow the pattern of iambs.

    There are a few other small phrases that I'd query, but they really are only small things. I'd say, for example, that "hollow empty eyes" in verse two is somewhat redundant, as is "try to cope".

    Have you noticed (as I have) that iambic pentameter is very difficult to sustain with modern phrasology? I don't know why, but it always comes away with one or two more adjectives than I'm quite comfortable with in my work. I find that eight syllables or fourteen tend to fit my chosen phrases more easily. Not strictly relevant, but I wondered if it was just me.

    There is a real darkness to this, and you've really emphasised your theme with the style that you've chosen. I think you've done really well with this. Thanks for pointing me to it: I really enjoyed both reading and commenting.


  • peluche
    March 12, 2005
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    This was an amazing write. It's too bad the story was so heartbreaking. It actually made a tear come to my eye. This piece is really well structured and thought-out. It was definitly a showcase of your talent as a writer


  • g r e y i s m
    March 12, 2005
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    ok

    this is very good and fitting, the sombre tone and style and all.
    it really makes you mad and sad for them.
    I was wondering if I misundertood this line or if it is a typo:

    Would they chose to be back there, or facing this instead?

    shouldn't it be choose or did I take something out of context....

    also, towards the end there you have it's when I think it should be its.

    all in all I can tell you worked hard on this and it's a very nice piece


  • pattyann4500
    March 12, 2005
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    Once again, Paul, you have written an amazing poem. How terribly sad it is that what might have been a good idea became suddenly such a horror for many.

    I had heard only of the Orphan Train by name, but your review of it is quite vivid. I'm glad I stopped to read this. Good luck in the contest, my friend. Hugs, Patricia ♥


  • lithium
    March 12, 2005
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    oh PS good luck in the contest...though, i don't think you'll need it


  • lithium
    March 12, 2005
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    that was amazing...i was totally drawn into the story...and it's sad to think of all those kids abondaned by unloving parents...how do you know so much on this subject?...i almost couldn't beleive somebody on this site wrote this because it's honestly top 3, if not the best poem i've ever read on this site... the flow was PERFECT all the way through, and it told a story, unforced with great percision and with truth behind it...history put into meter and rhyme and brought to life with poetic words...
    AMAZING WRITE
    I gotta tip my hat to this
    it shows me that as good as i think i am
    i have so much to learn about true talent
    MUCH love and respect
    i'll have to be sure to check you out again
    ~~lithium~~

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