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The Intricate Reasons Behind My Birthday Blues (Acrostic)

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by ~Gregg Rowe~

The river of tears that had flowed last night,
Had really started on the third of January this year --
Ecclesiastical angels took my adopted Nana away.

I joined our friends and adopted family,
Needing to group in our time of grief.
Then I continue my studies and med appointments --
Remembering her in my daily life;
Insisting everything would be fine.
Catastrophe sets in as my best friend is hospitalized --
And though serious, I cannot divulge,
That would breach her confidentiality –
Escort her during her time of need.

Relief from troubles do not cease:
Escape into the abyss of my night dreams --
And further and further do I fall,
Sadly, my treatments, have again been postponed.
Onward I trudge, feeling weaker and weaker --
Negotiations with doctors fall on deaf ears:
Soon, one day, I will be rid of this human pain.

Bucolic paintings transpire in my mind --
Everlasting dreams swirl in daylight,
Hues of colour brush upon a virgin canvas:
Injustices mix with a frenzied palette --
Neurosis juxtaposed between cloth and mind,
Deliver images hidden beneath my soul.

Mystery of life is my poet’s proverbial question --
Yesterdays years are today’s present.

Between you and I, “I see dead people!”
In every black/white/colour photo I posses --
Really wondering what constitutes
The Fates extending my strings.
However did I make it this far?
Daily living in constant pain --
And finding strength to continue on:
Year after year, pass through graveyards.

But now is the time to shine all day --
Life is really to meant to celebrate,
Until the day of our death.
Everlasting life is the internal dream --
So, let’s smile and rejoice and still scream!



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Written March 12th, 2005

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  • lordoftherings gold member
    July 15, 2005
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    Di--Masterblaster: I have no idea because of memory lapses but I have I feeling that I have probably never commented on your poems, there is just so much happening in my life medical wise that I come on everyday and have messages and greetings from so many here that it is sometimes difficult to keep with everyone, but I have read some of your works and have just wanted to send you a personal message that I admire your style of writing also. Hopefully, and I know I keep saying this but everyday brings me new problems/solutions to my health and I can only do day to day, but I do hope that I will be able to come back full-time and really return all these critiques that have been left on my poetry.

    Thank you for stopping by and congratulating me on the Bronze win. It means a lot to me that while I am away at my appointments at the hospital that people are still stopping by and reading my works.

    Gregg


    Edited on Jul 15, 5:21 p.m. because ''.


  • masterblaster gold member
    July 15, 2005
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    Hi, congratulations on the bronze, a lovely write, hugs Di


  • hugh wyles silver member
    March 13, 2005
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    My dear Buddy, Gregg,
    I agree with everything that Billie Jean says above.
    "In the midst of Life, we are in Death......"
    The world becomes continually emptier of those we love and the rate of emptying increases as we, ourselves, age.
    When YOUR time is no more, you will be remembered not only for your talent and writings but also for your indomitable courage through a lifetime of adversity and pain.
    Through the distress of pain remember that those who know you love you, remember all of us who pray for you....and take cheer.
    Love and best wishes. Hugh.

  • sugarsick
    March 13, 2005
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    i really like how you mix confessional narrative with interspersed imagery. it starts out just like a confession, then when you mix in the mental pictures- "everlasting dreams swirl in daylight" and so on, it takes a full shape. your poems all are very personal, very intense. i hope they are a comfort to you in your struggles.
    wishing you all the best,
    -pia.


  • Miss Faerie Greeters member
    March 13, 2005
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    Amazing. Then again so much of what you write is. I'm sorry about your grandmother. I wish you luck in love and hope in all else that you wish for. Happy Birthday


  • Jacki D
    March 13, 2005
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    outstanding

    Gregg I agree with my dear sister Billie Jean. I would also like to send my condolences on your loss, and to say I'm sorry that once again they are jerking you around on your treatment.
    Your poem was bittersweet, and the last stanza filled my heart knowing you will stand up til the very end. I can't say that I know what you are having to go thru but know that everyday something in my life will happen and you come to mind. Your honesty and strenght make me want to be a better person, and though we don't know each other well I feel truely blessed for being led to the first poem I read of yours that led me to get to know more about you. I know you have touched my life, and am sure that you have touched many more. Jacki


  • PonderingPoetess
    March 13, 2005
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    The sadness of these words is heartbreaking. The building up and telling of the horrors you have seen and continue to see through words of poetry is awe inspiring. However in the last stanza, you absolutely capture all that there is to be thankful for. For every breath that we take is a blessing, each new day faced is another chance to learn and grow. Doing this poem in an acrostic is absolutely enchanting.


  • SerenityNChains gold member
    March 12, 2005
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    Gregg I must say at first the dark tone saddned me. I relate so well. Then saw the ray of light at the end, and I smiled for you. It is said from the day we are born we start dying. I say from the day we realize what life is....start living. You have done so with eloquent beauty my friend. Only dead poets are renowned, but live ones are loved. Like you.

    Blessed be

    ~~Serenity~~
    Billie Jean


  • angelica silver member
    March 12, 2005
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    Dear Gregg, You did not tell me your treatment had been postponed again, my dear Friend and Brother, I feel your pain and dispair in this beautifully written explaination.I hold you in my embrace, comfort you when the tears fall, sit with you and make you laugh soo much that you'll forget the pain buddy. I hope it will be a blast whatever they have planned for you, enjoy t to the fullest dear Gregg~Love~Joan
    's and 's to you

  • listen
    March 12, 2005
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    very clever to write an acrostic of the title.this seems to tell several stories at once.but it flows like a synopsis of recent events.


  • punkrocksmidge
    March 12, 2005
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    This is sad, and unfortunately true to life (or so I'd assume). Still, it's a wonderful depiction. So often, I think people feel that an acrostic has to be only one word, I like how you've made this particular piece into a phrase. People look up to your expertise, and it's important to provide examples like this to people who use your works as guidelines. Also, I think you may have meant 'possess' as opposed to 'posses'. Spectacular write, and never stop, my dear
    ~Smidge~


  • horus8 gold member
    March 12, 2005
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    Find the good in life like you've been doing and all will be well in love.


  • -BlackKnight- gold member
    March 12, 2005
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    It takes more than a few lines to get a point or emotion going, bowie. This isn't very long at all; I've seen and read far longer. You think this is long? Trying read Chaucer's "Canterbury Tales" or, according to Mark Rickerby, anything that Walt Whitman wrote. I felt this poem was just as good as any, if not better.

  • bowie
    March 12, 2005
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    great

    This is a sad poem. Its also long. Not to be mean or rude, but even a really good sat poem that is long will make people loose intrest. Even for that this poem is really good. I think you need to make people feel more close to you, mention something between you and your nan and friend, something to make them feel the loss as well. I don't know, I just lost someone to, and it can be ahrd. You build something up so you can tell people about it. Make a spot inside were you can go and not feel the pain, but, unfortunatly, if you go there when you write your work is emotionless. Thats the way it is with me anyway. Most of the stuff I wrote about my friend dying was emotionless, and thus not very good. I hope you start feeling better, personally, my birthday sucked a whole lot too. Keep up the good work. This piece shows a lot of potential, and it has a killer background, thats a awsome one, with the music and candle. Keep up the good work.

    Bowie of the knife and spear.

  • -BlackKnight- gold member
    March 12, 2005
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    Though I don't know much about just what's going on, I think I've gotten the gist of it. This may sound ridiculous now, after everything you've been through, but let's face it: life was never really meant to be easy. However, though it may be filled with pain at times, it also is filled with deep joy. I'll tell you the same thing I told onerios13 after he cousin was found dead.

    A few weeks ago, I was at a funeral for a neighbor of mine; real sweet lady, disheartened, I think, after her husband had died some months before (he was 71, she was 83). Anyway, at the funeral, the priest there gave a sermon about how she'd had a dream once when she was much younger, expecting her first child. In the dream, she spoke to the child, and tried to explain what life outside the womb was like, but the child couldn't understand. In the end, she said he'd just have to wait and discover what the world was/is like for himself when it came time for it.

    At the funeral, the priest gave a sermon based on the dream. He said that, though a loved one may die, they're simply being "born" in a new way, in a new place. He stated that, though we mourn, we never really "lose" that loved one; they're always with us in some special way. I don't know if you believe what I do, and if not, that's alright; I just thought I'd mention it, 'cause I thought it was a neat way of looking at death. Though it may be terrifying and deeply saddening to lose a loved one (or our own lives), we can never really know what it's like to die until it's our time for it. Until then, live life to the fullest; that's something I believe quite fully. Don't give up and, though it's hard on you, don't lose heart; you never know what could happen at any given moment.

    All this, no doubt, probably sounds naïve, but still, hearing the priest preach what he did, it really gave me hope for the future, and I hope it does the same for you.

    Anyway, I've babbled on long enough; I'm not sure what else I can say that would ease your pain. Just keep moving forward, and remember that you're not alone, and don't have to bear it all alone.
    Edited on Mar 12, 12:47 because ''.

  • pozo
    March 12, 2005
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    Aww this is such a sad poem. A wonderful tribute, my regrets on her passage Keep writing, this was an excellent write which I liked a lot
    All the best,
    Pozo

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