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Don't Play Me A Love Song With A Hip Hop Beat

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I walked in the door,
I had a hard day at work,
the rap music was blasting.
calling someone a jerk.

What happened to music,
it use to be cool,
now they tell stories,
of shootings in school.

Let's hear a love song,
one that's real sweet,
don't play a love song.
with a hip hop beat.

Play me a rock song,
sung by the "King",
he had a great voice,
boy he could sing.

bring back the songs,
that made my eyes tear,
many songs of today,
it's cursing I hear.

Music makes me happy,
listening should be fun,
I don't want a gangster,
talking sex,drugs,or guns.

Play an oldies but goodies,
from the fifty's long ago,
the Beatles songs are great,
or a ballad sung real low.

Most young people today,
think their music is cool,
right now they're thinking,
what's with this old fool!

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I chose=Rap/Hip Hop
Written March 11th, 2005

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  • CountryCousin
    July 5, 2006
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    I like your version better.

    I agree and once again at the flea market a rap song was playing. It was highly offensive to the black vendors in the wording that a black rapper sang. That music was cut off, not the way to impress anyone. You did very good on this one.


  • Sandygram silver member
    March 19, 2005
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    I'm glad you thought it was Spantastic !!!This was a fun poem to write. You take care my new wonderful son. God has blessed me with you. Love you, Sandy Hey I finally got caught up with my comments, WOOHOO!! Time to write a poem.
    Edited on Mar 19, 9:35 because ''.


  • Onfire4Jesus
    March 18, 2005
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    Wow Sandy!! yet another Spantastic write!! You did a tremendous job on this one!! Im so glad you won!! You deserved it, as all your others poems do Your a winner in my book and forever will be I love you my friend!! God Bless You!!


  • Sandygram silver member
    March 15, 2005
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    Thank you so much Rob for the wonderful comment. I am glad there are alot of people that agree with the poem. Makes me think there's still hope for great music. You take care, Sandy
    Edited on Mar 15, 10:10 because ''.


  • just rob gold member
    March 15, 2005
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    This is a wonderful entry.The roots that the new music grew from should not be forgotten.I went old school as well.You have written a very nice piece indeed! best of luck!
    Peace,Rob


  • Sandygram silver member
    March 12, 2005
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    Thank you so much Mandy(by the way "Mandy" was a wonderful love song by Barry Manilow.) I could gringe at the music that is ruining the youngsters of today. I say "RAP IS CRAP!!! Thanks again for the lovely comment. It made me smile to know there are others who feel like me. Take care, Sandy


  • March 12, 2005
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    Excellent

    Sandy, you don't know how much I love you for writing this!! I seriously hold the mainstream music industry is dead these days. No REAL song in Billboards top 5, can you believe? Only stupid rants sparsed with slangs!


    I really, really, really love this poem. The stupid rap stars couldn't write one stanza like this without breaking into tears! I'm putting the link in a hate-rap thread in a music group here I'm in.
    All the best for the contest.

    Cheers,
    Mandy
    Edited on Mar 12, 8:14 because 'forgot to add name '.


  • Sandygram silver member
    March 11, 2005
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    Thank Annie, I know what you mean. I live3 blocks from the high school, In the summer you can here the kids coming up the hill 3 blocks away. Take care, my friend, Sandy


  • March 11, 2005
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    YES!!!!!!

    heHe, Sandy.... don't you just hate it sitting a traffic light and about 10 cars back you hear and see the bouncing? GREAT WORK ( kissing feet and throwing a dozen roses ) Love ya my friend, the King and the Beatles will never die! Annie


  • Sandygram silver member
    March 11, 2005
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    Thank you Nat, I love the oldies cause I grew up with them. I'm glad you like them too. I loved all the British Groups from the 60's. Hope all is well with you . It's cold and snowing here. I keep looking for spring. Take care, Sandy.


  • Sandygram silver member
    March 11, 2005
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    Thank you for the nice comment, you made me smile. I 'm glad there are some others who agree with me. Great contest. Take care, Sandy


  • Talia
    March 11, 2005
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    LOL

    Everyone of my friends look at my CD collection and think... "is she for real?" Cos rarely do you see any music like that. When I am at work, I have all the old music on, well used to when I was on day shift... And I knew all the words to the songs LOL

    I love music but sometimes the up to date stuff gets right on my tripe

    Good write

    Natalia


  • B Chandler
    March 11, 2005
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    dude!!! if i was facing u in person id kiss and hug ya lol this is a good write you have and i enjoyed it alot!!! and yes you spoke nothing but the truth old school beats out the new school on certain levels(and im only 24 and love old school)

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