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so kill me with the love that you won't give me

so kill me with the love that you won't give me
you may as well, we both know
that i'm already nearly dead
i am still waiting for you
to have someone come and pull me from your head
because i could never only be
the contented whore in your bed
we had to fake the glowing,
but for me it wasn't fake
i meant every single line i wrote
and you know i meant it when i broke
i'd give you a scar for every tear i've cried
if i could think that i could do it
and that it would change your unattatchment
but i didn't run away-
i'd have never left your side
but you did this "for the both of us"
and you say you hate yourself,
and i say i hate you too
as you kill me with the love that you won't give me.

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i'm not sure what i think of this one- but i'd still like to hear what you think
Written March 11th, 2005

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  • bw43
    March 23, 2005
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    i liked i alot.

    because i could never only be
    the contented whore in your bed

    that part i can totally relate to...


    and this part was completely awesome. i feel this way right now...

    i'd give you a scar for every tear i've cried
    if i could think that i could do it

    i absolutely loved it!!!!!!!!!! it was fascinating. great work. great work. great work!!!!!!

  • hatememorestil
    March 17, 2005
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    iamlost-

    thank you- i was hoping the emotion sounded real- it is... i cry too much over this person... also, i like to hear i have talent- so thanks for that as well.

    blessed be


  • iamlost gold member
    March 15, 2005
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    very shexy

    wow great emotion, i can feel the hate and the pain. i can tell how this was hard to write, and if it wasn't, then you have a talent. well, you have a talent anyway. great write, keep it up!

  • hisgirl-10
    March 15, 2005
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    i like this it is very well written you did a really good job...
    i like all of the emotion!

    great write,

    von b.


  • miss-nikki-michele
    March 12, 2005
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    I know exactly how you feel. I feel the same way. Damn love and it's complicated-ness. I really like the poem because you're still waiting after all the pain and hurt. I admire that. Great Job!
    XoXo
    NiKKi

  • Lightless Starz
    March 12, 2005
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    wow..... just wow..... i've beent here b4, it sounds almost as if it came from my thoughts (but i kno it wasn't).... I see what your describing so welll.... exellent i love it.....

  • LoversBlackRose
    March 11, 2005
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    So much pain and hate and yet theres still love there for the person your waiting for.Great write I loved it.

    fleabug

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