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Sing a song of wonder

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Dream... the dream of innocence
as the path of life goes on
sing the tune of clarity
in the lyrics of the song

Dance.. the jig of joyfulness
and hold your head up high
so do this all care-freely
and never question why

As times and tides are changing
and with them... we slow down..
but never loose that passion
and never wear a frown

And... with each passing season
be thankful for your gifts...
the pulse of life is passing
like the wing-beats... of the Swifts

So when you meet your maker
and your time on earth is past
give thanks... for all the splendor
and tell him... "It's been a blast " ......

Author notes

Sorry....just my humor.
Written March 8th, 2005

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  • cutiepie gold member
    January 6, 2006
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    had great fun writing this as I do have rather a warped sense of humor at the best of times...Many thanks for your comments


  • grannyeri gold member
    January 5, 2006
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    Great rhythm and rhyme in these verses, flows so nicely from one verse to the next, Last verse says it all in a wonderful concluding way. Well written.

  • cutiepie gold member
    March 9, 2005
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    Many thanks Wendy.. It was a pleasure to write as too often things spiritual can be a little on the heavy side ...so this is my version


  • cutiepie gold member
    March 9, 2005
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    Thank you I am delighted that you enjoyed this


  • cutiepie gold member
    March 9, 2005
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    It was my pleasure


  • cutiepie gold member
    March 9, 2005
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    Probably ...but thats if one does get to meet our "Maker" be it in any form


  • cutiepie gold member
    March 9, 2005
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    Thanks Vickie, delighted that you enjoyed this

  • cutiepie gold member
    March 9, 2005
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    it is easy to forget the simple things in life that make it sweeter...a simple smile goes a million miles (even when one is feeling down ) and a snort of mirth can lift the heaviest of hearts. Many thanks for your lovely comments


  • cutiepie gold member
    March 9, 2005
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    Thanks Kaitlyn I am delighted that you enjoyed this

  • tuesdaysgone
    March 8, 2005
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    This poem reminds me that I need to keep a positive outlook on life. It was very upbeat and had a nice flow to it. Very nice, I enjoyed reading it.

    -Kaitlyn


  • Manicmuze
    March 8, 2005
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    I found this inspirational and very creative. A lovely write, flow and content are nicely done.
    Enjoyed it, thanks,
    ~ Wendy

  • Maltaaduialien
    March 8, 2005
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    Very good advice, and the flow is wonderful. I especially like the first stanza.

  • SweetPest
    March 8, 2005
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    Superb

    What a wonderful breath of fresh air!! This was light and heartfelt. Thank you for a great read!!


  • March 8, 2005
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    good job

    Hey! good job. this is a nice poem. only my thought is, when we meet our Maker, if we are reconciled with Him, aren't we going to be more likely to say 'it's GOING to be a blast forever and ever?'


  • Vickie J
    March 8, 2005
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    This was a fun read! It was fast passed and put a smile on my face. I love how you word your stanzas, especially this one~
    "Dance.. the jig of joyfulness
    and hold your head up high
    so do this all care-freely" Clever! Great read!


  • Blkwidow77 silver member
    March 8, 2005
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    0-o''

    A very positive and uplifting poem. But clearly the best part of it was the wonderful, perfectly moderated rythmn of it! It was very well written.

    My favorite lines were:

    ~~As times and tides are changing
    and with them... we slow down..
    but never loose that passion
    and never wear a frown~~

    Those, I think, are what I can relate best to... and are probably the quickest I forget! LOL


  • cutiepie gold member
    March 8, 2005
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    Thank you , I am delighted that you enjoyed this

  • Virginia Logsdon
    March 8, 2005
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    Great!

    Very nice poem!It is a good thing to give thanks to God for life and all the goodness He sends us!I really enjoyed the positive note of your poem!

  • cutiepie gold member
    March 8, 2005
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    Lol...not my usual thing...I was enjoying the moment Upbeat is a great way of describing it I call it "quirky" and a little "Irreverent"...but no offence was intended Hope all is well in your world, thanks for your kind words as always


  • poeticweaver gold member
    March 8, 2005
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    Good!

    I actually like this, sorta upbeat, and taking the positive route, keep on keep'n on, we all need an upbeat heart such as yours...

    Thanks for sharing, pen on friend! zzzzzz

    -Timothy The Poetic Weaver \

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