Locked up in here for all eternity
Driving me to complete insanity
Listening to tunes to calm me down
Getting lonely in this cell all on my own
Don't know who to blame mom or dad
They put me in this jail, driving me mad
I feel like a criminal facing many fines
Wearing clothes with black and white lines
My parents must be the guard buzzing like bees
I just have to reach out and grab the keys
Once I have them I would have freedom
I could do what I want instead of complete boredom
I cant reach them the keys are too far away
I want to go outside with my friends and play
Its no use I’ll never get out of this horrible place
Here goes my mind I'm starting to pace
There is a dim light appearing on my floor
I realize that someone is opening my door
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Written March 8th, 2005
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I like how at the beginning you talk about being trapped and its as if you take the reader through your week or however long you are grounded for in to the releasement from prison. The door opening the light. Great archetype with the light. Its like the light at the end of the tunnel. And if you think about the way you wrote this going through the time you ended on a stronger higher note. You know? As if it was a learning experience as well. Great write. I really like reading your stuff.
Darling, Dearest, Dead.
lidi -
Interesting... I like the way and style you wrote this poem ialot. Especiially because it is original and different in a way. You changed the form from like 3rd person andblank statements to 2st person and feelings and popinion and then changing topo present tense. It is nice like that. Sometimes its good to mix up you poem and not just write the same old boring same tone poetry. Good job
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