Eyes sparkle meet and shy away then lock gazes again
mouths smile form words of introduction that flow into hours of conversation
body language begins as a hesitant whisper then finally sings in synchronicity
we laugh
together
we talk
together
we sit
together
sun shines bright in blue skies high above spring is in the air and more
like flowers we open to each other in the tangible warmth
and blossom full as time races unheeded and people pass by
the sun
is in our eyes
reflecting the shining
of two happy souls
the warmth
is in our hearts
kindled by new found friendship
we reluctantly part
promising to meet again
soon very soon
your arms encircled me so firmly our goodbye hug said hello
your lips when you kissed me held such a gentle promise
my spirit soared and danced all the way home...
(c) Sheona McCutcheon Celtic Nomad 2005
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I'm back!!!
Written March 8th, 2005
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i LOVE the form ... a very unique form of concrete poetry ... the subject matter was tackled with joy and excitement ... i love that criss crossing that can be done with this form ... well done >>> EM
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...and I am glad you ARE back. Been too long since you posted something new. Good to be reading you again Sheona.
The form is very different ( not a critisism )- but thats what poetry is about I suppose - experimentation and pushing the artistic boundaries. A play on words and visual presentation.
A smile in words ( in effect ). The comfort of knowing there are 'people out there' who have no hidden motivations - just two souls who are lucky enough to stumble across one another in whatever capacity - and grasp the unexpected opportunity to share a little of each other. I think this captures those magical moments in life that are too few and far between.
Enjoyed poetess.
~ Sonia ~ X
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why is the form an issue ... i found the variations visually stimulating. was this a celtic cross ? I think u very well descibed the gentle quiet sense of excitement when u met someone with whom there is an istant mutula and reciprocating attraction, and both feed upon the other
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At first, the form of this was a bit distrcting but, I shouldn't talk, people say the same thing about some of my poems. lol However; after I started really getting into the words of this poem, which by the way seemed to roll so well, I found myself loving it. How great a love this seems to be. Very well written. Be Well and Be Blessed.
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In truth, i am not so sure about the formatting...but the
piece itself...the words...were very lovely!
i loved the whole lips holding promise idea...left me
with a lingering "warm all over" kind of feeling!
UB
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this is so cute! I actually had a smile on my face reading this! well written! The words
"the sun
is in our eyes
reflecting the shining
of two happy souls"
Simply made my heart feel so much warmer! Beautiful! well done! Keep your head up high as it is and stay happy! Its awesoem to see people writting so wonderfully! I give 2 thumbs up!
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