I have a dull pain
In the back of my head
Something stuck there
Wishing I was dead
Don't know how it got there
That comment so unkind
I wish it would go away
From the back of my mind
Some days I'm in control
Some days I'm under it
These days I just know nothing
These days I just mumble it.....
Emptiness is the root
Retrieval is the aim
Does anyone else
Want to play this game?
Author notes
Written at 23:07 GMT on Sunday 28th October 2001. Just off the top of my head there now.
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- if only you knew by cinders.
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i like this poem alot
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I like the title actually; really original in my honest opinion. I feel like this almost every day x.x; It's like I'm playing a game with my er.. mind lol. This actually really describes how I feel sometimes. I like the meter in this too; it's nice and simple. Great job and keep writing =]
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You should enter this poem into a contest because I really like it and I think you should do what I tell you. Well, disregard the last part, but I do think you should find a contest suitable for this great poem and enter it. Now. Go do it now.
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Me like this poem long time. hehe. Well we agreed I could name it, so its new title is now thanks to me. however, the piece is yours, and i really like it honey. its got physical form, but it still plays on the mind after ive read it. well done :) XxxX
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