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Private Pool-Boy For Hire (Shakesperean Sonnet)

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by ~Gregg Rowe~

I'd love to touch, taste, lick your lower lips:
Sweet liquid of ambrosia nectar --
Make love to the rhythm of a cantar,
Produce an afternoon summer eclipse.

We spend the day in bitter putrid sin;
After we have peeled to our birthday suits.
Join flowing rivers of forbidden fruits,
And rub oiled mirrored bodies caressing skin.

The afternoon, time’s my eternity --
While swimming in the eyes of Aphrodite:
Our afternoon fling, amorality;
When we spoon quivery riding the might.

Sun sleep my love while I clean water's blue,
Your private hot pool boy is yet not through.



Author notes

6.) Erotica: If you read the rules. You'll know what I want for this.

can•tar

Pronunciation: (kan-tär')

—n. Pros.

a poem consisting of four-line stanzas, each line having eight syllables.

Random House Unabridged Dictionary, Copyright © 1997, by Random House, Inc., on Infoplease


Written March 7th, 2005

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  • BluesMan gold member
    March 1
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    Thiis poem is better suited for an erotic contest not adult humor. I am removing this poem from the contest


  • Lady Gray
    May 29, 2005
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    one word. Hot. the whole thing. can't think of anything critical on this one.


  • lordoftherings gold member
    May 29, 2005
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    Have you ever made love beside an infested pool full of chlorine The smell can get to you at just the inapporpriate minute (or should I say second)! hehehehehe Gregg
    Edited on May 29, 1:55 p.m. because ''.

  • Xombi13
    May 29, 2005
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    Well you dont need me to tell you that you have skill, you have so many trophies to prove that. An excellent poem, but I have to wonder at the use of putrid. Bitter putrid sin?


  • hastings xx
    May 29, 2005
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    yummm

    This was soo delicious! Your words were brimming with decadent descriptions and adjectives without becoming too wordy. A great balance, one that takes skill to master. A lovely write- thanks for sharing!~

    xxx Hastings


  • May 29, 2005
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    there is no denying your talent gregg, you are an awesome writer. you are far better with forms than i will ever hope to be. i guess i just dont have the desire to write forms. somehow this doesnt seem like a particular "form" to me, just great poetry. i like the format of the entire read, it was just so easy to "digest" very well done. simplicity is indeed sincerity.


  • AudreyTyler
    May 29, 2005
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    Amazing. This has got to be one of my favorite poems. the imagery and words were excellent, especially the imagery . It's so clever and style is really clever too. It's a good time for such a poem, considering the season. rock on!


  • HeavenScent4U
    March 9, 2005
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    Exquist As Usual

    Oh sorry, it's me again. lol I can't believe this background either. The word for it? PERFECT!

  • HeavenScent4U
    March 9, 2005
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    Gregg, your words are like music. To be the object of your affection must be divine for sure. Your words flow like silk over fine crystal. And the pool boy? I used to have a running joke with an online male friend of mine about becoming my pool boy. We did have some fun conversations. smile Anyways, got off track there, sorry! Again, another exquisite write. Be Well and Be Blessed.

  • Malzy
    March 9, 2005
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    You can be my personal pool boy..

    ok ok Ill behave myself.. lol this was a great poem, Im sorry you didnt get to enter it as Im pretty sure it wouldve at least placed (Im not a judge, but I wouldve chosen it was a winner)
    But really the offer still stands, you can uhm, you can be my personal pool boy, I dont pay as much but Im nicer than either one of them!


  • SerenityNChains gold member
    March 9, 2005
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    UHHHHHHHH....WOOOHOOOO Gregg!!!

    Blessed be

    ~~Serenity~~
    Billie Jean


  • Miss Faerie Greeters member
    March 8, 2005
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    This was pretty good. I liked the imagery and reference to aphrodite. The background is unreal too nods Always good to make love under the sun


  • The Phoenix Returns
    March 8, 2005
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    Wow...This is great piece. I always thought Shakespearean Sonnets used the rhyme scheme of abab in the three initial stanzas. So this is knowledge for me!!

    It was a marvellous piece...subtly erotic and very sensual!

    Great job!

  • Mrs. Dumas silver member
    March 8, 2005
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    This was a very good write. Again, I apologize for "wasting your afternoon." I just had my reasons for closing the contest early. Again I will be starting a new contest with pretty much the same concept. I will surely let you know when I start it. Great job on this.

    Hugs
    Jess


  • B Chandler
    March 7, 2005
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    Hottt damnnnnnn

    wooooooooooooooo hehehe thats all i can say on that and now i wish like hell i owned a pool and then get a poolboy(mmmmmmmmmhmmmmmmm). the write was fantastic along with the mmmmm of the picture that accompanies this write..lol dont get me testified in here lol but seriously this is a great write keep up the good work


  • DelWarrenLivingston silver member
    March 7, 2005
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    Well, Gregg, from my perspective, if the pool boy looks like the buff dude in the photo, he can come clean my pool anyday...cause he is gonna attract some serious chicks over to my back yard. I would like to know where you garner all these terrific images for your poetry backgrounds. This one is marvellous and blends perfectly with this piece.

    Best wishes,

    Del
    Edited on Mar 07, 4:01 p.m. because ''.


  • SierraHaven
    March 7, 2005
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    8/10

    Interesting.......This was a little hard to fallow, but I got the point of it. This is funny at the same time poetic. Good job!

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