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I Am Alone

I wrap my arms around the air
For no one is there.
I am alone.
I lay my head down to sleep
And I begin to weep.
I am alone.

I awake in the middle of the night
Filled with a hollow fright.
I am alone.
My head throbs with pain
Driving me insane.
I am alone.

I seek artificial comfort in Playboys.
I turn on the stereo for the noise.
I am alone.
My soul finds no relief.
I am filled with guilt and grief.
I am alone.

I am alone
Beneath a gravestone,
Chilled to the bone,
Empty and unknown.
I am alone.

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Dedicated to my fellow true singles (those without a significant other)
Written March 7th, 2005

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  • maheo
    January 22, 2007

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    Well, I found I liked the rhythm and the repetition allowed the point of lonliness to be driven home...good write.


  • dawnhall silver member
    March 22, 2005
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    Good Poem

    very well written. Yet they are not alone. As long as they have Jesus in thier heart they know they are never alone.

    They even have the Father God to speak too when they are lonely, blue, and happy!

    Praise the Lord.

    Now is the time to pray for them who forgot that our Father God is with them and walded that lonely empty path.

    Thank you for your comment on my poem "Happy Easter Jesus! I value your opinion.

    I am the hos of the Angels Group and i ask you to become an Angel and join our Angels team. The link is on the top of my Authors page.

    Gpd os b;essomg pi!

    Dawm

  • Empty-Soul 9079
    March 9, 2005
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    WOW! i really like this. Totally truthful, and honest! good job!i really like the ending paragraph.

  • rosebud
    March 9, 2005
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    i can see that you can express freely your feelings, which sometimes hard to do even if one is a poet, i do congratulate you ...keep up....


  • Maureen silver member
    March 7, 2005
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    I could feel your sadness in this poem. If I didn't know how it feels to be lonely and if I hadn't felt the pain that comes from being alone (when I didn't want to be), I would have known how it feels after reading your poem. Well done!

    Maureen


  • melphleg gold member
    March 7, 2005
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    Trust me love, I go to bed alone. I wake up alone. I have no woman to hug and hold. At those times I am very alone. I experience much of my pain alone in the middle of the night. There's a difference between having friends and a 'significant other'. I have friends, sure. Significant other - not a chance. The run away fast.


  • Blushfulmoon silver member
    March 7, 2005
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    Oops
    I thought you were talking about yourself until I saw your comment
    Tis a good poem hun, and it's dedidcated to your fellow singles
    I sent ya an IM hope you got it
    Hugs
    Susan~~~

    Edited on Mar 07, 2:44 p.m. because 'error~'.


  • kitten666
    March 7, 2005
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    freaking amazing

    wow, i love you! ::hugs!:: I feel that way all the time, you're not alone


  • Annessia
    March 7, 2005
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    This is so sad! But, I know everyone has felt this way before. Thanks for sharing. It's a very good piece!

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