Crack of his whip
and he cowers before
his master,
whimpering for
a sweet touch
from his smooth lips
Black leather from
head to toe
pale chest revealed
through black,
shiny vest
Tight leather pants
hugging thighs
and ass
long black boots
tied to the knees
His slave
chained and naked
panting, moaning
longing for
release
Sweet pain
breaking of skin
bleeding, groaning
taste of blood
and sweat
Sensation of
master's tongue
bringing lust
and torture
to his slave
Whips caress
love marks
all over
the boy cries
out from pain
Pleasure
rippling from
the sensation
his master
gives
Black leather
slowly removed
with teeth
untying thread
with difficulty
Hot, tight ass
met with
hot, throbbing
member
thrusting hard
Cries of pleasure
biting and nipping
animalistic sex
between two
male lovers
Hot semen
rippling limbs
sweet release
and then...
more painfully
pleasing torture
Author notes
Christian Killer by Homo-Gay
Don't let the title fool, people, I'm not a pedophile. The title is between Neurotic Bunny and I, among few others. That is who it is for after all. 'Boy' just appeals better. 
I hope you liked this. It's hard to write about something you've never experienced and especially when you're a girl as well. I hope it was believable for all who read it. Honest opinion please.
*Also*, if you read this despite my warning in the summary, then it is therefore your own fault and I *do not* want any comments bashing me or anyone else who enjoys this sort of thing. Your comment will be deleted and if I'm in a *really* bad mood, you'll be reported.
Written March 7th, 2005
In a list
A contest entry
- Gay Man's Erotica by Aviel.
300 points, ended September 13, 2005, 2 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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I've never much been into the homoerotic, but I think you did a really good job of capturing the scene. I'm curious. Was this based on a story or just for a contest? Either way it was well written and you didn't go overboard with your capture. It's so easy to fumble when writing something you aren't familiar with. Cheers to the bronze!
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I don't remember what inspired it, but it wasn't for a contest and it isn't based of a story, because I don't read male/male things, usually...Lol. It was written for a friend of mine who is into it.
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Aaaahhh...I see.
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Whips caress
love marks
all over
the boy cries
out from pain
love marks...i think you've given me a new phrase to use...this was a really good poem, and i know what you meant by your "boy" reference...
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Thanks.
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Excellant /fun/sensuous
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Thank you for your kind words. This was truly a difficult task for me to accomplish, so i certainly appreciate your compliments.
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Great write. I think you did a remarkable job writing this and was very impressed with your style. Thank you for sharing this with us and keep writing.
*Ktulu Blackwolfe* -
Thank you.
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<3 <3 <3 <3 <3 <3 <3
*blinks* ... I... I like it... *nodz* I'm at a loss for words.. .*claps* I applaud you!! *cheers* -
Thank you so much for your kind words. They are deeply appreciated.
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fabulous
I was hesitant at first because leather whips and chains are not my cup o tea, but I really got into this piece and I found myself excited; and i'm a girl as well! This was an intense, sexy, arousing poem and I congratualte you for creating this out of an experience you've never encountered. That is a mark of a true poet to see thrugh another's eyes. Excellent job RDT.
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Well, maybe it does sound stereotypical. Then again, I don't HAVE a penis, so how would I know what it feels like for a male to be horny? I tried my best on this, since it was my first try. I'm sorry if you didn't like it, but I guess we all have different tastes. Whatever works for you. It's really hard to write male/male when you've never experienced it for yourself and when the writer isn't even a male at all.
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"Throbbing member" is a bit stereotypical, I feel. And also a bit too euphemistic - could you imagine anyone saying "My member is throbbing"..... or "Gosh, what a nice big member you have?"
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Thank you.
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Wow! This is done very well. I like the vivid imagery and flow of this. The background is unique too. All the best in the contest!
Charishma -
Thank you for your kind words. It was really hard to write this, since I am a female. I also don't have any personaly experience with BDSM, but the topic has always interested me. This is actually the only male/male erotic write I have and I hopes it would be alright to enter. I'm glad you liked it.
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Thank you for entering this as a prewrite into my first ever contest. This is a very interesting style of writing, and one that I am not used to--it was fun to read. While I myself am not into BDSM, I have had friends/lovers who are, so I can still relate. This is a fantastic piece, and good luck in the contest. -
Thanks to my AP mom! 
She is the queen of writing erotica. Lol. Thank you for your comments.
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You have this erotica thing down pat!
Good job!
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Thank you.
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lol, this was hot!
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I don't do hardcore often, if at all. Most of my erotica is usually like this, or sensual.
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I love the idea of tasteful hardcore!!!!!!!!!!!! I've just seen the piccy!!! Hilarious!!!!!
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Maybe you're looking for more of the hardcore kind. I don't usually do hardcore. It disgusts me to an extent, unless it is done tastefully.
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Not kinky enough for me! I like TOUGHER stuff!
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You are getting so good at the erotica stuff honey. This is wonderful
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I didn't even know that you commented! Why'd you go offline all of a sudden??!! Anyway, I am very glad that this made you happy. <3 You're welcome.
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Oh. Wow. Yeah. This made me really really happy. Like... yeah. It's super fantastic. :3 Thankies. <3
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You always know how to make me smile when you comment. It means so much to me that you think this is so well written. It wasn't exactly easy to write! I hope my friend will like it too. I'm glad I can at least make one of my moms proud. I'm a pretty quick learner, huh? I learn from the best.
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Rose...You have penned this to perfection! You have excelled beyond my wildest dreams in your portrayl of this genre...Truly this is as though you lived the moments described...And the picture ain't bad either!
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Lol...I was quite surprised by your enthusiastic comment, but you're welcome and thank you for reading and commenting. I appreciate it because I'm not accustomed to writing this kind of thing and knowing that I did well and that you enjoyed it only makes me feel more confident that my friend will like it. As for the picture...I really don't think he looks like Elijah Wood...The face doesn't look right. Anyway, thank you again for the enthusiastic comment and kind words. It really does mean a lot.
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oh and... is it me or does the guy on the left, in the pic, kind of look like Elijah Wood? XD!
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THANK YOU FOR THIS. <3333 I love you so much now! Do you know how hard it is to find good boy/boy on allpo? Agh. Thank you thank you thank you for reinstilling my faith in the yaoi side of allpoetry XD.
Your wording, the format, everything was wonderful. No complaints here ;D
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Hmm, I'm not sure of the story around this, but if I go with my instinct, he'll enjoy it lots. All it needs are those spiderwebs...
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