...I display this way of emotion like tidal waves in the ocean.
Suicidal day promotion to the death dealer when he's open.
Those who break down and cry
don't deserve to die,
depressed people are in touch with their feelings.
But they should hang their pain from the ceiling
if the hurt is not worth healing.
everybody has a problem they could never solve.
But if the wrists they sever, everything they know dissolves.
Try to live life on the edge of a knife.
See you in hell,
Snoring by more of the boring
Stories I can afford to retell.
I bet you will soon get a chance to enhance your visions,
make them reality and fake your dream decisions.
Have a nice sleep.
Beneath lyrics of concrete 33 feet deep
I hate when the matches hatch and the flash lights shade
when we got nothing but faded scars to aid with blades.
actually, when I think about it...
I don't hate it, yeah I don't hate it at all
I love it when blades persuade veins,
dazed eyes displayed as we stand tall
Strands on the lower hand appalled
as we cut, we bleed, as the “Man” falls
How can people be happy when this world's so crappy?
Nobody's wit' me and there's like a million in this shitty city.
Insane, I’m by myself and I refrain to explain my pain
Entertaining choices, supposed to keep me sane
Hoisted by other mother fuckers and their voices in my brain.
“Yay!
I'm the first commenting stage of decorating words upon your page.
But I know not what to say except I do really like the way
that you portray all those concealed feelings
when the cuts not sewed shut but appeal is still revealing.”
“What’s the struggle yo? Drug addict Maggot Juggalo
I met this ho the closest to gettin’ seats to the show”
The Shaggy, The Neden Game or the Joker’s Wild
With our Joker Smiles and over mediocre styles
..."I want to live so I can kill myself a million times over before I die,
yet each time more explainable with rhyme.
I wanna DIE so much that I live to make it possible,
Or at least put myself in the hospital
I wanna decrease the pieces which make me whole,
so one day I'll be able to reach my goal.”
Shhhhh, Listen very carefully,
maybe you might hear my ring
my friend when the end comes for everything.
I put a spell on you,
because the curse of my verse bursts right through the criminal,
but when Black and Black interact
when our poetry goes digital. My whispers yet again become subliminal.
Dead flowers, blood bridal showers during suicidal hours.
This seems to be you in your least masochistic state of mentality.
A disaster piece description of expression of depression.
A language of pain and anguish. Catered with hatred
creating grave fillers. But there's only one true killer for bitches
which is the breath
you need to bleed
exceed death.
Sincerely
your friend, your partner in crime, your Pumpkin dead
the voice in the back of your head
The Blade pursuader, slit wrist, axe and the black in your text
You'd never ever expect to confy and sit next to the...
-Suicide Suspect
In a list
A contest entry
- suicide poems that don't suck by aeolia.
380 points, ended January 1, 2008, 104 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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I wouldn't be found dead in my corpse.
Umm. A matter of personal experience, and youth perhaps, coming to terms yet still with mortality. Up to about 28 or so one's body regenerates with a rapidity that after that, due to the shutting down of a certain gland, no longer obtains. More than that, there is the Warrior Way of considering one's self already Dead, and the realisation that, given one day one will be dead, one might live in light of that fact (the usual wisdom then being to work for the after-life: that is, the life that will remain after one dies, in the mundane, having made the best of one's life).
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AAAAAAAAAAAAWWWWWWWWWWWEEEEEEEEEEEEEESOME, im glad i read it ...it was fun to read very awesome and deeep ........WRITE ON ROCK ON READ ON!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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WOW WHAT A GREAT JOB,THANX FOR SHARING -
deep
Bravooooooooooo woohoottttttt you've done wonderful!! It is so deep and filled with emotions.Thanks so much for this in depth poem.Tho it dances with hatred but it is raw and right on.
Kari -
WHOAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Dang, most poetry I read that is so long usually is mine, or a few others on here that are that long, but here's another! And I must say, this told such an amazing, great story, I was amazed! This told, in such great ways, great choice of words, and points to have people pause at, and great structure! I am just flat out speechless about it! Just flat out fantastic I really loved this one!!! I don't know if this is your average write, but it definitely shows you know what you're doing! GREAT JOB!!!
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i know everyone said this but that would make a freat RAP SONG i dont even like rap its jus crap to me haha anywhey you got to keep writing that was so good
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Beautiful rhymes, this dark piece captured my attention at the first pause in the beginning. I love the colors, they set the mood for this rap-like piece. Very artistic. I loved the imagery and the references, very well done and placed, and very interesting way to weave these things into the poem. Although this piece was long, every bit of it was worth reading and sparked my attention, kept me reading on. This poem was definitely worth my time and definitely worth the applaud I am going to give it. Great write!
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interesting read. i found this poem intriguing.
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amazingly good!! I see why it's on the list!!
much luv~
shadowed -
this is very... just wow, i suppose is the right way to describe it. i had a hard time the first time i read it through but then i read the comments and how it's a rap, so i read it out loud and understood it, deeply.
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evry good
although not a big fan of rap music this definately has that inbuilt rhythm of a rap to it, a very good write my freind very well done indeed ,keep up the good work and thank you for sharing this with us
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Hott
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wow really really good...thanks for entering my contest um wow that is all i can really say cuz I am speach less I am just like aw struck but this is very very good peice of poetry/lyrics and um yeah I would say you are deffinatley in the running for being the winner.....
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Beautiful lyrics. I was completely dragged into them and was totally entranced. Your writing style is very fluent. Great job on this!
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This was written very well, would make a awesome rap song, like the above people have said. Very strong and powerful, awesome job, and keep it up.
~MxR
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wow this is really good very well written good luck with the rest of your writtes -
this does song like a rap song as I started to read it as a poem the rhyming pattern or lack there of confused me but when read or sang it worked much better nice write
love and light
blaze -
i just enjoyed the hell out of this
i do hope you are considering these poems as rap songs...you're that good
i really wish i could write in this style but it's just no in me... i listen to it just can't write it
i applaud the poet and the poem
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love the poem... it's insanely talented
If I could write like that... well i would....
oh well...
well good luck in the contest!
<3
Ems -
I still love this one that one my contest it is so fricking awesome it is so emotional and true i can like understand where your coming from and i read this poem every morning i know that sounds dorky but this poem or rap or whatever means a lot to understand people have some of the same emotions i do so yeah keep up the good work and like ill read in on your other poems you are a awesome writer
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Wow this is amazing!! You have rhyme but it isn't completely forced because you have the emotion right behind the words. If that makes sense at all. I completely understand why you won the gold for this contest! Bravo my friend!! Keep it up!
--Keita -
O my fucking god this si so fucking awesome you showed so much damn emotion in this it is unbelievable and i just think that you have something here a true talent and you could be a rapper if you wanted that is fucking awesome good luck in my contese
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This was great. It was incredibly intense and written well. I like how you modernised it by adding juggalo's into your text. Great work. Thanks for entering.
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this a a really great poem, good at getting the emotions out. this is just another example of ur great writting skill. keep it up suspect. -
Wow this is cool but why does it remind me of a rap song? I like it this has to be the most unque rap son I have yet to read. I have to say I am starting to get mad when people dis me because I cut my arms they call me a freak or worse lecture me. They don't seem to realise the reason I hurt myself is so I can releave the presure that builds up so tight I wind up hurting someone else. I don't know if you feel that way but I do. Poetry is an outlet for me. I think if I couldn't write I would die. some people can't understand this but I think you can. Great poem I love this
Donnia -
"depressed people are in touch with their feelings.
But they should hang their pain from the ceiling"
That was the best bit of the poem. This was great. Dark, full of anger but also full of truth. You're very talented, you should make this into a song. Strong. I like it. Thanks for taking the time to enter my contest and best of luck!
~Lana
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bravissima
wonderful, silmply wonderful. you expressed yourself so well! great job. thanks for entering.
best wishes,
christine daae thompson -
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"Try to live life on the edge of a knife."
You kick ass and you know it. And that's what makes these so damn wicked. Your the best and your know it and you put so much into these it'll make your head spin. You are the master of verse, the creater of rhyme. A way with words to FuCk W!tH Y0uR H3@d.....................fucking awesome.
----Shady
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your friend, your partner in crime, your Pumpkin dead
the voice in the back of your head
The Blade pursuader, slit wrist, axe and the black in your text
You'd never ever expect to confy and sit next to the...
-Suicide Suspect
Dude you are a freaking creator of the words
Busting out of the herse just like a broken curse
Dont have to understand it, it's just a simple verse
Like Bush & Cheney, You're the best and I'm the worst.
This poem rocks, but I hope their are nothing in here that is serious. Like killing yourself... we juggalos need you! -
wow I loved this!!!! excellent write, I enjoyed reading this.
~'~lost conscious~'~ -
this is so kwl. i love it. its so honest and open and it just rocks. keep up this brilliant work and keep hating the fucked up world......
~kenaz~ -
Haha your write Slipknot.. it does.. i read it a few more times and i also start to be putting it in my head as a song.. and im a singer.. so ive actually started to put a beat to it and everything
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wow.... this was strong..... i can see this (don't hate me for sayin this {you do seem the type})as a rock/metal song.... i was actually putting music to it in my head as i read it.... now if only i could play the guitar....
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hey babe, the poem was great. i wish i'd read it a couple days ago, i'd be able to relate to it more. i hope you're doing better, we haven't really talked in a while. email me or something, i miss you! love you hun,
ellie -
Wow, this is a very good poem.. its about being alone and cutting.. wich is me.. im like the person your talking about.. but am not the only one.. Very good poem.. and best of luck to you in the sontest
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Okay...I really don't know what to say about htis. I'm afraid one thing I say won't be good enougha nd th other would sound stupid. So I am better off just saying that it is great. In some ways I relate to it a lot. But hten again I constantly feel like I am the only one wholistens to myself. So I am used to the hole being alone thing. And depressed is just my thing. So you did a really great job writing this. This poem is going to be in my head for a very long time! Good luck in the contest. And I hope your doing okay, I mean with your dad and everything. You know you can always tlak to me if you need to, even if it is just a short message. So feel better hun!
~!*Andrea*!~
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