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The Roost (Edmonton, Alberta)

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by ~Gregg Rowe~

He stood behind the blond boy, as he played with his pool
cue stick in the backroom of the bar.  Jacking it up and
down like a shaft--inching his way to the backside of the boy.  
Touching his jeans -- kissing his crotch against the young
man's butt.  The young man relaxes, grinding to the music
bouncing off the black walls.  Last year at the age of
seventeen, the blond boy was raped in the bathroom bar.

The older man runs his hands caressing the legs of this youth.  
I see them coming around to cup the inside of his thighs. A gasp
of sex echoes under the neon lights.  The two are enveloped,
swaying to the under beat of the music, connecting lost souls.  
The blond smiles under the pool lights, they move as one,
then separate.  A cue stick connects to the white ball.

The blond boy turns to face his intruder. They sloppily kiss as
the white ball hits the eight.  The blond boy slides down
the older man's body.  The eight ball tumbles into
the side pocket.  The zipper

echoes the silence of the crack.  I stand guard and transfixed.  
A rustle of clothes -- a sound of a muffle -- a few escaped moans
belt buckle clinks.  Whispers, laughter floats.  The blond boy
leans against the pool table,
just grabbing his crotch.


Author notes

For all those of you who are leaving messages behind saying Oh, my, it's a bit gay!  Well, GET OVER IT!  How many times do I have to say that it is YOUR responsibility to read the categories I place my poems in before you venture on reading them.  So leave a critique on the MERITS and the poetic devices of the poem instead of personally attacking the subject matter, or OPEN YOUE EYES and READ THE CATEGORIES to see if you really want to see what the poem is about.  Gregg
Written August 25th, 2002

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  • crystaldust gold member
    March 6, 2005
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    crystaldust 06-03-05 20:25
    lordof the rings I like this poem. It has everything a really good poem should have: specific, telling words; precise form for its content and setting it in a pool room is a very clever stroke. Your imagination fires up the whole situation, making it a good read. Thanks for this.


  • ShaShay
    March 6, 2005
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    Your talent with words is evident here. I loved the rhyme and imagery. Well done!
    ~~~POO~~~


  • SagaPoet
    March 6, 2005
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    don't listen to these idiots, just ignore them. They shouldn't even bother leaving a comment if they're just going to say crap like that. I thought it was very detaled and had a deeper story, and I like that. Keep up the good work, Don't let anyone stand in your way....unless you want them to ;-)

    --Lady Raven


  • Amygdala the Tramp
    March 6, 2005
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    Well of course it is a bit gay, it said 'in collection: Homo-erotic'. But anyways, I think this was well written, with plenty of visuals and good metaphor of the cue stick and pool balls. Well done


  • Quill
    March 6, 2005
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    a bit gay


  • macandrew
    March 6, 2005
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    very well written

    I am wondering if after being raped he is trying to make sense of the conflicting feelings inside. Perhaps acceptance into a different life style will "justify" what happened.

    No matter. Really well written.
    John


  • Shamisen
    March 6, 2005
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    Great style and I can see this is a good poem, particularly your use of enjamblement, but I'm afraid the subject matter isn't to my taste. That's the problem with promoting risque poems I suppose, you won't always get the coments you want because people don't always anticipate the subject matter.


  • monkeysee72
    March 6, 2005
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    Good

    I can't decide if this was a wanted encounter or forced, either way it seems like this boy is trying to decide if this is the way he truly feels, and as far as the rape, been there, and I can tell you it doesn't matter who what or where, it is terrifying and very detramental to a person sense of self worth. I hope if this is a true encounter you got the help you needed. As far as love or lust goes, well we all have needs, and it doesn't matter where we get that attention as long as it is mutual.

  • montez gold member
    March 6, 2005
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    Had I known the subject matter I wouldn't have clicked.
    Sorry, although I have some gay friends, this is just too much information for me. My gay friends never discuss their personal life - and that's the way I like it. Bit of a prude I'm afraid.
    Robin.

  • catwomen
    March 6, 2005
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    good poem

    MMMMMMMMM i can see why its in the abuse section , a great write, keep on writing.


  • LadyUnique silver member
    March 6, 2005
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    great writing here. definitely erotic. i see it's under the categories dark and abuse and i'm not sure why. maybe i am missing something?? i'm not sure if this is casual sex but i think it is... or should i say recreational sex
    i'll bookmark this and check back later to see what others have to say.

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