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Simple Faith

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"What do you see?" said the sparrow.

"Why do you ask?" answered the wren.

"I see the night that follows dusk.
It hovers around the bend in the sun.
It lingers like lace.
It melts like ice.
It feels like frost."

"What do you see?" said the sparrow.
"Why do you ask?" answered the wren.
"I see the flock of geese
furling their wings,
flinging their talons into deep wooded weeds.
They look so ominous.
They sound so loud.
I flee from their presence."

"Who do you see?" said the sparrow.
"Why do you ask?" answered the wren.
"I see the Hand that reaches toward me
to offer sweet seed in the winter,
to press fiery heat into my skin when
I tremble in terror,

to lift me up into the Light
and hold me
forever."

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

That's our simple faith - God's love is there all the time - enveloping us and inviting us to fly to Him.

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www.delawaretribeofindians.nsn.us/images/birds/wren.jpg


Written March 4th, 2005

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  • QueenT
    May 31, 2005
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    I thought this was really nice very different and that is good! Its refreshing after reading a million poems that all sound the same! Nice job and thanks for commenting on my poem! ~QueenT~

  • Odanale
    April 26, 2005
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    This was beautiful. I love the last stanza. The pictures are bit choppy, but I can still make out vague images of birds flying and a heart. The repetition of "What do you see said the sparrow/Why do you ask answered the wren" was quite lovely. Thank you for taking the time to enter the contest~!


  • MagicLady silver member
    April 6, 2005
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    I got this link from someone elses page. I think I have seen your name on my bird poems as well, hard to remember. I have a daily contest on my authors page, if you are interested. Just for fun.

    I love this poem, and your discriptions. I love birds....and poems about them. I have a "list" of bird poems if you are interested. My recent bird poem is Hummingbird Elixir.

    Great poem.

    Cheryl Cheers!!


  • keyman7
    April 5, 2005
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    Very lovely. I like this.


  • ShadowStalker
    April 4, 2005
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    Thanx for reading my sparrow poem. I really loved yours because it was sweet and charming. Good JOB!!


  • Samplette gold member
    March 21, 2005
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    This is really a beatiful write. Love the way you presented it as well. Excellent work.
    S♠m


  • Forms of Me
    March 12, 2005
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    This is a beautiful write. I love the interesting structure you have chosen to use to create this. I can say I agree with Melissa...sort of looks like a heart to me.

    Keep up the great work..and Good luck....

    Liz


  • Molassis
    March 12, 2005
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    This is really a wonderful poem showing forth God's care and concern for His creations.. imagine.. if He feeds His little birds and cares for them in the manner you wrote... how much MORE does He care for us? I really love this.... just a note... the last verse ALMOST looks like you ended it with a heart...

    Truly a loving and inspiring piece here. God bless you! ~Melissa♥


  • agazeley gold member
    March 11, 2005
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    A wonderful poem that seems to be in the wrong contest Haha - it would take first prize in a form contest. But it is a winner in any contest - Albert.


  • qnhoneybee
    March 9, 2005
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    Your words in this poem are so very softly spoken but yet powerful at the same time. I like the repition of the sparrow speaking to the wren. It gave it the characteristics of a Children's poem. I'm not sure if this is supposed to be a form in the poem or not or just a unique way of setting it up. It does capture one's attention.

    Thank-you for entering the contest!


  • peluche
    March 5, 2005
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    Wow. I love the way you structured this piece. Unlike so many others I've read, this effect added to your work instead of distracting from it. This write was just beautiful. It amazed me with its' depth and clarity. As always, your talent shines.


  • thelordreigns gold member
    March 4, 2005
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