And throw down your acrid crack, like salt
And examine the hypocritical, holes of your predicted, sin full faults
Fill the pipe with the crack rocks and ignite it and inhale
Look at this world through a fine hazy, smoky, curtain veil
That's how the divine light managed to creep into our existence
And enter into this Universe on the lines of least resistance
Like the atomic, created, sculpture of the petrified, wife of Lot
Realise your dreams, look into the blackness of the cauldron pot
And the electricity, of the silver, quicksilver and cracked lines do flow
It's the Universe replicated,that you understand and know....
And Evans trampled quietly, out into the blizzard and the unknown line of snow
The magikian did gesticulate and with prestidigitation, manage to show
And the river meandered and lazied, to follow the folds of the flow....
Lead into gold...
Often these secrets you have been told....
Into the clay pipe, you will be moulded and will be the mould
And to taste the cool of the coolest, fountain's and aspirations of life
While the Harlem sheiks did argue over which one was the actual, wife
As the elements did squabble and ponder the meaning of strife....
Thus the chemicals did manage to be magiked and combine....
Like the good alcohol, grown from the righteous, off licence, vine
Determined, to disappear into the sponge and the mystic and the sublime
Whilst the mesmerised, puppets managed to keep up with the linear, beat of time
Let's smoke another rock and sniff another white, line....
As we manage to pull ourselves, up from the gutter and the slime
To try and aspire one day, to the realms of the divine...
And realise that the Alchemist, resides in this romantic heart of mine.
Georges.
Author notes
A down and out chemist, and his fantasy of being addicted to crack and drink. Author Georges.
Written March 4th, 2005
In a list
A contest entry
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An incredible write! In another contest of mine it would've won gold but in this one I'm looking for positivity stemming from addiction so I'll have to painfully pass it by. Know I'm exeedingly impressed with your writing skills though!
Georgia
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Ha, interesting piece you have here. Where did you come up with such an idea? Thank you for entering my contest and good luck.
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how many poems have you put in my contest, i think 2 but im not to sure, remember, up to three and then you get DQ'd.. - in the middle of the poem you kind of went off, but in the begining you were there, and in the end you came back.. this was an overall good poem, but it needs some work
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hey great write!
i loved the imagry!
i liked all the lines with the ending words rhyming with "time"
great job...
my favorite lines:
"While the Harlem sheiks did argue over which one was the wife
And the elements did squabble and ponder the meaning of strife
And the chemicals did manage to be magiked and combine
Like the good alcohol, grown from the righteous, off licence, vine
And to disappear into the sponge and the mystic and the sublime"
--amazing...
there is a sence of beauty in this piece...the "good" of drugs rather than the "bad"
i really enjoyed this piece...
thank you for entering another great write into my contest!
thank you for sharing this,
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Very awesome poem! The rhyming was great and the imagery and story were just outstanding. Thanks again for entering and good luck!
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i like how it shows and gives such beautiful words. it was really much mor eoriganal then anything i have every read on ap. it shows the desperation of one who learns to many truths. that maybe there should be a limit on what humans are capable of knowing until we break and go into self desperation. also the price of knowladge and money. i like the subject a lot! great write!
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I liked it a lot. Very creative.
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Really great write. Creative and well written. Good luck in my contest!
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Oh this was brilliant. A wonderfull flow, beautifully worded with excellent imagery. I love the original subject matter and the twist at the end was indeed clever. I didn't see that comming. You did extemely well with this one bravo. Thanks for entering and good luck.
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Definitely a different write and I loved the way you angled it with the mythical & magical aspects laced throughout and someone trying to safely check street pharmaceutical drugs.
good luck in the contest.
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This is a vivid & unique write, indeed! Great job, and good luck in the contest!
Peace...Syah
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indeed, a poem with a subject you don't come across with each day... and very vivid images you made with your words! I wish you the best of luck in this contest!
Leander -
What a great piece of work you've composed here, to be a crack head or a chemist that is the question. I enjoyed this poem, it was different and quite unique in it's content. Thank you and best of luck in the contest.
Avril
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I loved this the first time I read it and having the chance to read it again, that hasn't changed. Well written, best of luck in the contest
Ruth -
What an awesome duality between mythical legend and, ah, street pharmacy?
Very well-written, love the imagery and the shifting of consciousness.
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Wow I am so glad that I had to limit this to just two poems per person, I have the feeling that you could have filled the 30 spots with beautiful brilliant works, This is magical in its use o of language, a most enjoyable wander into a fantastic world Good luck in contest
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I love the changes you've made Georges. An excellent use of historical and present perspective. Fantastic write.
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It was good i liked it keep it up and thanks for entering my contest
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dude, your stuff totally is awesomest
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This is far and away one of your best attempts Georges, and at last, I'm reading something that I can "sort of" understand!
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Another great poem..... you do make things seem so easy to write as dragondancer said. you used just the right words all the time. and for that i am sad..... one day i will (hopefully) write something so great as yours. but till then i shall read yours. nice work.
Tiffany -
Great beyond Great
Wow...You make my stuff look like kindergarten material compartitively. *sigh* Well, I do love it. I must not be too good at the whole understanding your writes, but I still enjoy them...I got the picture of the Sword in the Stone (Disney Version). A little odd, I'll admit, but hey, I'm a kid at heart and it happens.
Anywho, I think this was pretty interesting. I say the title and made me wonder a little...lead in to gold and all that. I know "scientifically" back then it couldn't be done, but you make it seem like it could. I like that sort of thing. Making the impossible real. Well, anywho, this was cool and I certainly hope to hop back here sometime and see another wonder.
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This has been beautifully penned and is full of imagery .. my fav lines would be:
And the chemicals did manage to be magiked and combine
Like the good alcohol, grown from the righteous vine
And to disappear into the sponge and the sublime
Whilst the puppets managed to keep up with the beat of time
Absolutely magical .. I applaud you on this one, its so beautifully written
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A poem that shares the title of my favorite book... This is a great poem. I love the vocabulary of this piece. Not too many people use words like these anymore. Great write.
You should read The Alchemist by Paul Cohello if you haven't already. It's a wonderful book.
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This was awesome though it almost seemed as if it would have been better in prose form, but that's just me. Anyways this was very well written,
"The magikian did gesticulate and with prestidigitation, manage to show
And the river meandered and managed to follow the folds of the flow
Lead into gold..."
I particularly liked those lines, cause you used a lot of big words that sounded cool, lol, and it was a cool image. Great job with this one. -
I love your poetry..it is ion a league all it's own. So much more intelligent than the average poem, even above average poems do not carry your intelligence.
You are set apart as a poet.
Do continue.
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wow another good piece of work... I like your world... may I sometimes be able to change my poems made of lead and follow you in a world of gold... well done again!
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An great alchemy poem. The name certainly drew me in for this read
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Good Job
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sweetly done
awesomeness!!! really like it! ...lost for words! ...really luve it, i like the whole thing!!! 
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very good!!! I Loooove it!! unusual but thats good. wherd you get the idea?
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Ooh, I agree with CarterTachikawa! It definately reminds me of Fullmetal Alchemist.
; I was thinking that as I read it, lol. It's a very good poem, I haven't ever read anything on this topic before. It was a nice break from the ordinary-- good job.
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I can't remember if I read this or not or if I had read it, did I comment on it. Anyway, it's a great alchemy poem. Almost reminds me of Fullmetal Alchemist on Adult Swim. I don't know if you watch it or not. But anyway, back to poem! Very nice descriptions. Very nice rhymes. I liked it. Thanks for sharing. Keep on writing!
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lead words,now golden phrases
ah,nothing like a enigmatic alchemy poem.
reminds me of all those lost,forgotten metal tunes of the 80's
superb writting,and wow i have never seen the word prestidigitation in actual text before,so bonus!
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Awesome. This is a stunning work of art. I love it. It moves and flows with a wonderful rythm. Keep it up!
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Kudos for the lead into Gold
Woot! I love reading your works. You're truly talented. I loved the title of this piece so i checked it out. That's a good thing cuz this is a really great piece. The words you used captivated me and drew me into your detailed write. Very, very good as usual. Keep it up! -
this is rli gr8, it reads well and is pretty inciteful
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Georges brilliant as usual, brilliant write my friend, but are we out of the slime? great visuals this is a poem that should have a lot of success it is one of the best at the moment, I was a great pleasure reading this and goes onto my favorites. hugs Di
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so lovely and wonderful...I love the language used...magiked is so pleasing to the eyes for some reason...I love seeing archaic words...I don't know And the imagery is beautiful...much love Amritha
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Damn Georges...this Alchemist is friggin sweet! I love this write. Great job. I cannot say much more. Keep it up. Love always,
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aNOTHER MOVING write. i would write more, however i have to jet so i'll be sure to leave something tangible when i return and can...
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you vastness of topics never seems to run out when you are creating new works. you always amaze me, showing me new worlds i have yet to exsperiance. well done hun.
Angel
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Really good work,I found the rhyming was good,...I liked this so much great work....Be Well..................................................................,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,, ,,,,,,,,,,.............................................................. ........................................................................ ........................................................................ ........................................................................ ................. -
Just loved it .Great write flowed with a fantastic beat .Well done
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Good diction, good details...I love fantasy.
I love the diction and detail in all the peoms you do...I love fantasy poems and I love poems that make me think. I loved it. -
its cool...isnt hypocritical spelled as such, not hippo critical?
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Simply brilliant
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Amazing imagery-and once again, i love the uninhibited rhyme form. Great job!
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Excellent imagery wonderful story brava :f
Excellent imagery wonderful fantasy-reality very well done awesome vocabulary worthy of a wordsmith brava Imagery blending as the cauldron stupendous "And examine the hippo critical, cracks of your predicted, sin full faults
On the sculpture of the petrified Lot" excellent well done... wishind you much success on all of your endeavors
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Cool
wow this is tottly cu-ael, by the way its cool!!
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Good
This was a fun poem to read.
I think the rhyming was very good.
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