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Headache

Headache

Jump in the shower
Take off my clothes
Let the blood go to my toes

I cant take this feeling much longer
Feel the swelling in my head
Waiting for the medicine to set
Dry off and dive into bed

Make the light go missing
This sensation that I’m falling
Hoping to fall asleep suddenly
Staring into the darkness of my mind

My eyes are slowly closing
Entering the time of dreaming
The headache has gone away
As I end my day

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Written March 4th, 2005

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  • Spoken Voice
    March 10, 2005
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    I luv this one, especially since at the moment i have a killer headache, i smashed my head against the car door, i have a really gross painful lump behind my ear from it, i'll show you 2morrow, anyway, great write, it's my fav. so far.

    *tener*


  • thewriterwithin
    March 5, 2005
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    Wow, this one was great. I really liked reading it, I thought it was perfect. I like how you wrote about headaches. What a pain in the arse they are. Great poem, really liked it. Keep writing.

    Take Care,
    !*-Jasmine-*!


  • abigail06
    March 4, 2005
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    excellent

    you should be proud of this one lurch. it's soo well done. you really come across with such strong emotions and feelings, paints a wonderful picture for the reader. oh gosh. i'll walk away with a sore heart. i hope you find what you're looking for. ~abbie