Clearly murky waters,
With uninterrupted views of chaos.
Transparent and clean windows
Overlooking nothing at all
Tendrils of ice
Covering the surface
Covering the depths
The never-ending expanse
The crackle of the unknown
The scrunching of understanding
Destroying the little left
The spherical misunderstood
Undoubtedly infinite radii
With no clear cut distinction
Until all is hazy
All is shaded
All meaning is lost
Author notes
This is a different way to view the emotion confusion
Written March 4th, 2005
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A very imposing and profound work, particularly from one so young. The metaphor for emotional confusion you use is particularly interesting and demonstrates a deep and intelligent understanding of the state. Your vocabularly and eloquence is also impressive.
Many people feel this way, indeed I myself have pondered over everything and nothing, simeultaneously. Indeed it is a very confusing state inherently.
You are within the constraints of my contest and can therefore be considered. Congratulations on an excellent write and good luck. -
Kool poem! I noticed on ur profile it says your13 in year 10...is that true? Coz im from Tas and im 14 but only in yr 9, lol. Good poem nywayz.
Valk -
this write was amazing. you have great skil! im adding you to my favorites!!!!
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8/10
There's something I like about this, But I can't really put my finger on it. I did really like the vivid images you painted with your words, And I liked the edgy raw feeling I got when/after reading this. But, I did get a "undone" feeling with this though, I don't know. But good write.
Frances Lynn
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daym...niceness
the imagery is very neat..very very descriptive
every word seems to be described...
great job
keep writing
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Applause,
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still think it needs a stronger ending...
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