The shore became the death bed of innocent lives
the sea water became more saltier with our tears
with the fear of drying up..the sea consumed our tears
and filled it's stomach with countless dead bodies
it was a dancing tragedy i have ever seen in my life
hushed out as a ghost shouting with thirst
the mud castles,the collected shells...captured fishes
little kids,lovers,huts,fishermen and others
were swept towards the ocean and before they cud realise
the giant waves took them deep inside the ocean
and the news spread like fire..setting the hearts ablaze
relatives rushed to the spot..just to see the ocean dance
everyone's crying and the merciless ocean alone kept laughing
it turned more bluish with it's poisonous thoughts
Tsunami we never heard of the term before..
now each and every one knows it is a man eater
tsunami went back happily with lots of prey
but in our eyes tsunami tears come everyday
Author notes
this is another piece on the same tragedy
Written March 4th, 2005
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I Know ...that's the reason i never call myself a poet.
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you have still a lot to learn though you have tried to write the pain of death that the sea brought you could not express it and the misery you try to portray is minimal to what you could have done anyway i ll rate it average...
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This was awesome and the picture made it even better! I loved this poem, great subject and great form, nice imagery and I hope to read more of you, Great job.
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Pathetic
I'm happy that you've reflected the feelings of many of us in words. I've a suggestion: Is it "saltier" or "more saltier"
Which one goes better there? Though you've got the poetic liberty, I feel you can settle with "saltier."
"Tsunami we never heard of the term before..
now each and every one knows it is a man eater"
is another beautiful line I could mention from the poem.
Good! Keep it up.
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Sowmya, this is heart wrenching... and you've concluded it beautifully with this couplet..
tsunami went back happily with lots of prey
but in our eyes tsunami tears come everyday
very well written and one can sense from your words that how much you've been touched by the disaster... keep on writing...
mina
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Very Touching!!!
Sowmya, this is a subject I was afraid to touch, so horrible was the destruction and so shocking and at the same time so amazing how people came forward to help out.
You have written a wonderful poem, not missing any of the horror of destruction. I think this the best you ahve written so far. It was that good.
You are an amazing poet, Sowmya, amazing.
Love from Coimbatore - Uncle Joel - -
Nice to read your poem.
Your second line is quiet good.
All well wishes from your homeland India.
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yeah i surely wud do that..thanks for the suggestion
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I love this picture... it is so moving... very good choice, but maybe you would change the font or the colour of the text so it's more catchy... Great job though!
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