Damn Selfish You.
An alternate person, Your selflessness unbearable–
It bares all, sees all, knows the unknown.
You know Nothing, while Nothing knows You.
Consumed by the conscience state –
Liberty and Justice, friends of our State.
Take my word, look into the mirror,
Ask Yourself, will You answer?
Consumed by the reality, distorting my mind.
Leave me tomorrow, and I will be perfectly fine.
Passionate players of passionate playmates,
Throw passionate games, out passivist windows
Full of passionate torture.
A locket of passionate hopes,
For those trapped in Passion’s games,
Passionately destroying my beliefs, my heart, my mind,
Deluding my passionate reality, full of false passion,
False pretenses, happy endings are conquered by passion.
Hold me, leave a hole in me,
Depict my mind by deferring the depiction,
Deceive my brain by defying my deception.
Keep me to please You, for You’re pleasure alone,
I am pleased to see you smile, You are the only one.
Release all of You, to see all of me,
I love you, its not all I ever need.
Look in the mirror, the mirror is looking at You.
I’m questioning its reasons, You reason my questions.
Do opposites attract? Do I wonder the opposite?
Embrace the last thread, stitches of a needles thread,
Grasp the last concept before we are lost, lost for --
Run with me, far from here, far from here,
You and I can’t handle the ringing in Our ears.
Who is it You are? Damn Selfish You, because You --
Take away my breathe, leave me lifeless on the floor,
Close my door, leave me with Nothing forever more.
Author notes
i had a bad day today...and that is what it is about in my poem.
Written March 3rd, 2005
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Thanks for the comment. To answer your question about the usage of the word passion it was really to emphasize how the word passion can be used in different ways. passion for dead, passion for love, passion for silence, passionate hate, etc. The word means great feeling towards but when you think of passion you think of love and compassion however i was trying to show that there was more to passion and that there were so many ways that the word passion could be taken. The opposite of everything.
Thanks again. To All.
lidi -
we all have our bad days and im no exception good ass job on this write and hope to see more of your work in the near future hun
all the best to ya
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Great Wirte. I was breathless when i read this poem. It really knocked me off my feet.You kept me interested the whole time evn though it was pretty long. However never drop material to make it shorter. Those are just my thoughts. Over all an amazing poem -
Interesting perspective here. Alot of thought in this and definitely gave a person something to look at. To skim the surface is nothing as this delves deeper into thought. Great job
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it was kind of long but great write! keep it up.
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all i can honestly say about this write is WOW ... i honestly can not find any other words in my vocabulary to describe the emotion and energy that flows from this write. absolutely beautiful
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Wow.....You do have alot of talent. This is a beautiful write, it truly was. It think you have better yet to come, but if you make one better than this, than that shall be extraorinary. I enjoyed this, it was filled with your ideas, and your thoughts, it made this jump out at me. I think you are a wonderful writer/poet.
Keep up the excellent work!
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An interesting twist of words you put together here. It was when you referred to opposites at some point in the piece where I did see that idea come into play in your write. I think the one thing I wasn't so sure of in reading was the use of the word passionate so many times (or a tense thereof) in one of your stanzas. For repetition it wasn't bad, but I was caught a bit off guard with that much repetition.
They style and form of the poem overall was very strong. It was clear that you must have spent some time in writing this with the thought provoking nature of many of the lines you've given us here. Overall, this does show off the talent I remember in reading through some of your poems of past.
Nicely done. 'Glad to see you post one in the featured area. I think it's been ages since I've stopped by your page to read some of your stuff. Good stuff.
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This was very good. You have a lot of talent. This poem was breath taking. It was very deep and very powerful. I got a few messages out of these and they were very strong. Your writing style shows that you are a very deep minded person and very down to earth. I don't see a lot of people like that on this site. This was very sad and yet very beautiful at the same time. Nice work.
Always and Forever,
~Kendal
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