It moves
Silent. Unseen.
Changing all within its path.
For better, or for worse,
Bringing such differing symptoms of its passing,
That those who lack experience,
Would swear their affliction was far differing from others.
They'd be wrong!
Distress, joy, death and life anew.
Singularly, in pairs, or all too often together,
For those unfortunate souls immersed within its waves.
Ensconced in emotions, to powerful to control
Mind blowing conflictions of heart and mind,
Those touched will never be at rest again.
Some, overflowing with joy,
Elation at feelings newly discovered.
Meaning, where before was only agony and discord.
Then, some destroyed.
Laid barren. Laid bare.
Crushed by the enormity of loss that envelopes them.
Lives crumbling, devoid of reason.
Such is the turmoil left in its wake.
Yet others still there are,
Consumed with longing,
Hoping even,
That, by some twist of fate,
They'll be chosen next.
Risking self-destruction for promises of utopia,
Though they know not, that which awaits them.
And so, with souls such as these, it spreads.
This beautiful and cataclysmic virus,
Called Love.
Author notes
Written June 2nd, 2003
A contest entry
- The Wonders And Sorrows Of Love by Neon Lights.
300 points, ended March 16, 2005, 27 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Wonderful poem. I truly loved it. You have made it sound so wise and intreging. I would leave alonger comment like everyone else but I have tons of others to read. Wonderful job and good luck in the contest,
~Fiona~
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excellent
cataclysmic virus..!!! hhmmm I guess I agree with you...again another deep poem... keep up, and I will continue reading you... -
Thankyou again for your kind words
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This is an awesome poem. You have really done a spectacular job here. One of the things I love most about free style poetry is the fact that it allows the writer to become as expressive as they want. It also allows you to inflict as little or as much emotion into a piece to pass on to the reader. That’s a pretty powerful feeling. This is a perfect example of why I love this style so much. Don't ever stop stretching yourself as a writer or sharing your talent. Since you are new to our site let me just say, welcome aboard! I’d also like to mention that the newest issue of our AllWrite magazine is out. I encourage you to check it out. It’s another great way to get acquainted with those on the site. www.allpoetry.com:2500/febuary/published/HomePage this months theme is “Affairs of the Heart”. Enjoy!
♥ Kimberly
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Many thanks for the feedback
I'm a touch dyslexic so run what i write through spell checks and regularly forget the gramma option hehe! The poem has floated through a few sites, each one differing slightly in spelling and grammatical errors 
Again, thank you for adding this to the featured list too.
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Alistair -
This is a wonderful piece that more than hints of wisdom throughout. The two ending lines put a wry grin on my face, as I know it's nearly imPOSSible to define love without going into some special terms that you've used here. Good for you!
Overall, it is a well-written poem. There are a few word oopsies, like "too" instead of too powerful too control -- which should be 'to'.
Although your language art is impressive, I would have used a few different words in some of the lines for the sake of readability and alliteration. Otherwise, it's a special piece. Allow me to feature this one for you in the Showboard which is headed to the RIGHT of your screen under "Featured*. This makes it easier for someone to read at just a "click" from there
Hope you get many comments and critiques.
Welcome to AllPoetry! If you need some special critiques (read my author's page), let me know.
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