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Under Thine Aeolian Dome

 


Under thine vaster Aeolian dome
I hear the lulling foam extreme
upon her footsteps rendered mute
within her crystal haliotis gleam.


 

I stand on a blue alienated shore
in veils of twilight sombered west
and falling, lost on a purple foam
I shoot the canopic suns and rest.


 

Along the gray rock-raveled spume
I sense her pleasance of mutable perfume
and turn a love to her lost pagan things
and dream of her nymph’s uncleaving bloom.


 

Under a high mysteriarch of a trinal noon
on my lute of jade I sing to she
into the plum-plucked midnight strewn
and drink her Olympian ecstasy.


 

In sunken voidness absolute
where galleons crumble and krakens nurse
I tread invisibly beyond the flame
of this star in the universe.


 

In this undimentional cyclic vast
a sun triumphant with strength and light
I reach an unhorizoned granite-spike
tangled with tissues of planets confined
in their tireless starry-pinioned flight.


 

A wizard, I, crying eerily,
and with a misshapen shadow, crawl
to raise my ensanguined blade, then scream-
and watch the vapor phantoms fall.


 

I awake, unknown, near a spring
carrying downstream oblivion’s tide
with blazoned butterflies in duskiest greens
assailing my sluggish calms oblique

and cast then upon an eventide.


 

I carve a subtle ruin of stones,
divinating, blindly drawn,
like a wisp of crocus dawn
awakens a barbarical conjurer
that conjures up her form anew

forever naked in the sun.


 

 

Author notes

This is more in the vein of CAS's 'fantastic' poetry that features use of original and strange words- I guess I am drawn to the fantastically original and strange!
Written March 2nd, 2005

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  • x9Nocturnal9x
    March 13, 2005
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    This is definitely a wonder of the poetry world..a fine example of what amateur poets should look up to..the point of where we all would want to be someday..to have the ability to write this originally and beautifully would definitely be satisfying...at least for me The imagery here was beautiful! For some reason i now have a craving for chocolate..either you have a subliminal message or I'm just hungry awesome write!
    -Lis

  • Frederick
    March 13, 2005
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    This is what poetry is all about, something that is alive, expands to reach off through the printed word to the receiver, while still a part of the poet presenting themselves/what they wanted to communicate, and then, continuses to grow within the receiver to create an extension/new births of the poem!

  • Ninque-Aiwe
    March 5, 2005
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    Oh, this is very very nice! I adore the language used, and the poem seems to tell a story. I wish everyone could write like this.

    I also see that the contest is still judging, good luck!


  • wbiro gold member
    March 3, 2005
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    Thanks- but we stand on the shoulders of giants!


  • SheWasPreternatural
    March 3, 2005
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    It has been a very long time for me since I have read a poem with such depth that is expressed in this one… so naturally, it was sensational for me to read. I would make an attempt to praise this piece… but somehow I think my words would only cheapen the effect of its glory, because I’m still a bit locked in awe after reading it. It is in fact far beyond me to compete with the words used in this… since you seem to capture the words I cannot- the same words I have been struggling for a long time to express. So in the end, I applaud you and the talent you have shown in this piece. Thank you for sharing… and I wish you luck in the contest. Take care. -rXd


  • sanity
    March 3, 2005
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    Once again this is dynamic, a great piece, as you say more in the vein of CAS's poetry. I myself like the plainer side with less flowery words, but I like this, very well done, thanks for sharing this.............

    take care

    sanity

    Edited on Mar 03, 2:06 because ''.

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