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Paradise

I can’t express to you
the way I feel at night
when your words
“I love you so much”
cradle me
as I slip past consciousness
into the dream of you
that can only be called
Paradise.

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Written February 28th, 2005

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  • Joe Spencer
    March 8

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    What are we are we just a dream and if so are we dreaming are just part of the dream.

    In dreams you can become anything you wish taking that is the so called real world is not so easy.


  • xtootiex
    March 12, 2005
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    ooo very short and sweet but powerful. i liked this a lot.


  • StarrySky
    March 5, 2005
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    such moving words ... having love cradle you is one of the most wonderful feelings in life


  • forgotten dream
    February 28, 2005
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    another lovely piece. this really captures emotion well - it's exactly the way i feel at night when those words are spoken to me. a beautiful write and a pleasure to read. thank you for sharing <3


  • HaleyMary
    February 28, 2005
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    Nice poem. It's very good. The poem has a nice flow to it. Anyway, yeah, it's really good.


  • S A Adelmann
    February 28, 2005
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    I wish I had points to applaud this - it is good, but I am just so glad to see something here from you.

    Very nice, zee!

    Scott


  • lovelovepalooza.
    February 28, 2005
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    wow this is really god...and like...i feel like this exactly. lol i mean...a very specifil situation pertains to this. so yeah...really, really good!

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