Says He,
'In this world
to you
are ~
backs of skies only I’ve seen,
places you have never been
Sun to glorify each hair,
on your head that I placed there-
Stars to sink your heart at night
bewildered upon the sight~
Seasons for the changing you
when depression can ensue-
Wind to thrust a breath of thought
to the child whose soul I bought
Immense oceans for your thrill-
salty waters that can heal
Trees, to cool during your stay-
In a pose-show how to pray
Honeysuckle marmalade
spun from bees in late day shade.
Animals and birds above
to observe and see my love-
Speak to me, O’child , do tell!
Do you like it very well?”
Said I ~
“Oh, but there is just no word
that I know or ears have heard
for in this mesmerizing earth
I’ll not touch all as in its worth
I look at night’s all LOVING eye
and I still sin,
Oh, my-
Dare I?”
© 2001 Zealberry
Author notes
Written October 5th, 2002
In a list
A contest entry
- he said/she said by Katrina Armour.
300 points, ended December 26, 2004, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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A marvelous piece...
A marvelous piece; one can't help but see that God exists by simply looking at His creations on the earth; wonderfully done. Maybe you would enjoy my poem "Evening Sky", which parallels one theme of your work. --Joe
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wow that is so very awesome to have it published...your a testimony in a lot more ways then u think..keep writing writes like this...u never know...
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It's more obvious within the sphere of ultimate equation
that we see something inhumanly possible. I reach...and
yet...."..I'd never be able to climb up that far".
I'm glad you liked it. Thank you. I was tickled
that this was one of the several published.
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Great Job!
oh wow auntie will this was differnet but I liked reading it..thanks so much for sharing this from your heart..I really liked it!
Kari -
Very well done. My favorite lines were:
Trees, to cool during your stay-
In a pose-show how to pray
The ending was interesting too. This is different from the other poems I've seen. Very original. Thank you for entering my contest. Good luck!
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very nice i liked it... it was very well written... and had a great flow to it... good luck in the contest
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I notice you have it listed under "abuse". . .a mistake?
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Excellent write, Cookie, excellent write.
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And so it goes for us all. This is a very insightful piece Cookie.
Mark
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Beautiful imagery-beautifully written piece. Good luck in the contest
~Kathy -
Oooh, I loved this one! Inspiration is spinning within my brain as I go look for a pen.
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loveme
This piece move me. It makes me appreciate more of Nature and Lord's creation. Thanks for sharing -
Oh..nike!! Soooooo true. Thank you for the affirmation with scripture....!! And your read and comment
Blessings for you each day.
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Very nice. God created this world so that we may see the wonder of Him in verything. Psalm 78:32 " In spite of all this, they kept on sinning; in spite of his wonders, they did not believe."
Very nice message.
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What a beautiful poem. I love it. You are an amazing writer.
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This is gorgeous. I love the imagery and the flow and of course the message. We are truly under the grace of God and love through Jesus.
Absinthe
I just have to add my favourite line here is:
...Wind to thrust a breath of thought
to the child whose soul I bought...
So neat. Good luck again.
Absinthe
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Interesting write and well done. ~~Bonnie Q
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don't touch it!
Lovely write Cookie of refreshing thoughts, was the ending to show how unworthy we are because of the sin of His things or blessing He brings......Great write love ya, Sherry -
don't touch it!
Yes, I remember a scripture that talks about how God has numbered, or knows the number of the hairs on our heads. I never really stopped to REALLY consider that before now... WOW... thank you. -
don't touch it!
How awesome is that!! God, infinite in power, speaks softly and says 'I did it all for you' I love the line, Sun to glorify each hair,
on your head that I placed there- , even the hairs of our head God placed there hair, by hair, that is how much he cares.
Awesome write. -
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Sweet write! I am in awe at the way you expressed the feelings in this one. -
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great poetry- i loved the words you chose- very profound...................debbie :) -
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great wording cookie, just beautiful.
and the background went well with the mood
(just a question: are the stars in the background moving or are my eyes playing up on me cos it's REALLY early in the morning?!)
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You are SO right...Sprite. It means that ...the more we are human, the MORE we need our God!!!
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don't touch it!
Even in the pure and loving heart, temptation can raise the need for sin, though you are in awe of the magnificent gift you have been given. It is called being human! -
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veeeeery good. wonderful (adjective adjective adjective). i really do like your short line style. -
Thank you everyone. I loved the background too, but it was moving way too much. I changed it for the still space rather than the animated. Sorry if you found it distracting.
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Oh I like this love the background too but it made me kind of dizzy witht the movement. lovely write.
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don't touch it!
I love the style and subject you used here. It is vivid and thought prowoking. Satisfying all senses at once. :) Bravo! -
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beautiful write, I like it well done.
~Free~ -
don't touch it!
This is a credo. I loved it.
'How greath Thou art' We are so small, but sometimes we are too important to realize that. But what is really, really significant, is that we are endowed with greater powers than angels ...
Thank you, CZ, for a wonderful poem. The one we can read, and the real one hidden between these lines. Please do not touch one single word.
Kindest Regards, Myra -
don't touch it!
there are no words to measure this tender kiss of Gods blessings in night and day.... -
don't touch it!
Profound always!!!!!!!!!!!! Wonderful message well written.
Monk -
*sighs** Glad you see it that way!! It was my intent. ...'who God is'. simple..profound...always!! Yes. Blessings!
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don't touch it!
It seems the quandary of all Christian existence, perhaps in place to help me remember who God is and where I leave off. The lines are neatly fitted and generate a sense of harmony in me as a reader, as well as striking a sympathetic chord of identification. Going to my Favorites. Kind of classic, even, in my opinion. -
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cookie..No need to apologize, I think its nifty. :o)
*Kade~ -
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I can dig all that about this being a motive an your emotion in the poem, but how come you did not incorporate all that in the poem? See, and I am not being mean in saying this, I can not read minds. I can only read what I read.
'Ahhhhhhh...my goodness!!! I wish I could see how you would view it that way...but..no
it's meant to be the opposite.
I answer in a way that can't be uttered. In the ephermeral and awesomeness of His earth's night sky, it's reminding me He's watching and asking, but I, though warped in the human condition, am so gifted with this,...nearly fall prostrate due to the conscience that, even with this divine spectacular...... and with a question that not even I can know.....I STILL DARE to sin!!!!? You see?'
I gotta be dense, but I thought you felt God's display was a sin inasmuch as you were not inclined to have all that fun. Like
'God, I'm just having to much fun. PLease stop me, God, before I enjoy myself too much!' -
Yes...we're less than adequate, but then...that's what GRACE is for...'Unmerited favor...upon believing, repenting, and asking'..Nothing ELSE!! Too easy for high-minded thinkings. We need to throw in our towels. Not our brains!!!!! Thank you all
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excellent
He gives us all this beauty, but we still f*** around
Edited by CoyoteMoon on right now. -
darksky, I've been trying to change it, another less active, but something's wrong with the image uploads in here right now. Sorry. (:o(
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i have a really short attention spand, the stars are
too distracting. so i didnt really read it all...but good job anyway. lol
*Kade~ -
Ahhhhhhh...my goodness!!! I wish I could see how you would view it that way...but..no
it's meant to be the opposite.
I answer in a way that can't be uttered. In the ephermeral and awesomeness of His earth's night sky, it's reminding me He's watching and asking, but I, though warped in the human condition, am so gifted with this,...nearly fall prostrate due to the conscience that, even with this divine spectacular...... and with a question that not even I can know.....I STILL DARE to sin!!!!? You see? -
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OK - - It seems the first part, that is, the part before you reply to God is all good stuf, excellently touched with great poetry, and then you reply with a attitude like, 'Well, I am a bit hot this summerday but i dare not jump in the water and spoil my bathing suit and hairdo.' -
Thank you all. But PH..not sure what you mean. Please share!
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excellent
Good writing, but I'm flabbergasted at the whole thing.
Don't apologized for doin' it to me.
As a whole now, I guess I'd just be wordless.
Maybe it is a start to a longer poetic debate. -
don't touch it!
I loved the style that this was written in, great poem and the COOLEST background!
Sweet ;0)
Gem xxx
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