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loss of control

can you feel it the rapid pace of my heartbeat
slowly drowning in this unbearable heat
sitting so calm but losing all control
i have to get out of here i have to go
i try to scream but nothing comes out
keeping all edge my mind filled with doubt
slipping from this string of life
keep an eye on the sharp bladed knife
incredible pain shoots up my arm
I'm done with this shit I'm done bringing harm

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Written February 28th, 2005

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  • Jennette
    March 5, 2005
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    baby i'm all around perfect ...lmao JK thanx tho justin

  • After Afterlife
    March 1, 2005
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    nice poem, i loved it, everything rhymed well, everything had a good rhythm to it. it was all around perfect.