~by Gregg Rowe~
We swam in a universal teardrop
Where Cyclops pool of time -- refused to stop:
And Echoes haunt the Sapphire neon skies
Translucent aqua hues -- release their sighs.
Our lyres that strum and stroke heart’s love songs beat --
The love that dare not speak its name: Queer Street.
Translucent aqua skies -- release their hues:
As we strive to live with the Divine Truth --
And brush stroke paintings painted by Monet:
Apollo smiles as we greet the new day
From Heaven -- Zeus’s prism spectrum dawns
The island Greek shores: Light waves wash upon --
Our love snatched away -- Father Lune rises:
His darkness envelopes -- causes Crisis;
This mono-colour hue surrounds loves duet --
Het’rosexuality, -- we’re a threat!
To love a man -- still produces a frown --
In stratosphere Chaos we drown.
Author notes
Written February 27th, 2005
In a list
A contest entry
- Romantics Welcomed- The Second Door by Spaniard.
300 points, ended March 28, 2006, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Beautiful write. Best of luck in the contest
Coconut
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Of the few poems I have read in this contest, I have to honestly say that this is by far the best. The way that you provoke towards the overused emotion that no one seems to understand nowadays shows the maturity as well as the knowledge that you hold..... great job, and best of luck to your future endeavors.
ta-ta,
Gabriel -
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you could change the title as "listen" suggested...but if you touch anything else in this, i will be greatly disappointed. I am astounded by the bouncing flow, you know one of my fav things to do with poems is to try to read them aloud, i get a better feel for the content…hearing the words, for me, seems to make them more alive than just visually scanning. There is a vibrancy here in your work that i do not see anywhere else. I think you are unique in your approaches to writing(s)….original. Ok, maybe i don’t get out much and i have not had the opportunity to read EVryThing on the planet…but to me, you are utterly distinctive. I can’t offer the literary critique that this deserves, i am “almost” literate…never got to college ( i did drive by one once) to get the benefit of a formal education. Mine has been completely informal and i’m afraid it shows in my ignorance (at times…..ok, ok most of the time) I had to go look up the Greek deities to get a better grounding…and it has taken a while but after reading the fifteen books of Ovid’s “The Metamorphoses”…nahhhh, i just skimmed the first book and got a really bad headache…how you can put these deities in their place, is beyond me. But grasping enough, i have a better appreciation for; “This mono-colour hue surrounds loves duet --
Het’rosexuality, -- we’re a threat! To love a man -- still produces a frown --
In stratosphere Chaos we drown.” and the depth contained in those profound lines.
Sorry i’ve not been by earlier, got to make a mental note to stop by more often.
Blessings and best wishes, ~richard
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I adore this. Simply ADORE it.
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i love the greek mythology that you've put into this.but one minor spanish correction."Neustra" should be "nuestra"you transposed the "e" and the "u".that is all.if you would like to get into the language more,let me know.
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Further confirmation of why you are in my favorites. I suppose I am within the "heterosexual" audience that is chastised in the poem. Then again I live in the Bay Area and here, obviously, homosexuality is not viewed as threatening. Anyway, the imagery from Greek mythology is effective, as is the contrast between love and frustration. Nicely done.
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Yet another beautiful piece of work by you Gregg. Such beauty and such great imagery. I do have one suggestion though and it's only my opinion. Where you wrote, "And brush stroke paintings painted by Monet:" Maybe change it simply to "And brush stroked paintings by Monet: It just seems a little much with the word used twice side by side. But again, it's only a suggestion. Again, beautiful poem, I really enjoyed it. Be Well and Be Blessed.
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Peluche: Thank you for the Spanish lesson, and will change it to your suggestions, sounds much more romantic. Gregg
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Ok in the title, if you want to say "our love affair"; it should read "Nuestra" not nosotros. Nosotros is just a personal pronoun that streeses the subject and at the end you should add "de amor". However, if you meant it that way, that's up to you. Sorry about the spanish lesson. It just happens to be my field. Anyway, Overall, I thought it was a very interesting and rare piece with great imagery. Great work.
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Nice allusions to Ancient Greek mythology and love!
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