Satan
Lurking nearby
Ready to steal your soul
Transfer it quickly to his hell
There in sadness, to burn for evermore
Beware of his tempting manner
Turn your back seek the Lord
Prayers will thwart
Satan.
Author notes
Written February 27th, 2005.Option 7.Devil nearby.
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I like the last two lines, but I don't know what a ictameter is, and you haven't written the option number in the author notes.
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Short and too the point. Thanks for entering and good luck.
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Great work! I Loved this piece it was soooooooo strong and I Loved the title "Satan's Lurking(Rictameter)" its soooooo true it just drew me in and made the piece even stronger! excellent work and good luck in my contest!!!!
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So true, Satan is always lurking... keep your eye on the prize. Thank you for the entry. -N
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Thank you for entering. Very interesting poem.
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OH, I love this Bill. Very insightful and powerful message. I think this is one of the strongest short form poetry I have read of yours. Just awesome.
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Good Piece
wow. this is interesting. it has power, but i guess becuase I know satan isn;t real, but only the combined evil of man exists, that makes it a bit more difficult for me to embrace this piece entirely. keep up the good work. -
You've managed to do a lot with so few words, I'm impressed. I'm not familiar with this form, but it's interesting. Great write.
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rictameter..hmmm...new style for me.....not sure if I like it....Well, I did like the poem. The wording was great, though the background and colors you chose were WAY OFF!!!
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Very interesting. I'm not quite sure what to think. Different then most I have read. You've done a good job though! Keep writing!
All my love,
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This was a little different than your normal cheery fare. That must have been some sermon by your pastor this morning, or your wife's been really mean today
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I just don't know what to say! Wow! I am rarely speechless. You have captured so very much in such a perfectly written poem. Also, managed to get a type of alter call fitted into so few words. This is just a wonderful, wonderful job. I really like how you brought out the power of prayer! God Bless, Penny
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