~by Gregg Rowe~
(for Alain)
think
think
think
emotions of my mind
t
w
i
r
l
water droplets on
sawmill wheels
churn
churn
my equilibrium
equates my equal
enjoins my equality
a fanatic
rush
rush
rush
record
process
internalize
a buzzers
of the business
at the bar
My mother asks me
if I'm ready to leave
I ponder the question
before I fall
asleep
Author notes
Written February 27th, 2005
In a list
A contest entry
- .:Way with words:. by Dementia.
304 points, ended July 10, 2005, 17 entries
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Laughing Panther: You have no idea how much you have just uplifted my day by this message. I will take half-a-bow, reserving the other half for my audience who appreciates my work, because without them, I wouldn't have the support to continue on. Gregg
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Amazing
You are a great poet and it would be a tragedy if you ever stopped writing. You make young small poets like myself want to be more. Take a Bow -
Ladyofdeath:
a tortured soul beeseches you
I have personally meet this tortured soul...thanks for dropping in Gregg
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imaganitive....................i like it..............shows a lot of potential...........keep up the good work..........
a tortured soul beeseches you -
great write
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great
.... I really enjoyed this poem.... I especiallly enjoyed the format in which it was written in. It was a really neat and nifty way to do it..... It seems as if you have loads of talent and I applaud you for that... Good job dear.... Keep it up..
Jessie -
Hi Gregg,
I concur with the comments of others about the structure you have used to accentuate the content. The final stanza lines put a smashingly grand touch on this one...the casualness you display just before dropping off to sleep gives this reader a vivid sense of your peacefulness.
Great write and worthy of applause,
Del -
Nice
Very cute and original! It has a sort of calming effect and I love the background, goes along nicely. -
Small town loser: That was one effect I had in mind with the formualtion of the white space on the page, give it a swirling calming effect as the reader reads the erraticness of the voice that is displayed.
Thanks for dropping in and leaving a comment. Gregg
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great
I like the way you position the words to add affect, and I love the background, this is a very calming poem to me, I don't know if it was suppose to be lol, but that is one of the things I got out of it. Great write! -
I love how the shape of your words fits the meaning, and the alliterations are great. Another awesome write
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Nice job.
Haha.
I like this.
very cute.
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