I remember the day
You stole it all from me
I thought I was such a big girl
when you asked me
To help you drive
I was so damn proud of myself
For being a big girl
Until I felt your hand
Rising up my thigh
I squirmed
You held on tighter
You sick bastard
I cried, I screamed
Shh, you said, This is how I show you
That I LOVE you
How could you
That was the day
You took the colors from my world
Stole my innocence
The last day of my childhood
Author notes
This is just something I had to get out of my head. It may not be prize winning material, but every word is true, so please, don't be too harsh with the comments
Written February 26th, 2005
What did you think
Comments
1 - 16 of 16
-
Thank you for your comments on my poem. I really appreciate all the positive feedback I got on it. It was very hard for me to write, but I felt so much better once I got it out of my system. Thank you for reading it. It means alot to me that you took the time. I promise to return the favor.
-
beautifully sad
WOW I know this thing. Bravo I love it. KEEP UP THE WRITING. Bravo.
-
Thank you for commenting on this particular piece for me. It was especially hard to write, but I felt so much better after I had written it. i feel like things are really looking up for me.
-
You know, I had gotten really behind in my reading, and somehow I entirely overlooked this.
This is amazingly powerful, and stirs such strong emotions inside of me. I'm helping a very dear friend on the path to recovering from a history of abuse, and I can see her saying words very similar to this.
I commend you for your courage and strength, not just in confronting this, but in being able to share it as well. Here's to your continued progress in your quest, and please keep writing and sharing. -
It breaks my hear that such things happened to you. The line "You took the colors from my world" is so powerful and true. My heart goes out to you and hope you have many more good days than bad remembrances.
-
Thank you for reading and commenting. Thanx for the applause also. It's very personal to me, but when I get so much positive feedback and encouragement it makes it easier to write about it and to post it without any embarrassment. Thank you. I will return the favor as soon as I get a chance.
-
I know it's hard not having a childhood, learning the harshness of life before you should. You expressed that beautifully and with such honesty. Awesome write, and hugs to you.
-
that was very moving, my dad did the same thing, and i haven't seen him since, because yes he took away my childhood! AWESOME POEM!
-
Thank you for taking the time to read my piece. I agree, theres no rhyme, no standard form, but I felt so much better after writing it. Thanx for your comments.
-
Thank you so much for your applause, and your beautiful comments. I have never expressed my abuse this openly, always using metaphors or nice words, so I felt a little exposed at first. then I saw all of the comments on it. And that made me cry. Thank you so much for taking the time to read it.
-
Thanx so much for your comments. It was something that went on for a long time when I was a young child. My uncle was my abuser for 6 years. I can deal with it now, but I still have bad days, but thats when I write. thanx for your support and comments
-
Thank you for your comments. It was my uncle. He sexually abused me for 6 years when I was a young child. He died a long time ago. But I still have bad days. I have other ones about my childhood. Monster is along the same lines.
-
In my humble opinion, this is prize winning material. A childhood innocence cut tragically short by some sick bastard (sorry for the profanity but it's true). You are not alone in this. Excellent write I know it must have been hard to put this out there like that.
-
Wow!!! oh my god!!! how sad!!! is this about your dad??? This experience really sucks. I'm so sorry that this happened to you. What a jerk -- whoever it was!!!! I hope you aren't still victimized by this bastard -- whoever it might be. If you are, then kick him in the testicles next time. Kick him real hard! I hope you get better soon.... i know this has probably damaged you for life, but one day i'm sure you will be able to move on. nice work.
Edited on Feb 27 because 'typo... hehe
'.
-
Well, it may not rhyme or fit a standard form, but it's an honest and heartwrenching piece. I always appreciate that. Good job
-
applaud you on gettin this out, i know the feeling and its hard to talk about and to express hugs to you and know you are no alone (hugs)
Adding your comment:
1 - 16 of 16
5 old applause
