Twinkle twinkle sapphire hues
In your eyes clearest of blues
This a gift so rare to find
Given for our hearts to bind
Twinkle twinkle sapphire hues
In the sky for us to muse
Glowing glowing as the moon
Humming but a slender tune
Strolling sweetly hand in hand
Here upon the golden sand
Glowing glowing as the moon
Floating in a slate lagoon
Swaying swaying to and fro
As the wind does gently blow
Speaking nothing but a kiss
Being in nothing but sheer bliss
Swaying swaying to and fro
Dancing to the tide echo
Twinkle twinkle diamond ring
Brought upon an angels wing
So he lowers to one knee
The one to spend his life with me
Twinkle twinkle diamond ring
Listen as the bells do sing
Author notes
I found the inspiration for this piece in the strangest of places. I was in the shower listening to the radio, when there was a child singing a lullaby… but for the purposes of the advertisement, the ending was changed. That’s what I’ve done with this poem, I’ve played on the childrens lullaby “twinkle twinkle little star” to make this love poem. After all love does make you feel young again, however old you are. It proves inspiration is all around and even in the most bizarre of places. I hope you enjoy my poem.
Written February 26th, 2005
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AWESOME!!..This is an absolutely WONDERFUL poem..Its beautiful..Gorgeous..I dont think I could put it into words..You did a wonderful Job at capturing the feelings and puting it into this..The rhyme is wonerful..so flowy and beautiful in EVERY sense..I am truly speachless at what a wonerful poem this is!!..Great Job!!!!
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wow. this paints such a beautifully romantic picture, so perfect. the first two lines are what really caught my attention and make me want to read this, I was just writing a poem about my boyfriend and his pretty baby blues. And I love the use of a nursery rhyme, i have several like that myself, playing with them can make a piece so beautiful, or really haunting. I loved this one, it was gorgeous. *~IB~*
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This is truly poetry that makes you say awwwww...I love the structure and rhyme enlisted here as well as the overall feel to the piece. Best wishes
Ruth -
Aww this is the best I love it so much great great write keep it up
Kristen -
I liked how you patterned this after a children's song. It gave it a whimsical flow. The imagery is nice. I like all the details. I have to tell you that I usually don't like rhyming games. However, I'll make an exception in this case
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Very awesome and powerfully moving piece! I like the symbolism about love making you young again, it's so true!
The rhyme scheme for this is not typically what I like--because so often it's forced. This was anything but! Perfect rhythm, perfect flow, amazingly well done! The last verse was surely my favorite:
"Twinkle twinkle diamond ring
Brought upon an angels wing
So he lowers to one knee
The one to spend his life with me
Twinkle twinkle diamond ring
Listen as the bells do sing"
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